Finding The Horses
Only Ghost Horses4 total reviews
Comment from Octavia
That was pretty, pretty, pretty, bad, author. lol
Just bad enough to make me put down the book and never read it.
I got a good laugh.
Best of luck!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
That was pretty, pretty, pretty, bad, author. lol
Just bad enough to make me put down the book and never read it.
I got a good laugh.
Best of luck!
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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Smiles
Comment from Lucian Carter
Attempts to be bad can be more entertaining than attempts to be good. Here, another brave soul risks ridicule to publish the worst first sentence possible. Here it's character voice and punctuation (or lack thereof) used to make it look bad.
Thing is, it's not that bad. I could see a story starting this way and not going on to be awful. So I guess I have to deduct stars because it's not bad enough?
My head hurts.
Don't get me wrong, this is fun and it fits the contest well. Good luck with it,
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
Attempts to be bad can be more entertaining than attempts to be good. Here, another brave soul risks ridicule to publish the worst first sentence possible. Here it's character voice and punctuation (or lack thereof) used to make it look bad.
Thing is, it's not that bad. I could see a story starting this way and not going on to be awful. So I guess I have to deduct stars because it's not bad enough?
My head hurts.
Don't get me wrong, this is fun and it fits the contest well. Good luck with it,
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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Well you are first to really say it's not that bad so it is okay for you to feel this way hugs for you being so honest
Comment from beizanten
It is short and very Dull and confusing. I mean outcropping a spell what does that mean. Mean you had done well to fulfill the contest criteria. Good luck with the contest
Keep up the great work
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
It is short and very Dull and confusing. I mean outcropping a spell what does that mean. Mean you had done well to fulfill the contest criteria. Good luck with the contest
Keep up the great work
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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It is supposed to be a crappy sentence did you read the contest rule?
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Ha Ha. you know I read a piece very similar to this the other month, only it was written for real... lol
You could probably get away with this fine in dialect though.
Best of luck
GMG
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
Hi there,
Ha Ha. you know I read a piece very similar to this the other month, only it was written for real... lol
You could probably get away with this fine in dialect though.
Best of luck
GMG
Comment Written 29-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2017
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Thank you for your support