The Marionette
A Picture This Challenge30 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Bravo--an excellent write, Cass. I especially like the last two stanzas. Written well with a powerful message. I didn't write a poem for that Picture This post because I had my foot op and couldn't get in the mood. Getting better now, though. Marilyn
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
Bravo--an excellent write, Cass. I especially like the last two stanzas. Written well with a powerful message. I didn't write a poem for that Picture This post because I had my foot op and couldn't get in the mood. Getting better now, though. Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
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Dear Marilyn Thank you for your review and the awesome SIX stars. Yes, I looked for your entry, but remembered you had told me of your foot operation. I am glad that is over and you are recovering well. Er, You are getting better dear aren't you?? So nice to hear from you. Take care of yourself cheers Cass
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Hi Cass. Yes, getting better, but it's been a long haul. Now I have a partial weight-bearing boot. Soon, I hope to be on my own two feet. Thank you for asking. Hugs, Marilyn
Comment from l.raven
HI Cass, today some men don't marry for love...they marry for control and money...and if they can't have both...they are evil to live with...it is so sad my sweet friend...women think with their hearts...and when in love...they do all they can to stay...but there comes a time you have to leave...very well written sweet girl...and the perfect picture...love your poem you...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
HI Cass, today some men don't marry for love...they marry for control and money...and if they can't have both...they are evil to live with...it is so sad my sweet friend...women think with their hearts...and when in love...they do all they can to stay...but there comes a time you have to leave...very well written sweet girl...and the perfect picture...love your poem you...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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Dear Linda, Thank you for your review and the awesome SIX stars . Yes, all you say about men marrying for control is true. And you are right about a woman needing to have a place of her own and staying to make the marriage work. Well said, well spotted. Thanks again my angel Lol LoL XX L cheers Cass
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your sooooo welcome Cass...I know there are some good men out there...but they are very rare to find...sigh...I leave it up to God for me....sweet dreams my friend...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment from Hitcher
This is the second poem I have read with this particular picture as the inspiration. You have done a refined job of breathing life into it friend. Both poems were a pleasure to read and the picture oozes inspiration. well done!!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
This is the second poem I have read with this particular picture as the inspiration. You have done a refined job of breathing life into it friend. Both poems were a pleasure to read and the picture oozes inspiration. well done!!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Dear Friend ,Thank you for your review and the five stars. Yes, the picture IS inspirational. I took one look at it and said "poor little thing" and the poem took off from there. thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from mermaids
Excellent use of words that brings out emotions in the reader. I feel for this little girl on a string. But you also remind the reader how we often are held by strings. Your poetic form is smooth and fits the picture perfectly.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
Excellent use of words that brings out emotions in the reader. I feel for this little girl on a string. But you also remind the reader how we often are held by strings. Your poetic form is smooth and fits the picture perfectly.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Dear Mermaids, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Your comments echo those of many another made regarding this piece. The poem was written while my Muse (she who must be obeyed) was dictating, so I just got it down while it came. Thanks again. cheers Cass
Comment from frogbook
A wonderful interpretation and very well said. A lesson in life and letting others control your feelings and what you can or cannot do. Great description of the poor little thing.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
A wonderful interpretation and very well said. A lesson in life and letting others control your feelings and what you can or cannot do. Great description of the poor little thing.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Dear JoAnn, Thank you for your review and the five stars. The picture is so evocative with the sad little face gazing out with pleading eyes. I just wrote as it came to me and am quite pleased with the results. cheers Cass
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, The Marionette, takes a lot from the artwork and expresses the general sense of captivity. No one likes to think they are trapped and subject to the will of others. I like the unique AABCCB rhyme scheme that you developed here. Nice job with this.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
This poem, The Marionette, takes a lot from the artwork and expresses the general sense of captivity. No one likes to think they are trapped and subject to the will of others. I like the unique AABCCB rhyme scheme that you developed here. Nice job with this.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Dear Bill, Thank you for your review and the five stars. The rhyme scheme just "happened ", with no real thought of what to do. That's usually how I write when Madame la Muse is in charge. I am glad you liked it cheers Cass
Comment from JennaG
This is beautifully written! I like the comparison of the marionette to those who live their lives trapped in bad situations or relationships. It's an inspiring piece with extremely skillful rhythm and rhyme. It's been so interesting to read all the different interpretations of this artwork. Yours is definitely one of the best I've read. I really enjoyed reading your poem! :)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
This is beautifully written! I like the comparison of the marionette to those who live their lives trapped in bad situations or relationships. It's an inspiring piece with extremely skillful rhythm and rhyme. It's been so interesting to read all the different interpretations of this artwork. Yours is definitely one of the best I've read. I really enjoyed reading your poem! :)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Jenna, thank you for your review and the five stars. It is remarkable to see so many different interpretations of the same piece, and utterly delicious to receive such a generous accolade from you. thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from Irish Rain
So very true. We can never know our own music, or dance, while controlled by others. Cut those strings and live!! Wonderful, blessings...
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
So very true. We can never know our own music, or dance, while controlled by others. Cut those strings and live!! Wonderful, blessings...
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Irish Rain, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Your comments sum up my poem exactly. Thanks for reading cheers Cass
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Cass Carlton
you have written an pathos poem (in rhyme) that describe exactly how a child would feel as if she was under the command of one that doesn't know how to show love.
Gert
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
Hello Cass Carlton
you have written an pathos poem (in rhyme) that describe exactly how a child would feel as if she was under the command of one that doesn't know how to show love.
Gert
Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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Dear Gert, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Your take on the poem is slightly different from others and something tells me you speak from the heart. Well done if you have escaped the bonds that bound you. May life be all you want it to be. cheers Cass
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You are welcome Cass Carlton
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Comment from godlucifer
one's thought is one's life. one's control is one's past of controling life. sometime life is control by another body. sometime we can't control ourselves and when we let this happens,others control us. your poem was written with thoughts that rhyme. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
one's thought is one's life. one's control is one's past of controling life. sometime life is control by another body. sometime we can't control ourselves and when we let this happens,others control us. your poem was written with thoughts that rhyme. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
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Comment Written 14-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2017
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DEar Friend , Thank you for taking the time to read my poem. I hope you continue to do so. cheers Cass