Turmoil
Close Minded Parents11 total reviews
Comment from apky
I'm convinced your excellent little story is a
great tribute to the people you had in mind
as you wrote it.
A little correction for your author's notes:
I've know(n) several people who have gone through this turmoil, and I have felt terrible for their internal strife. It's a horrible position for anyone to be in.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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I'm convinced your excellent little story is a
great tribute to the people you had in mind
as you wrote it.
A little correction for your author's notes:
I've know(n) several people who have gone through this turmoil, and I have felt terrible for their internal strife. It's a horrible position for anyone to be in.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017
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Thank you. I'll make the change. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Spitfire
the body of a man, but the mind and emotions of a woman-- how hard to try not to cry or feel sensitive over a movie.
I think this would have more punch if the parents gave him a buzz cut. Allowing the long hair is at least one concession. To think about suicide suggests how much we crave our parents' unconditional love.
mores.
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the body of a man, but the mind and emotions of a woman-- how hard to try not to cry or feel sensitive over a movie.
I think this would have more punch if the parents gave him a buzz cut. Allowing the long hair is at least one concession. To think about suicide suggests how much we crave our parents' unconditional love.
mores.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2017
Comment from Winslow
Dear Writer,
Trapped by societal mores. A prisoner who is surrounded by invisible bars. It is sad
I hope this is not biographical since the anguish and pain your character is feeling comes through to the reader. Well composed 100 word story.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Writer,
Trapped by societal mores. A prisoner who is surrounded by invisible bars. It is sad
I hope this is not biographical since the anguish and pain your character is feeling comes through to the reader. Well composed 100 word story.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
Comment from kiwigirl2821
This is a thoughtful expression of this particular dilemma. I have seen many instances and documentaries about this very thing and I can only thank God I was born a woman with all the womanly emotions, thoughts and dreams. You have handled this with a surgeons delicate knife. Good luck and thank you. xoxo Kiwi
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This is a thoughtful expression of this particular dilemma. I have seen many instances and documentaries about this very thing and I can only thank God I was born a woman with all the womanly emotions, thoughts and dreams. You have handled this with a surgeons delicate knife. Good luck and thank you. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
Comment from doggymad
Well done on writing this piece. I will not question whether it is fiction or not. I believe that you have captured the essence of those who struggle with gender identity.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
Freda
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Well done on writing this piece. I will not question whether it is fiction or not. I believe that you have captured the essence of those who struggle with gender identity.
Best of luck in the contest
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
Comment from humpwhistle
I think you've made a good and valid point.
One that can have dire consequences.
My only objection is to your mention of hair length.
To me, that's a superficiality, a token that obfuscates
the seriousness of your poem.
Just one man's opinion.
Peace, Lee
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I think you've made a good and valid point.
One that can have dire consequences.
My only objection is to your mention of hair length.
To me, that's a superficiality, a token that obfuscates
the seriousness of your poem.
Just one man's opinion.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
Comment from kathleenspalding
Excellent, well written story does a great job capturing the conflict a trans (or wanting to be trans) person goes through. Thank you for writing and raising awareness. Good luck in the contest!
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Excellent, well written story does a great job capturing the conflict a trans (or wanting to be trans) person goes through. Thank you for writing and raising awareness. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
Comment from giraffmang
You have found a good theme/subject matter for this competition, one which affects so many.
I need to change into the person that I was born to be. - I found this line quite interesting in your story as it opens up a lot of questions about the importance of mind over matter so to speak. if someone is born to be something, is that the intellectual born or the physical. The physical would be dominant from the start as the psyche takes longer to develop within that dominance.
I think this is one of the issues that a lot of religious groups struggle with within gender identity. If life is divine and a divine gift, then gender reassignment would be demonstrating the infallibility of God... not that that is my standpoint but it raises questions and discussion.
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You have found a good theme/subject matter for this competition, one which affects so many.
I need to change into the person that I was born to be. - I found this line quite interesting in your story as it opens up a lot of questions about the importance of mind over matter so to speak. if someone is born to be something, is that the intellectual born or the physical. The physical would be dominant from the start as the psyche takes longer to develop within that dominance.
I think this is one of the issues that a lot of religious groups struggle with within gender identity. If life is divine and a divine gift, then gender reassignment would be demonstrating the infallibility of God... not that that is my standpoint but it raises questions and discussion.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
Comment from tfawcus
This must be one of the hardest hurdles to cross in the relationship between parents and their offspring, The concept of unconditional love is tested here and sadly sometimes found to be wanting. Yet, in these more liberated times, it is much more possible to achieve that self-identity independently. Your story shows that well.
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This must be one of the hardest hurdles to cross in the relationship between parents and their offspring, The concept of unconditional love is tested here and sadly sometimes found to be wanting. Yet, in these more liberated times, it is much more possible to achieve that self-identity independently. Your story shows that well.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2017
Comment from beizanten
An intriguing and well written beginning, you capture my attention. A well written second paragraph. A powerful third paragraph. Overall a short yet pretty powerful story from a talented writer, keep up the good work!
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An intriguing and well written beginning, you capture my attention. A well written second paragraph. A powerful third paragraph. Overall a short yet pretty powerful story from a talented writer, keep up the good work!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2017
