Comment from marybell1

Exceptional

I really enjoyed your humor for your poem "A Family Wedding". You rhymed it well and you chose a great photo.
All the best in the contest.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

So glad you enjoyed my poem and didn't take it literally. Thank you so much.

reply by marybell1 on 06-Oct-2017

You are welcome. It was a fun poem.
Marybell1.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi there;
sounds like a good time was had by all! Your cute and somewhat tongue in cheek look at a family wedding is something many of us can relate to. Though family weddings in my husband's family are nothing like my family - we have experienced many of the things you talk about.

Well done and cleverly crafted. I like the use of rhymes with the quartets, triolets, and couplets. They were all true rhymes and the piece had a pleasant rhythm,

~patty~

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2017

So pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks a lot.

Comment from rhonnie69

Average

This is a good story about someone getting married. It shows happy people having fun getting together to get closer together forever. People are dressed in their Sunday best. Yes. That's the spirit. Put your best foot forward when stepping into the wonderful world of Holy Matrimony. My friends, wedding service never takes too long. Especially service shared between Tracy and Shaun after Shaun carries his bride across the threshold of their residential dwelling place. There had been a really good turnout. There wasn't an empty pew. That says a lot about the turn on. A fight broke out. Hey, that was just a preview of the days that will come. When the episode is over the service will resume. As for the rest of the story (censored) isn't it reasonable that one might assume that nothing that happened that day, hadn't already happened before? And is more than likely going to happen again. Yet you people are a happy family regardless to the outside circumstances.
The best part or your story is this; it ended with a kiss. I see that as the beginning.
"CONGRATULATIONS."

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 Comment Written 03-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017

Thanks

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written family poem. At a wedding where all the family gather is always fun to look what the others do to.make fools of themselves witbou disappointment we laugh at some disasters.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017

Thanks for your comments.

Comment from Oatmeal

Good

The rhyming changed all through the ending of the poem. The stanzas were the same in the beginning but changed towards the end. The poem seemed a little on the sloppy side to me.

There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.

I look forward to seeing you again.

Love you,

Oatmeal

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017

Thanks

Comment from Possummagic

Excellent

That's the funniest wedding story I've ever heard. I'm an Aussie, born in Manchester, England. The sad thing about the whole sorry mess is it could just be true. Hilarious. PM

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

Thanks for reading. So pleased you appreciated it.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks the wedding family faced an accident but they wedding couples managed everything and reported the church and the wedding happily ended with the kiss; I liked.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

Thanks

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Well. Wow. My son got married last week, I'd say we were lucky, ha ha. The worst that happened were Fire ants, and giggling. This is a great entry, very entertaining, blessings...

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for your comments.

Comment from amada

Excellent

This is a very fun and different family wedding topic. I truly enjoyed it. it has great moments of hilarity. For example, "as Shaun's flys were undone and his knob fell out. " Heavens!

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

So pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks.

Comment from Kazzawin

Excellent

Hahahaha....
Sounds like the average British wedding. Loads of money spent so everyone can get wasted and have a fight.
You have written a humorous poem which is funny, cheeky, a little bit rude and an absolute joy to read.
Good luck in the contest : )

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

So glad you enjoyed it. Many thanks.