one dog
A short story13 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a really sweet 100 word story about little Smokey and the scoot mobile. You used very good descriptive wording. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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This is a really sweet 100 word story about little Smokey and the scoot mobile. You used very good descriptive wording. Best wishes in the contest! Teri
Comment Written 26-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Thal1959
This is really a very interesting story for something that can be related to the reader in only 100 words. The image works perfectly with the storyline. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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This is really a very interesting story for something that can be related to the reader in only 100 words. The image works perfectly with the storyline. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great weekend.
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hmmm...this is written as if it were spoken in broken English, much like someone from another country who is still learning the English language.
Sentences like: "I have hit him a couple of times with it, just by mistake: his or my one." would read much better as: "I have hit him with it a couple of times by mistake--his or my own."
And the following: 'How many miles we made? ONE TO HUNDRED.' should read something like: "How many miles have we traveled?
About one to a hundred."
Anyhow, just some observations for you to consider.
Good luck.
~Dean
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Hmmm...this is written as if it were spoken in broken English, much like someone from another country who is still learning the English language.
Sentences like: "I have hit him a couple of times with it, just by mistake: his or my one." would read much better as: "I have hit him with it a couple of times by mistake--his or my own."
And the following: 'How many miles we made? ONE TO HUNDRED.' should read something like: "How many miles have we traveled?
About one to a hundred."
Anyhow, just some observations for you to consider.
Good luck.
~Dean
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind and understanding review, Anonymous. Have a great week. I will make some changes.
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My pleasure, good luck. :)
Comment from nor84
I wanted to give you a heads-up review. I ran the story through Microsoft word, and it counted only 96 words, not 100 words. You may want to check your word count. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I wanted to give you a heads-up review. I ran the story through Microsoft word, and it counted only 96 words, not 100 words. You may want to check your word count. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind and understanding review, Anonymous. Have a great week.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
After reading 'One Dog', I find that it follows the guidelines of the contest and makes a good entry.
The image shown supports the topic discussed in the story.
Suggestion: At the end, 'ONE TO HUNDRED'- that just doesn't sound right. Try something like (About a hundred). Just my opinion.
Thanks for sharing your Hundred Word Story.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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After reading 'One Dog', I find that it follows the guidelines of the contest and makes a good entry.
The image shown supports the topic discussed in the story.
Suggestion: At the end, 'ONE TO HUNDRED'- that just doesn't sound right. Try something like (About a hundred). Just my opinion.
Thanks for sharing your Hundred Word Story.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, anonymous. Have a great week.
Comment from Curly Girly
I enjoyed reading your story about Smokey and your grandy-bike-moped-scooter.
My dog jog alongside when I go for a bike ride down by the river. She's good and well trained. Now and then she gets distracted and gets bumped by the front wheel. Luckily, we've had no spills.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed reading your story about Smokey and your grandy-bike-moped-scooter.
My dog jog alongside when I go for a bike ride down by the river. She's good and well trained. Now and then she gets distracted and gets bumped by the front wheel. Luckily, we've had no spills.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, anonymous. Have a great week.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Aw, I'm glad little Smokey goes on the scooter with you. I'm glad you can get out that way and walk him.
Good luck in the contest.
teresa
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Aw, I'm glad little Smokey goes on the scooter with you. I'm glad you can get out that way and walk him.
Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, anonymous. Have a great week.
Comment from oliver818
I think you did a good job of writing according to the prompt. It's a nice story, simple but fun. Thanks for sharing and best of luck with the competition. Have a great day
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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I think you did a good job of writing according to the prompt. It's a nice story, simple but fun. Thanks for sharing and best of luck with the competition. Have a great day
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Thanks for your kind review, anon. Have a great week.
Comment from Poetic Friend
I did not count your words, but presumably you followed the contest criteria. I enjoyed your story. There seems to be one or two filler words, but they do not distract from the story at all.
I think you meant "learned," not "leaned."
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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I did not count your words, but presumably you followed the contest criteria. I enjoyed your story. There seems to be one or two filler words, but they do not distract from the story at all.
I think you meant "learned," not "leaned."
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Sweets do wonders for him, otherwise he won't listen.
Comment from way2gokevs
After that long journey the dog will have sore feet.
Your 100 word story about a dog and a scooter is a good one.
best of luck in the contest.
Cheers, Kev
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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After that long journey the dog will have sore feet.
Your 100 word story about a dog and a scooter is a good one.
best of luck in the contest.
Cheers, Kev
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2017
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Sweets do wonders for him, otherwise he won't listen.
