Native blue sage
4/6/5 haiku26 total reviews
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well written my friend and truly beautiful I enjoyed a beautiful scene that we are lucky to have as the summer sunshine lingers I am behind but vie been ill hoping to catch up over the next few days well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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This is well written my friend and truly beautiful I enjoyed a beautiful scene that we are lucky to have as the summer sunshine lingers I am behind but vie been ill hoping to catch up over the next few days well done regards Jill
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, Jill.
Gypsy
Comment from krys123
Hello Gypsy;
-you definitely captured the essence and spirit of summer especially Indian summer which comes in autumn is definitely hot. Especially in Sacramento where I used to live in the I remember it being very hot at times in the fall.
-Good structural consistency in your haiku or your first two lines of very definitely and grammatically connected and show and imagery that is descriptive and expressive.
-The Kigo is definitely expressed in the terms of "Indian summer", Inc. is a seasonal reference to the haiku.
-The satori sets the stage and gives the poem that aha moment and also directly and indirectly manifest the excitement of the conceptual theme which is subtle and definitive.
-Thanks for sharing this, Gypsy, and take care and may you have peace and harmony.
Alex
PS: I received an interesting gift om my birthday last week and it was an accumulation of over two hundred die of words on each one side of the die. It is called-"HAIKUBES"
What you do is you roll the dice, as many as you can hold in your hand, and you throw them, and they create words in succession to Create a haiku of your liking.
They have it on Amazon and it cost about $17.48. I thought that might be interesting for you to know.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Hello Gypsy;
-you definitely captured the essence and spirit of summer especially Indian summer which comes in autumn is definitely hot. Especially in Sacramento where I used to live in the I remember it being very hot at times in the fall.
-Good structural consistency in your haiku or your first two lines of very definitely and grammatically connected and show and imagery that is descriptive and expressive.
-The Kigo is definitely expressed in the terms of "Indian summer", Inc. is a seasonal reference to the haiku.
-The satori sets the stage and gives the poem that aha moment and also directly and indirectly manifest the excitement of the conceptual theme which is subtle and definitive.
-Thanks for sharing this, Gypsy, and take care and may you have peace and harmony.
Alex
PS: I received an interesting gift om my birthday last week and it was an accumulation of over two hundred die of words on each one side of the die. It is called-"HAIKUBES"
What you do is you roll the dice, as many as you can hold in your hand, and you throw them, and they create words in succession to Create a haiku of your liking.
They have it on Amazon and it cost about $17.48. I thought that might be interesting for you to know.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, Alex.
Gypsy
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You're very welcome, Gypsy.
Alex
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your vivid description of the sage plan and the season. Your use of alliteration accentuates your haiku (not that it matters, but I counted 4-7-5 syllables). Your picture selection and blue font are perfect accompaniments as well. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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I enjoyed your vivid description of the sage plan and the season. Your use of alliteration accentuates your haiku (not that it matters, but I counted 4-7-5 syllables). Your picture selection and blue font are perfect accompaniments as well. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 10-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, Joan.
Gypsy
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
The information you give about the blue Sage is very interesting, MariVal. . We have the same one in Australia I think, at least it looks the same. Possibly introduced here from America in the early days . I thought the Satori was quite astute, Giddy
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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The information you give about the blue Sage is very interesting, MariVal. . We have the same one in Australia I think, at least it looks the same. Possibly introduced here from America in the early days . I thought the Satori was quite astute, Giddy
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, Giddy.
Gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Gypsy
Smiles to your 4/6/5 haiku
It's amazing how you could us of the beauty of blue sage in during an Indian summer
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2017
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Hello Gypsy
Smiles to your 4/6/5 haiku
It's amazing how you could us of the beauty of blue sage in during an Indian summer
Gert
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words, Gert.
Gypsy
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You are welcome Gypsy
Gert
Comment from sandy montgomery
One reason I like this haiku is the masterful haiku. Sage is an important herb in many native american cultures. Used for spiritual rituals, medicinally, and as an herb. I love the line about the sage "basking" in the sun. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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One reason I like this haiku is the masterful haiku. Sage is an important herb in many native american cultures. Used for spiritual rituals, medicinally, and as an herb. I love the line about the sage "basking" in the sun. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Unspoken94
I will only review haiku's, 5-7-5's, that you post.
Yours are the only ones that make any sense!
I hope you are well. Each day I hold you in my
prayers. Still hoping you will be moving closer to
San Diego.
Bill
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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I will only review haiku's, 5-7-5's, that you post.
Yours are the only ones that make any sense!
I hope you are well. Each day I hold you in my
prayers. Still hoping you will be moving closer to
San Diego.
Bill
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Hello, Bill, Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. I am planning to move in with my daughter in Pasadena, maybe we could meet sometime but I know San Diego is not that close to Pasadena. Take care, my friend. Thank you for praying for me.
Gypsy
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We will find a way to meet. Moving to Pasadena is the right thing to do. You are too isolated up in Sacramento. -Bill
Comment from royowen
An excellent example of how to write an affective haiku, that has that marvellous satori line, no wonder you allow people into your world of understanding and thinking of the poetic haikuist, well done, good work, Gypsy, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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An excellent example of how to write an affective haiku, that has that marvellous satori line, no wonder you allow people into your world of understanding and thinking of the poetic haikuist, well done, good work, Gypsy, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
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Most welcome Gypsy
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This was such a clever poem, the incorporation of Native and Indian was genius Gypsy.
Lovely picture to accompany your words also
An excellent 4-6-5 Haiku my friend ..........
Mitchell
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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This was such a clever poem, the incorporation of Native and Indian was genius Gypsy.
Lovely picture to accompany your words also
An excellent 4-6-5 Haiku my friend ..........
Mitchell
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Ric Myworld
Pretty haikus and blue flowers make for a pleasant presentation to make me smile. Then, I start realizing that Indian summer is only the calm before the blast of winter to come. Thanks for sharing. :-)
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Pretty haikus and blue flowers make for a pleasant presentation to make me smile. Then, I start realizing that Indian summer is only the calm before the blast of winter to come. Thanks for sharing. :-)
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
