Blurred lines
It's in your hands...19 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
You're absolutely right, Anonymous Poet.
Each of us has an opportunity to be either a blessing or a curse to those we love and interact with.
We can kick someone when they are down, or...
... we can try to uplift the spirits of those who are having a particularly bad day.
Do unto others as you would have others do unto you, right?
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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You're absolutely right, Anonymous Poet.
Each of us has an opportunity to be either a blessing or a curse to those we love and interact with.
We can kick someone when they are down, or...
... we can try to uplift the spirits of those who are having a particularly bad day.
Do unto others as you would have others do unto you, right?
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thank you so very much, Dean, I appreciate your kind comments as always. Hugs! Hope your feeling better:))
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I'm feeling much better now, thank you.
As for the review, you're more than welcome.
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Awe, I'm so glad. I love your huggie emoji's :)
Comment from jenintorre
I love the song, "blurred Lines" by Robin Thicke and I love your poem too.
So much said in so few words. Well done. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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I love the song, "blurred Lines" by Robin Thicke and I love your poem too.
So much said in so few words. Well done. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thank you so very much, my friend.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 2-4-2 poem. We have both within us. The one we feed the most will becomes prominent in our lives. We have the choice which spirit you want to serve.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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A very well-written 2-4-2 poem. We have both within us. The one we feed the most will becomes prominent in our lives. We have the choice which spirit you want to serve.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thank you so very much, Sandra, I appreciate it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not sure about the last line, maybe it should read 'choose wisely'?, then it would not be a 2-4-2 poem, I love the sentiments here and your words are food for thought, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Not sure about the last line, maybe it should read 'choose wisely'?, then it would not be a 2-4-2 poem, I love the sentiments here and your words are food for thought, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2017
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Thank you so very much, Dolly.
Comment from Wabigoon
I am inclined to say do not separate the light and dark. See them as one. Peter Pan tried to do it, didn't work. God did it, seperated the light and the dark and we have been trying to have it one way or the other ever since.
Blend them/
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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I am inclined to say do not separate the light and dark. See them as one. Peter Pan tried to do it, didn't work. God did it, seperated the light and the dark and we have been trying to have it one way or the other ever since.
Blend them/
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Thank you, my friend. Hence the title, "Blurred lines"
Comment from DonandVicki
There is a lot of meaning in your poem. I am impressed by how much you have implied using so very few words. The art work enhances your work.very nicely written. Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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There is a lot of meaning in your poem. I am impressed by how much you have implied using so very few words. The art work enhances your work.very nicely written. Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Thank you so very much for your kind comments, my friend.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Oops, your first line has 3 syllables not 2 as required. The other lines are ok. The image is great. Your message is great [& true]. All of us choose what we are & how we act. This will be a great entry if you fix the 1st line. I will return to see. [restored star]. Jan
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Oops, your first line has 3 syllables not 2 as required. The other lines are ok. The image is great. Your message is great [& true]. All of us choose what we are & how we act. This will be a great entry if you fix the 1st line. I will return to see. [restored star]. Jan
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Awww... CRAP!!! lol Thank you so much, I can't believe I didn't catch that. I changed it to "Bad" I appreciate it.
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a lovely image that depicts your verse well.
Good - Evil
Blessing or Curse-
Choose wise ...
After reading it, I felt a need to say, no--choose wisely! But wisely wouldn't fit the syllable count.
Maybe, something like:
Make choice.
You decide.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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This is a lovely image that depicts your verse well.
Good - Evil
Blessing or Curse-
Choose wise ...
After reading it, I felt a need to say, no--choose wisely! But wisely wouldn't fit the syllable count.
Maybe, something like:
Make choice.
You decide.
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Thank you so very much, my friend, I appreciate it.
Comment from Janilou
Indeed, profound advice in this very short poem. I am not sure how I am supposed to write enough about these three short lines to satisfy FanStory's requirement for a review.
Choose wise.
That could be taken as a shortened version of choose wisely or left as choose wise -- choose to be wise and your choices will help you stay on the right side of the equation.
Great food for thought.
Jan
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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Indeed, profound advice in this very short poem. I am not sure how I am supposed to write enough about these three short lines to satisfy FanStory's requirement for a review.
Choose wise.
That could be taken as a shortened version of choose wisely or left as choose wise -- choose to be wise and your choices will help you stay on the right side of the equation.
Great food for thought.
Jan
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Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Jan. Lol, your review is fine and meets requirements. I know sometimes it is hard when it is so little. I chose "wise" instead of wisely because it's a 2 syllable line:)) Happy it works. Your comments are much appreciated.
