Tranquility by the Sea
Share a stroll by the sea with me.42 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
Congratulations! This is a beautiful quatrain poem for the contest.
I loved the imagery and beauty in each line.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Congratulations! This is a beautiful quatrain poem for the contest.
I loved the imagery and beauty in each line.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed my quatrain so much, Janet. Thank you for sharing and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from June Sargent
A native of New England I can appreciate the sentiments in this lovely quatrain. Even in stormy weather, I love the coast and all that it has to offer. I could never live landlocked. Thank you for sharing. Can see why you won in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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A native of New England I can appreciate the sentiments in this lovely quatrain. Even in stormy weather, I love the coast and all that it has to offer. I could never live landlocked. Thank you for sharing. Can see why you won in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I feel especially humbled when a reader can truly relate to a poem I wrote. It really pleases me that "Tranquility by the Sea" put you there on a New England coast. Thanks so much for sharing, June, and for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Rod
I love your poem. The older I get, the more I need the seashore and fruits from the sea. I don't really understand it for I never lived near the ocean, and I have never even been out on a fishing boat. Yet it feels like home to me.
My favorite lines,
"A leaden sky has smothered sea
and made the sun a golden ghost"
In fact, your first verse is just amazing.
Wonderful imagery in the 2nd verse with those gulls swooping in low.
You have some nice alliteration sprinkled throughout,
"smothered sea", "golden ghost", "lighthouse looms", "darkened day"
I played around a bit with your final verse, if you'll allow me,
(Though drama drives this darkened day
in noisy birds and whipped-up sea,
I find true peace in what is there,
all nature's gifts God shares with me.)
I couldn't resist. Sorry.
Wonderful poem.
Thanks for sharing.
cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Hi Rod
I love your poem. The older I get, the more I need the seashore and fruits from the sea. I don't really understand it for I never lived near the ocean, and I have never even been out on a fishing boat. Yet it feels like home to me.
My favorite lines,
"A leaden sky has smothered sea
and made the sun a golden ghost"
In fact, your first verse is just amazing.
Wonderful imagery in the 2nd verse with those gulls swooping in low.
You have some nice alliteration sprinkled throughout,
"smothered sea", "golden ghost", "lighthouse looms", "darkened day"
I played around a bit with your final verse, if you'll allow me,
(Though drama drives this darkened day
in noisy birds and whipped-up sea,
I find true peace in what is there,
all nature's gifts God shares with me.)
I couldn't resist. Sorry.
Wonderful poem.
Thanks for sharing.
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Ironically, Kimbob, I have never lived near the ocean either, though my family did when they moved to Canada. When I visited, I saw scenes like this and felt a tremendous peace. Thank you so much for your wonderful praise and I truly appreciate your rewrite of my last stanza. Rod
Comment from SarahPenn1
This is vividly described and beautifully written
I can see the scenery come to life as I read
Thank you so much
Congratulations on winning the contest it was well deserved
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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This is vividly described and beautifully written
I can see the scenery come to life as I read
Thank you so much
Congratulations on winning the contest it was well deserved
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you for sharing "Tranquility by the Sea." I am very pleased the imagery brought the scene to life for you. Rod
Comment from JennaG
This is a beautiful quatrain poem! The imagery presented here is amazing! I especially liked " a golden ghost" and "the whipped-up sea". Also, great use of "d" alliteration. Congratulations on your well-deserved contest win! This is an awesome piece! I loved it! :)
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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This is a beautiful quatrain poem! The imagery presented here is amazing! I especially liked " a golden ghost" and "the whipped-up sea". Also, great use of "d" alliteration. Congratulations on your well-deserved contest win! This is an awesome piece! I loved it! :)
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed this poem so much, Jenna. Your enthusiastic response has made my day. I truly appreciate the bonus stars and the congrats, too. Thank you so much. Rod
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Congratulations on the win, RodG.
-I can see why it won.
