Geoffrey's Musings.
Viewing comments for Chapter 56 "A Wall Scrawl."A book of Stories, Essays and Poetry.
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Comment from michaelcahill
HA! Yep, I finally made it.
You know, this reminds me in the best way of Dr. Seuss. That last line is what ties it together perfectly. I think kids would get a huge kick out of this if it were read aloud to them. They could certainly relate to it. I'll try and stop by more often. I don't know who sped the world up. It seems the older and slower I get, the faster it goes. LOL mike
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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HA! Yep, I finally made it.
You know, this reminds me in the best way of Dr. Seuss. That last line is what ties it together perfectly. I think kids would get a huge kick out of this if it were read aloud to them. They could certainly relate to it. I'll try and stop by more often. I don't know who sped the world up. It seems the older and slower I get, the faster it goes. LOL mike
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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IU understand completely dear Bro. Actually we are not hankering to stick around here any longer than the Master decides. Do you remember the old gospel song "This world is not my home, I'm just -a- passin' through...etc" We are so keen for the Lord to come and take us outa here. Thanks for the encouragement. Good you came AFTER the extra verse got added.
Comment from tfawcus
How true! Our perspective on things changes as we grow taller! This reminds me of a cartoon I saw years ago of a little boy holding his father's hand in the snow - which came up to the top of dad's boots and pretty much up to the boy's neck!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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How true! Our perspective on things changes as we grow taller! This reminds me of a cartoon I saw years ago of a little boy holding his father's hand in the snow - which came up to the top of dad's boots and pretty much up to the boy's neck!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Yep glad you enjoyed it I think you were one of the ones that encouraged me to say more.
Comment from Leftkansas
Very well written. I would say the style is a Sankey Original. It reminded me of the old adage, "Good things come to those who wait, and pay attention." A very smooth read.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Very well written. I would say the style is a Sankey Original. It reminded me of the old adage, "Good things come to those who wait, and pay attention." A very smooth read.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks for the Sankey original style label. The poem was a lot shorter without the answer to my problem. I was encouraged to go into more details.
Comment from Teri7
I enjoyed reading this very cute poem about when the small child was small and it had to be dragged along by it's mom. I think that must be true for most all mom's. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I enjoyed reading this very cute poem about when the small child was small and it had to be dragged along by it's mom. I think that must be true for most all mom's. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 16-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks Sis. I wrote the first bit before but many said it needed more information as to what my problem was; so appreciate you coming by.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Trying to solve all the world's problems, and knowing it all, only to find out you really do not, and can not, would be rather frustrating indeed as this well written poem depicts.
Perhaps you should have started your own contest.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Trying to solve all the world's problems, and knowing it all, only to find out you really do not, and can not, would be rather frustrating indeed as this well written poem depicts.
Perhaps you should have started your own contest.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2017
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Hehe funny man! Thanks for the great review I might have some more to this later. Some have expressed it needed more. Hang around.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sankey, it's a great little poem. I really liked it. I wouldn't have a clue what form it is, so I'm afraid I can't help you there. I liked the photo to go with it. Very apt. Al the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Hi Sankey, it's a great little poem. I really liked it. I wouldn't have a clue what form it is, so I'm afraid I can't help you there. I liked the photo to go with it. Very apt. Al the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2017
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Thanks Ulla Thal or some others want me to add more so might work on that. I did figure out the problem so might do another verse about that.
Comment from Thal1959
It doesn't have a specific form, Geoff. Just call it a quatrain. It is probably the result of a thought you had and you then wrote it down, probably intended to be use latter. Possibly a muse that never became the full poem you were thinking of.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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It doesn't have a specific form, Geoff. Just call it a quatrain. It is probably the result of a thought you had and you then wrote it down, probably intended to be use latter. Possibly a muse that never became the full poem you were thinking of.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Thanks for that some others have said Quatrain. I never was into obscure Poetic forms. Maybe I need to learn more.
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A poem should only be as long as it needs to be. Yet, short poems will often get questioned for their brevity. But this can be a good thing, Geoff. I have read a few short poems here on FS, and I would tell the reviewer that it is too short because it got me interested and was going great, but then ended abruptly. If a reader feels a poem is too short, it means they want more, which means they were enjoying it.
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Well thanks for that maybe I will come back to it later. I am sure i can come up with a bit extra. This was just sitting around and I found it when doing a cleanup in my study.
Comment from GWinterwin
Good words with rhyming, and a picture that has me guessing what the message is. You did a good job of showing how frustration could come about with something where we can't figure out the message.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Good words with rhyming, and a picture that has me guessing what the message is. You did a good job of showing how frustration could come about with something where we can't figure out the message.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Thanks Bro I did figure out the problem. Took 60 years though. I posted about it in an earlier response to a review. In short, I used to wonder why as a kid my feet got so sore following my Mum around the city. One day I was watching a little kid with their Mum or Dad, and it finally dawned on me for every step the Mum or Dad took...the poor little mite had to take two! Then I understood!
Comment from Knighteagle
I am not sure what style it would be called either, but it's quite good. I often don't know what the problems that drive me up wall are either. Though in writing it usually comes out. Thank you for sharing this well written short. Good flow, and something many can relate to.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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I am not sure what style it would be called either, but it's quite good. I often don't know what the problems that drive me up wall are either. Though in writing it usually comes out. Thank you for sharing this well written short. Good flow, and something many can relate to.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2017
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Thanks Knight eagle I think another new friend. I do try and reciprocate and check all my new friends' stuff out as I have time. I posted back a couple of reviews about what I thought the problem had been that took me 60 years to figure out. Have a rfead back through, and thanks again.
Comment from Laine Carson
I can drive myself insane contemplating answers to questions or solutions to problems. I find that giving my mind a rest tends to help the wheels turn a bit easier but I just cannot allow that most of the time. I could totally identify with your poem. I do not know what type of poem it is except that it was an enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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I can drive myself insane contemplating answers to questions or solutions to problems. I find that giving my mind a rest tends to help the wheels turn a bit easier but I just cannot allow that most of the time. I could totally identify with your poem. I do not know what type of poem it is except that it was an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2017
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Hi another new friend. I believe in reciprocating and I will look you up as I have time. A couple have said my poem might be a Quatrain type. Like you I am lost on poetic forms. I appreciate your lovely review. If you look back through the reviews you will see i have commented on what I think it was that I could not figure out but I did when I was 60. (6 years ago). Thanks again, will check you out later.
