Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Hi
This such is a wonderful read, capturing the image of dragons brilliantly, very sublime, almost charmed in its presentation.
Nice echoing of sounds throughout, It's kind of surreal almost, very dreamlike and impressionistic.
Absolutely lovely.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2017

Thanks for the great review. Glad you got such feelings from it.

Joan

Comment from Natali Holden

Excellent

I liked this poem for the most part. It has a great picture and the lines were mostly enjoyable. But this one line lost and confused me. "in strength and breathe fire, it is said." Other than that, a good poem. I like the title a lot. Nice job!
Natali ;)

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017

Thanks for the review. The in strength is continuing from the previous line. They have no peers in strength. Meaning there are no beings stronger than they are.

Joan

reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017

Thanks much for the review. The in strength flows from the line above. They have no peer in strength which means there are no being stronger than they are. I changed that line a little.

Joan

reply by Natali Holden on 25-Aug-2017

You're welcome. That works much better. Thanks!

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks about dragons can bring hope and not just dread and can be friends and protect a town from evils' hands, so there is no fear but happy living; I liked.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017

Glad you liked the idea of dragons being helpful and not just hurtful.

Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing

dp

reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017

Thanks for the review. Glad you liked the idea that dragons can be helpful and not just hurtful.

dp

Comment from loismddavis

Good

a great presentation--dragons no less. a small fantasy poem using your imagination . good rhyming but I could not identify with dragons but perhaps it is a metaphor and I am not perceptive enough to get it.

 Comment Written 25-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017

Thank you for the time you took to read and review. I will check it out for a metaphor.

dp

reply by the author on 25-Aug-2017

Thanks for taking the time to read and review. No metaphor just a story.

Joan

Comment from misstory9197

Good

Effective use of this poetic format and of the use of a mythical creature to depict befriending one's enemies (including the internal ones), to a positive end. Your early lines are beautifully done: "When dragons are spied in the sky all mouths, in a second, go dry. All things darken while their wings spread
across the sun inspiring fear." Very nice - you painted a vivid picture here.

The format is a difficult one, and the poem mostly flowed for me, but I would make the following suggestion: in the sixth line, changing the wording to "fire breath" to maintain consistency. You're referring to the qualities a dragon possesses, and the wording "breathe fire" was less a quality than an action. I would also suggest something in the seventh line about taming the dragon to be friendly instead of the allusion to the dragon possibly being a friend. I think it would help the strength of the poem overall in keeping with the theme and be perhaps a bit more descriptive. I wanted more of your vivid words when I got to that part.

Very creative and original ideas in this work.

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017

Thanks for the review and the possible changes. I will check them out.

dp

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

DP,

I really like this poem about the dragons of ancient times. *smile* Do you know that I believe dragons actually existed at one time? There is enough information in the Bible to make ME think they were real at some point. *smile* Call me crazy, I guess. hahaha In other words, I liked your poem!!

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017

Thanks very much. I would like to believe that too. That maybe one day they could wake up from a long nap and come visit us as friends.

dp

Comment from Laine Carson

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this poem even though I am not a true dragon fan, I kind of like yours. I like to think that since they are not real they are not mandated to be evil. Your poem offered hope for a positive experience with the dreaded beast. Nice job!

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2017

Thanks for the review and high rating. I am glad I gave hope that dragons can be helpful.
I have always thought that any being has a chance to be good or evil.

dragonpoet

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem about dragons. Not every one sees the dragon as a friend. They appear to be fierce and will spit fire on you for the slightest reason. The Chinese believe they are good luck.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017

Thanks for the kind words of encouragement Sandra.

Joan

Comment from brenda faye curtis

Good

I enjoyed the images this poem brought to mind, because I did experience a twinge of fear. It is raw emotion that makes us feel truly alive.

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.

dragon

reply by brenda faye curtis on 21-Aug-2017

You are welcome.

Comment from nbonner

Excellent

Good poem about dragons. I like the imagery and descriptive words used in this poem. The flow is great. Thank you for sharing, N.B.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2017

Thanks for the kind words and all the stars.

dp