Boiler Room
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Section 2 - Part 3: Ghost Sighting"Cody's worst nightmare from Hell becomes reality!
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Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hello Bret,
am I missing something. It seems as if I skipped over a chapter or so. I read the first one when the little boy was murdered rest room stall. Then I read the chapter
when Justin Martindale is suspected of murdering his girlfriend Peggy Morris. Is Cody seeing the ghost of the little boy who was killed in the bathroom stall?
This is another well written piece but I feel like I'm missing something.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Hello Bret,
am I missing something. It seems as if I skipped over a chapter or so. I read the first one when the little boy was murdered rest room stall. Then I read the chapter
when Justin Martindale is suspected of murdering his girlfriend Peggy Morris. Is Cody seeing the ghost of the little boy who was killed in the bathroom stall?
This is another well written piece but I feel like I'm missing something.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Cody is always a different story from anything else I am writing.
Glad you enjoyed this portion of Cody.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from Rasmine
Brett,
My whistle is dripping with anticipation :P I like reading ghostly stories but this is so short. I know you are giving tidbits, actually I like that better, so I will shut up. :P
My favorite sentence: And, he's quaking like a leaf in a gale!"
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Brett,
My whistle is dripping with anticipation :P I like reading ghostly stories but this is so short. I know you are giving tidbits, actually I like that better, so I will shut up. :P
My favorite sentence: And, he's quaking like a leaf in a gale!"
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion.
Your comments, support, and reviews appreciated.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
Comment from emptypage
Good chapter. Well-paced, good dialogue, and it leaves readers waiting for the next bit.
"What do you mean by "Cody's been hurt?" Lynda," Sheriff Daniels inquired allowing what he'd been informed of to process in his mind. ---This sentence is all kinds of messed up. Only one kind of quotation marks. The question mark in the wrong place... you must've been speed writing, LOL. Try this: "What do you mean by 'Cody's been hurt,' Lynda?" Or you can say, "What do you mean Cody's been hurt?"
Same problem here: "What do you mean by "something has terrified him"?"
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Good chapter. Well-paced, good dialogue, and it leaves readers waiting for the next bit.
"What do you mean by "Cody's been hurt?" Lynda," Sheriff Daniels inquired allowing what he'd been informed of to process in his mind. ---This sentence is all kinds of messed up. Only one kind of quotation marks. The question mark in the wrong place... you must've been speed writing, LOL. Try this: "What do you mean by 'Cody's been hurt,' Lynda?" Or you can say, "What do you mean Cody's been hurt?"
Same problem here: "What do you mean by "something has terrified him"?"
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Appreciate your comments, support, and nits.
Keep them coming. They help to keep my writing focused.
Comment from Sankey
Great chapter. Wondering if Cody's suspicions might be true?? Now for some spags. The following is inside double expression marks thanks to Thal I know it should now be single expression marks surrounding...["](')Cody's been hurt?(')["]
Same as above single expression marks in following seeing inside doubles...["](')something has terrified him(')["]
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Great chapter. Wondering if Cody's suspicions might be true?? Now for some spags. The following is inside double expression marks thanks to Thal I know it should now be single expression marks surrounding...["](')Cody's been hurt?(')["]
Same as above single expression marks in following seeing inside doubles...["](')something has terrified him(')["]
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this portion.
Always appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
Part three of you story was really interesting to read. You sure are great at writing books. It seems that I never even get a poem posted anymore.
I'm going to try to get one up today if I can.
Kat
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Hi Brett,
Part three of you story was really interesting to read. You sure are great at writing books. It seems that I never even get a poem posted anymore.
I'm going to try to get one up today if I can.
Kat
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate your comments and support.
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Brett, I always like to read what you write. Kat
Comment from Bill Schott
This section of the story, The Boiler Room: Ghost Sighting, gives us some time to reassemble the relationships between players and how things are working towards reconciliation. The idea that a dead man walks makes me think someone who wants to be dead is having a hard time maintaining his corpse status. Onward.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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This section of the story, The Boiler Room: Ghost Sighting, gives us some time to reassemble the relationships between players and how things are working towards reconciliation. The idea that a dead man walks makes me think someone who wants to be dead is having a hard time maintaining his corpse status. Onward.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter of the saga of Cody Schroder and his newest adventure.
Your comments, support, and reviews always appreciated.
Comment from apky
"Sheriff Daniels," he cordially said (when as - use one or the other, not both) he answered the call.
"What do you mean by "Cody's been hurt?" Lynda, (You need the question mark after "Lynda" - it's not Lynda who reported in qusrttion form; it's the Sheriff asking Lynda)
"What are you talking about, Lynda?" Sheriff Daniels curiously wondered upon hearing her last comment, "What do you mean by ("something has terrified him" - You should leave out the quotes here. The reader knows the sheriff is quoting Lynda)?"
"Neither do I, Sheriff. But, Cody is convinced of what he saw. Or at least, thinks he saw," Lynda said (delete this redundant-telling him), "his eyes have been glued on the front door of my shoppette since Matt and I picked him up off the floor. And, he's quaking like a leaf in a gale!"
He disconnected the transmission stating, "Got to love that boy." ~ loved this one.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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"Sheriff Daniels," he cordially said (when as - use one or the other, not both) he answered the call.
"What do you mean by "Cody's been hurt?" Lynda, (You need the question mark after "Lynda" - it's not Lynda who reported in qusrttion form; it's the Sheriff asking Lynda)
"What are you talking about, Lynda?" Sheriff Daniels curiously wondered upon hearing her last comment, "What do you mean by ("something has terrified him" - You should leave out the quotes here. The reader knows the sheriff is quoting Lynda)?"
"Neither do I, Sheriff. But, Cody is convinced of what he saw. Or at least, thinks he saw," Lynda said (delete this redundant-telling him), "his eyes have been glued on the front door of my shoppette since Matt and I picked him up off the floor. And, he's quaking like a leaf in a gale!"
He disconnected the transmission stating, "Got to love that boy." ~ loved this one.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
Keep these nits coming.
Comment from Ricky1024
"This Chapter reaffirmed Earl Anthony Schroder's Apparent death the previous two, years."
"Cody's in bad shape but is getting the necessary care needed."
"The Sherri ff is assisting."
"Nice Work here again Brett."
Dr. Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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"This Chapter reaffirmed Earl Anthony Schroder's Apparent death the previous two, years."
"Cody's in bad shape but is getting the necessary care needed."
"The Sherri ff is assisting."
"Nice Work here again Brett."
Dr. Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Always appreciate your comments, support, and reviews.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I so love the way you write these tidbits of cody and let us take it from there till you give us another chapter. Cody is habit forming and your writing is excellent
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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I so love the way you write these tidbits of cody and let us take it from there till you give us another chapter. Cody is habit forming and your writing is excellent
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Your comments, support, and reviews are so appreciated.
Habit-forming? Yes, I have been accused of Cody being that way before.
A good habit, I hope!
Comment from bmethner
Intriguing story. The words flow smoothly depicting the small town life in Astatula twisting the mystery that drives the story. The dialogue creates the characters nicely. Interesting read.
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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Intriguing story. The words flow smoothly depicting the small town life in Astatula twisting the mystery that drives the story. The dialogue creates the characters nicely. Interesting read.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Appreciate you taking the time to read it and to write a review.
Much more to come so I invite you to ride along.
