dappled butterfly
Poem 5/7/5 butterflies6 total reviews
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
You've penned a good 5-7-5
I especially like the second line: 'wings unfurl Summer season's'
Lovely artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the picture and color of font selected.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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You've penned a good 5-7-5
I especially like the second line: 'wings unfurl Summer season's'
Lovely artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background goes well with the picture and color of font selected.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thanks for reading and critique zanya
Comment from BeasPeas
It's a joy to see a butterfly in the garden in summer. Good word choices. Each one is needed for the meaning of your piece. A fine entry into the 5-7-5 contest and I wish you much luck in it. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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It's a joy to see a butterfly in the garden in summer. Good word choices. Each one is needed for the meaning of your piece. A fine entry into the 5-7-5 contest and I wish you much luck in it. Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thanks for reading and critique - butterflies gladden our hearts, I think zanya
Comment from R.A.Partin
It's very hard to review short poems. I really like the wording in your poem, and the alliteration in the middle line. I would suggest adding some punctuation and capitalising some letters, depending on what you want the meaning to be. Either a comma or a colon would work really well after the word butterfly.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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It's very hard to review short poems. I really like the wording in your poem, and the alliteration in the middle line. I would suggest adding some punctuation and capitalising some letters, depending on what you want the meaning to be. Either a comma or a colon would work really well after the word butterfly.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thanks for reading and the comments -always welcome zanya
Comment from lyenochka
A lovely poem in tribute to a gorgeous butterfly. I really enjoy seeing them in the garden in late spring and summer. I like the comparison to "colored tapestry" for the butterfly's wings.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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A lovely poem in tribute to a gorgeous butterfly. I really enjoy seeing them in the garden in late spring and summer. I like the comparison to "colored tapestry" for the butterfly's wings.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Yes they are such a special sight-thanks for reading and critique zanya
Comment from patcelaw
This is a true haiku as it deals with nature. It is wonderfully written and presented beautifully. Blessings for a good weekend. Patricia
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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This is a true haiku as it deals with nature. It is wonderfully written and presented beautifully. Blessings for a good weekend. Patricia
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Delighted with this review zanya
Comment from Sis Cat
Zanya, this is a beautiful 5-7-5 butterfly poem filled with concrete descriptions and fine word choice to paint a picture. You poem is haiku-like in intensity.
Thank you for sharing and I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Zanya, this is a beautiful 5-7-5 butterfly poem filled with concrete descriptions and fine word choice to paint a picture. You poem is haiku-like in intensity.
Thank you for sharing and I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2017
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Thanks for reading and critique zanya
