The Products of Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "What the Heart Wants"...the story of Jenny and Ron
34 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good chapter you have penned. I love the part where she saw Ron again after not seeing him for a while. You used very good descriptive wording and great dialogue! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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This is a very good chapter you have penned. I love the part where she saw Ron again after not seeing him for a while. You used very good descriptive wording and great dialogue! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Hi Teri; thank you so much for reading and the lovely review. I hope you will continue to read along. The next chapter is already up and Chapter 7 will come tomorrow (Sunday.)
~patty~
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hmm, guess this is it? This is when she finds out she's pregnant, what will she do then? This is a sad part, that Ron is such an idiot. Why didn't he go after her? Well done, another excellent part. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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Hmm, guess this is it? This is when she finds out she's pregnant, what will she do then? This is a sad part, that Ron is such an idiot. Why didn't he go after her? Well done, another excellent part. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 21-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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Hi Sandra; yes, things really start to become complicated at this point. Thanks for reading,
~patty~
Comment from smbau
The story line was easy to follow and to relate to especially when one gets to work with a group of ladies. They could be both insensitive, ugly, loving, and supporting at times. The plot and setting starts in and office, then in a bus finally in a cafeteria. You have wonderful descriptive skills that puts the reader in the location, the place and easily imagine the occurrence. Jenny's character was developed more than others, I think because the story still continues. You end the story in suspense... did Jenny puke because she is pregnant or was seeing Ron again the trigger
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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The story line was easy to follow and to relate to especially when one gets to work with a group of ladies. They could be both insensitive, ugly, loving, and supporting at times. The plot and setting starts in and office, then in a bus finally in a cafeteria. You have wonderful descriptive skills that puts the reader in the location, the place and easily imagine the occurrence. Jenny's character was developed more than others, I think because the story still continues. You end the story in suspense... did Jenny puke because she is pregnant or was seeing Ron again the trigger
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
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thank you so much for your thoughtful and thorough review. There are many more twists and turns to come.
~patty~
Comment from Marvin Calloway
The beautiful 'Love Story' has ended. The nightmare of the next chapter has begun. You've described these events in fine and thoroughly believable fashion.
Marv
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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The beautiful 'Love Story' has ended. The nightmare of the next chapter has begun. You've described these events in fine and thoroughly believable fashion.
Marv
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Hi Marv; thank you so much for the lovely review,
~patty~
Comment from Mabaker
Oh heck that would be a dreadful thing to worry about along with everything else thats happing to her at the monent. I bet the ex boyfriend got a shock as well
Very well written. Regards Mabaker
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Oh heck that would be a dreadful thing to worry about along with everything else thats happing to her at the monent. I bet the ex boyfriend got a shock as well
Very well written. Regards Mabaker
Comment Written 20-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Hi Anne; thank you so much for reading along - the next chapter will be posted soon,
~patty~
Comment from zelinajoyner
That was awesome! I want more!!!! You are most definitely an accomplished writer by far! The story is heartbreaking and familiar to the average woman as well. The imagery was as if watching a movie. Excellent!
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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That was awesome! I want more!!!! You are most definitely an accomplished writer by far! The story is heartbreaking and familiar to the average woman as well. The imagery was as if watching a movie. Excellent!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Hi; thank you so much for your compliments and encouraging review. The next chapter of this story will be posted soon,
~patty~
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Wrkl ok Patty. This story is continuing to be very interesting. I am eager as I read it and waiting to see what will happen next. It is very well written, of course. I LIKE...
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Wrkl ok Patty. This story is continuing to be very interesting. I am eager as I read it and waiting to see what will happen next. It is very well written, of course. I LIKE...
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Hi Tier; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I greatly appreciate your kind words of encouragement. The next chapter (which I'm currently working on) will be told from Ron's viewpoint,
~patty~
Comment from MelB
Hi Patty, another exciting chapter to the story. Let's hope she just got so anxious and upset about seeing him, and that she isn't pregnant.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Hi Patty, another exciting chapter to the story. Let's hope she just got so anxious and upset about seeing him, and that she isn't pregnant.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Hi Mel; thank you for continuing to read. The next chapter is written about Ron's point of view,
~patty~
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I've read parts of this... good story. She'll be pregnant and give up the child, but then meet him again years later. He never was the marrying kind, so she did the right thing by breaking up with him. Still...so painful. Sigh...
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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I've read parts of this... good story. She'll be pregnant and give up the child, but then meet him again years later. He never was the marrying kind, so she did the right thing by breaking up with him. Still...so painful. Sigh...
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Hi Phyllis; thank you so much for reading along - next we will hear about Ron's point of view,
~patty~
Comment from pbomar1115
Now, I'm not sure at one point of the story, I'm at. Because you are giving the back story to the child Jenny had without telling Ron. She decided to handle things her way without him because of an answer to a question she received. For me, I think women have the strangest relationship with each other. They can not care very much for one of the women among them; and yet, they will help that person when she is having a hard time. This is so true about women which confuse me about them. Nevertheless, this is a great read.
Phillip
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Now, I'm not sure at one point of the story, I'm at. Because you are giving the back story to the child Jenny had without telling Ron. She decided to handle things her way without him because of an answer to a question she received. For me, I think women have the strangest relationship with each other. They can not care very much for one of the women among them; and yet, they will help that person when she is having a hard time. This is so true about women which confuse me about them. Nevertheless, this is a great read.
Phillip
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Hi Phillip; I did go and organize the parts into a book, so maybe that will help you get oriented - the problem lies in how I posted part of the end for the contest, 'The Call,' and then started to post the other parts - SO SORRY
~patty~
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Maybe, I explained my understanding wrong but, it was well written. I just hoped I remembered the situation correctly. The section was understandable.
Phillip
