Cedar Key
What are you doing in this place?9 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your rhymed couplets, refrain and storytelling in these lyrics. Your having the narrator take responsibility was quite effective. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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I admired your rhymed couplets, refrain and storytelling in these lyrics. Your having the narrator take responsibility was quite effective. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed these song lyrics.
Appreciate you taking the time to read them and to write a review.
Comment from sunnilicious
Good artwork choice. Great story in a poem. Your narrative storytelling was nicely done. Well thought out and clearly written. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Great work. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Good artwork choice. Great story in a poem. Your narrative storytelling was nicely done. Well thought out and clearly written. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Great work. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 21-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed these song lyrics.
Appreciate you taking the time to read them and to write a review.
Comment from Bill Schott
These lyrics for a song, Cedar Key, tell a tale that many know well. This one has the single mother, the crappy job, the dramatic middle and a on the run finale. Just needs some pickin' now.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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These lyrics for a song, Cedar Key, tell a tale that many know well. This one has the single mother, the crappy job, the dramatic middle and a on the run finale. Just needs some pickin' now.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Appreciate you taking the time to read them and to write a review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about a mother's concern about her child who is about to maintain a living that mother would never tolerate but she is helpless and finds how child makes a living in Cedar Key; I liked.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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This speaks about a mother's concern about her child who is about to maintain a living that mother would never tolerate but she is helpless and finds how child makes a living in Cedar Key; I liked.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Appreciate you taking the time to read them and to write a review.
Comment from EverInParadise
Very nice and I can almost hear the beat it is played with. Good country western style. Reminiscent of the story in "Lucille", but with a happier twist. Hope this does well for you.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Very nice and I can almost hear the beat it is played with. Good country western style. Reminiscent of the story in "Lucille", but with a happier twist. Hope this does well for you.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Appreciate you taking the time to read them and to write a review.
Comment from Possummagic
I loved this song, I just wished I had the music to go with the lyrics. It's really well written and highlights one of life's most difficult challenges; raising a child alone.
Just one suggestion, we are requested not to put the title on the body of the piece. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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I loved this song, I just wished I had the music to go with the lyrics. It's really well written and highlights one of life's most difficult challenges; raising a child alone.
Just one suggestion, we are requested not to put the title on the body of the piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Do not understand the suggestion. Would like to know where the "not to put the title on the body of the piece" comes from?
Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Appreciate you taking the time to read them and to write a review.
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When you enter the piece there is a place for the title
Followed by a description of your piece
Then when you post the body of your work it says " do not include the title" hope I'm right and hope that helps!
Comment from Mustang Patty
Great lyrics and it sounds like a perfect Country Western song. There's the heartbreak, the single mom, and a cute little boy named Danny. I like the structure of the verses and the chorus, and I enjoyed the tale within.
A nit: 'Wearing her dresses way to (too) tight'
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Great lyrics and it sounds like a perfect Country Western song. There's the heartbreak, the single mom, and a cute little boy named Danny. I like the structure of the verses and the chorus, and I enjoyed the tale within.
A nit: 'Wearing her dresses way to (too) tight'
Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Your comments, support, and nit catching appreciated.
Comment from Ricky1024
"I enjoyed this "Song Makes the Lyrics Contest Entry."
"From High School to Mother to Bar Maid."
"At least "The "Quarter-Back" that "Backed Out."
"Backed back in!"
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Theme and Imagery worked well together."
"Flowed well, read well, with no Grammar Issues."
"Adjective Content and Objective Content were excellent."
"Descriptive Measures were perfect."
Complete Synopsis-*****
"Great!"
"Good luck with this."
Dr. Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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"I enjoyed this "Song Makes the Lyrics Contest Entry."
"From High School to Mother to Bar Maid."
"At least "The "Quarter-Back" that "Backed Out."
"Backed back in!"
...
Theme and Imagery worked well together."
"Flowed well, read well, with no Grammar Issues."
"Adjective Content and Objective Content were excellent."
"Descriptive Measures were perfect."
Complete Synopsis-*****
"Great!"
"Good luck with this."
Dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Curly Girly
This is a really well-presented poem that tells a story about a woman's life.
I do not envy her, years later, making a living in Cedar Key and still pouring whiskey.
It seems as if her youth has passed, only the lines on her face map her history.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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This is a really well-presented poem that tells a story about a woman's life.
I do not envy her, years later, making a living in Cedar Key and still pouring whiskey.
It seems as if her youth has passed, only the lines on her face map her history.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2017
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Glad you enjoyed these lyrics.
Your comments, support, and the review appreciated.
