Eventide
Sound story4 total reviews
Comment from kathleenspalding
Beautiful and bittersweet story has wonderful descriptions and character development. Excellent story for the prompt. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Beautiful and bittersweet story has wonderful descriptions and character development. Excellent story for the prompt. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Great review - yes some memories are certainly bittersweet ! zanya
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You're welcome. :-)
Comment from Spitfire
As a child I too eagerly awaited my dad's return from his day's work. It's the same with my grandchildren who are all over my son when they hear the door opening. A beautiful moment captured in this well-written prose piece.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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As a child I too eagerly awaited my dad's return from his day's work. It's the same with my grandchildren who are all over my son when they hear the door opening. A beautiful moment captured in this well-written prose piece.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thanks for the encouraging words zanya
Comment from apky
Such a moving story, amazingly told based on sound alone. You bring home the fact that this sensory aspect of us can mean so much. Like a baby hearing the coos of the mother, we cherish certain sounds, even while kissing.
Sadly(,) a few short years later, when Ann was not yet a teen, tragedy struck at the heart of our family. Dad became seriously ill. Those moments of joy-filled living disappeared and faded into the realm of mere family lore. No more would Ann wait with an air of expectancy for those precious shared moments. No more would her eyes light up finally at the sound of the key in the keyhole. They were to be replaced on a daily basis by the very serious business of all the concerns surrounding a major illness. Despite dad's enormous courage, he passed away a few years later to our indescribable grief.
Ann has meanwhile grown into the confid(-a, replace with e)nt young woman she is today. Soon she will graduate from College and take her own place in the world. One day, she too may experience the joy of being a parent, waiting at evensong for her beloved to return home following the day's toil.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Such a moving story, amazingly told based on sound alone. You bring home the fact that this sensory aspect of us can mean so much. Like a baby hearing the coos of the mother, we cherish certain sounds, even while kissing.
Sadly(,) a few short years later, when Ann was not yet a teen, tragedy struck at the heart of our family. Dad became seriously ill. Those moments of joy-filled living disappeared and faded into the realm of mere family lore. No more would Ann wait with an air of expectancy for those precious shared moments. No more would her eyes light up finally at the sound of the key in the keyhole. They were to be replaced on a daily basis by the very serious business of all the concerns surrounding a major illness. Despite dad's enormous courage, he passed away a few years later to our indescribable grief.
Ann has meanwhile grown into the confid(-a, replace with e)nt young woman she is today. Soon she will graduate from College and take her own place in the world. One day, she too may experience the joy of being a parent, waiting at evensong for her beloved to return home following the day's toil.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thanks for reading and critique - and most helpful suggestions zanya
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Author,
What a beautiful story making lovely memories to cherish forever. I am so glad your daughter was blessed with this type of loving and attentive father -- so many aren't so lucky! Thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Dear Mystery Author,
What a beautiful story making lovely memories to cherish forever. I am so glad your daughter was blessed with this type of loving and attentive father -- so many aren't so lucky! Thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thanks for reading & review zanya