-The image is great, and the poem is well penned.
-Excellent imagery throughout,
painting a vivid word picture of the sea,
gulls, and lighthouse.
-The conclusion is excellent.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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-Congratulations on the win, RodG.
-I can see why it won.
-The image is great, and the poem is well penned.
-Excellent imagery throughout,
painting a vivid word picture of the sea,
gulls, and lighthouse.
-The conclusion is excellent.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Your enthusiastic response to "Tranquility by the Sea" makes me want to write a sequel. Thank you so much, Pam, for your wonderful praise, that golden star, and the congrats. Rod
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You are quite welcome, RodG, and I appreciate your comments about my response. Maybe you will write the sequel!
Comment from Eternal Muse
Absolutely beautiful, and congrats on your win. A delightful Quatrain with a perfect rhyme and meter, after my own heart. You've explored a nautical theme which is my favorite.
Three screaming gulls with wings spread wide
spin in the sharp-toothed wind off shore.
They'll rise to chase the wisps of fog,
then dip to skim the surf once more.
What a beauty!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Absolutely beautiful, and congrats on your win. A delightful Quatrain with a perfect rhyme and meter, after my own heart. You've explored a nautical theme which is my favorite.
Three screaming gulls with wings spread wide
spin in the sharp-toothed wind off shore.
They'll rise to chase the wisps of fog,
then dip to skim the surf once more.
What a beauty!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I am so delighted by your enthusiastic response to "Tranquility by the Sea." It is especially nice to know which stanza you enjoyed the most. Thank you! Rod
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's fairly easy to see why this won the Quatrain Poetry Contest, Rod. I voted for this one without knowing that you were the author, obviously, since it was a blind contest.
A smooth even flow coupled with the abcb rhyme scheme used, vivid imagery, and an eloquent presentation all adds up to a "winner" to me.
Well done, and congrats on your win!
~Dean
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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It's fairly easy to see why this won the Quatrain Poetry Contest, Rod. I voted for this one without knowing that you were the author, obviously, since it was a blind contest.
A smooth even flow coupled with the abcb rhyme scheme used, vivid imagery, and an eloquent presentation all adds up to a "winner" to me.
Well done, and congrats on your win!
~Dean
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Dean, for your very kind praise, the vote, and the congrats. I truly appreciate your kind praise and endorsement. Rod
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from pipersfancy
I really enjoy the unique and descriptive imagery you've created here, from
the sun a golden ghost,
to waves thrashing rocks--you have given a very visceral and sensory experience of the sea.
I love that the "Tranquility" of the sea is found inside the heart, rather than the sea itself, as the understanding of the beauty on display is a divine gift to be enjoyed.
I think this is a lovely piece, and am so glad it did well in the contest!
pf
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I really enjoy the unique and descriptive imagery you've created here, from
the sun a golden ghost,
to waves thrashing rocks--you have given a very visceral and sensory experience of the sea.
I love that the "Tranquility" of the sea is found inside the heart, rather than the sea itself, as the understanding of the beauty on display is a divine gift to be enjoyed.
I think this is a lovely piece, and am so glad it did well in the contest!
pf
Comment Written 25-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I am delighted you found my imagery "unique" as well as enjoyable, pf. I truly appreciate your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I love these lines. I photographed a restaurant that was built to look like a lighthouse. It was beautiful, but the builder had not checked the codes thoroughly. There was not enough room to put in the parking lot that was needed. The building was sold to someone who bought it as a house. He got a heck-of-a-deal on a unique house with a huge kitchen.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I love these lines. I photographed a restaurant that was built to look like a lighthouse. It was beautiful, but the builder had not checked the codes thoroughly. There was not enough room to put in the parking lot that was needed. The building was sold to someone who bought it as a house. He got a heck-of-a-deal on a unique house with a huge kitchen.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed my poem so much, Tom, and I really appreciate your story about the lighthouse/restaurant-not-to-be. Rod
