Revenge
An Ode65 total reviews
Comment from Just2Write
This tale of the Dragon Queen is very well told, dear Tony. I enjoyed the read and the excellent story-telling skill that you employed here. I am not familiar with an 'English Ode' vs. a Pindaric, Horatian, or Irregular - Are you able to elaborate? I'm just curious.
I loved the bit about the nobleman who pointed out how the skylark had just lost her nest, and presumably, her young - but that instead of seeking revenge, she
soothed her sorrow in a song. That is just so lovely. It brought a tear to my eye. This is a very worthy poem for the Poem of the Month contest. It's wonderful.
Sorry - I have no sixes left.
Heather Rose.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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This tale of the Dragon Queen is very well told, dear Tony. I enjoyed the read and the excellent story-telling skill that you employed here. I am not familiar with an 'English Ode' vs. a Pindaric, Horatian, or Irregular - Are you able to elaborate? I'm just curious.
I loved the bit about the nobleman who pointed out how the skylark had just lost her nest, and presumably, her young - but that instead of seeking revenge, she
soothed her sorrow in a song. That is just so lovely. It brought a tear to my eye. This is a very worthy poem for the Poem of the Month contest. It's wonderful.
Sorry - I have no sixes left.
Heather Rose.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2017
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Many thanks for your review of this and comments. Much appreciated. I think that the odes of the Romantic poets, particularly Keats and Shelley, are regarded as English Odes. Mine is structured much as Keats structured his, both in terms of being mainly iambic pentameter and in terms of the rhyme scheme, ababcdecde. He sometimes varied the order of the sestet.
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Okay, thanks ! I'll add your information to my notes.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Tony, almost missed this amazing poem (not on FS much at the moment) but had to review it. It is a mammoth write and so well done with consistent rhyme scheme maintained throughout - don't know how you do it! Very poetic and an interesting story. Dragon Queen, h'm! Reminds me of the TV series I've been watching, Game of Thrones - I am absolutely crazy about it. Do you get Sky TV in Australia? - If so, be warned it is full of foul language, strong violence and scenes of a sexual nature.
When loaded with the dross of anger, hate,
and bile, the scale weighs heavily in mind.
It takes an age to mine the counter-weight;
forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find. What an amazing example of metaphor, with a strong message.
Beautiful piece of writing and faultless. I looked for faults in vain LOL.
Hang on! Found something LOL. I don't think you can 'growl' loud and strong - a growl is low pitched and gutteral. ' All growled assent in voices loud and strong,' - what do you think? LOL!
An enviable piece of writing - you are a true poet - Dorothy x
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Hi Tony, almost missed this amazing poem (not on FS much at the moment) but had to review it. It is a mammoth write and so well done with consistent rhyme scheme maintained throughout - don't know how you do it! Very poetic and an interesting story. Dragon Queen, h'm! Reminds me of the TV series I've been watching, Game of Thrones - I am absolutely crazy about it. Do you get Sky TV in Australia? - If so, be warned it is full of foul language, strong violence and scenes of a sexual nature.
When loaded with the dross of anger, hate,
and bile, the scale weighs heavily in mind.
It takes an age to mine the counter-weight;
forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find. What an amazing example of metaphor, with a strong message.
Beautiful piece of writing and faultless. I looked for faults in vain LOL.
Hang on! Found something LOL. I don't think you can 'growl' loud and strong - a growl is low pitched and gutteral. ' All growled assent in voices loud and strong,' - what do you think? LOL!
An enviable piece of writing - you are a true poet - Dorothy x
Comment Written 19-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Dorothy. Loved your review and very much appreciate your comments. You may be right about the growl. I'll have to check it out next time I meet a bear! LOL All the best, Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
-it didn't matter that I waited long and did not receive the total amount of member cent pumps that was allotted and it didn't matter. I truly was waiting for the time to read this is all of your poems are extremely entertaining and tremendously and knowledgeably written well. This like no other, has also attributed to this entertainment as a perfectly written Ode.
-Revenge is but a dire need to quench the thirst that is obtained when one has been offended by another's greed.
-This particular Ode offered a dramatic story written with precise and visionary words that encompass alliterations is like "stallion stamp" and "coward call". It also introduced in imagery that was truly distinctly and demonstratively descriptive along with being vividly and overwhelmingly expressive in nature and captured the idea of the conceptual theme of revenge and how it is obtained and how it also twists the minds of those who obtain it.
-Some great and notable quotes I found in your writing that which is absolutely once to remember were like "a mop is one voice, and men of peace are often crucified". Another one I liked was "it takes an age to mine the counterweight; forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find." The second is absolutely and righteously worded to give a philosophical understanding of how forgiveness can solve many of the revengeful problems in this world.
-I was overjoyed by reading your Ode and now I am satisfied that I took the time to take this read to heart.
-Thank you very much, Tony when entertaining read, and take care and have a good one especially with all those that you love so dearly.
Alex
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Cheers, Tony;
-it didn't matter that I waited long and did not receive the total amount of member cent pumps that was allotted and it didn't matter. I truly was waiting for the time to read this is all of your poems are extremely entertaining and tremendously and knowledgeably written well. This like no other, has also attributed to this entertainment as a perfectly written Ode.
-Revenge is but a dire need to quench the thirst that is obtained when one has been offended by another's greed.
-This particular Ode offered a dramatic story written with precise and visionary words that encompass alliterations is like "stallion stamp" and "coward call". It also introduced in imagery that was truly distinctly and demonstratively descriptive along with being vividly and overwhelmingly expressive in nature and captured the idea of the conceptual theme of revenge and how it is obtained and how it also twists the minds of those who obtain it.
-Some great and notable quotes I found in your writing that which is absolutely once to remember were like "a mop is one voice, and men of peace are often crucified". Another one I liked was "it takes an age to mine the counterweight; forgiveness is a gem that's hard to find." The second is absolutely and righteously worded to give a philosophical understanding of how forgiveness can solve many of the revengeful problems in this world.
-I was overjoyed by reading your Ode and now I am satisfied that I took the time to take this read to heart.
-Thank you very much, Tony when entertaining read, and take care and have a good one especially with all those that you love so dearly.
Alex
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thanks for this detailed and affirming review, Alex. I very much appreciate it and the six stars. Thanks, too, about your comments about the Crown. Yours was a fine sequence of sonnets. All the best, Tony
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With thank you on your comment, Tony, and congratulations on your well-deserved win , and take care and have a good one my dearest of friends.
Alex
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
I HAD TO JUST USE MY LAST SIX FOR I FOUND
THIS WRITE RATHER AMAZING WHAT AN AWSOME PEACE
OF WORK YOU HAVE PENNED. I SAY THIS WITH THE UT MOST
RESPECT IT'S NOTHING SHORTER THAN AMAZING I HOPE TO
SEE MORE JUST LIKE THIS YOU CAPTURED THE HORSE
TREMEDOUSLY
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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I HAD TO JUST USE MY LAST SIX FOR I FOUND
THIS WRITE RATHER AMAZING WHAT AN AWSOME PEACE
OF WORK YOU HAVE PENNED. I SAY THIS WITH THE UT MOST
RESPECT IT'S NOTHING SHORTER THAN AMAZING I HOPE TO
SEE MORE JUST LIKE THIS YOU CAPTURED THE HORSE
TREMEDOUSLY
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks, Abby. Knowing your love of horses, I particularly appreciated your affirming comments about the description and your six-star award. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, :)
I like your poem. It would be cool to hear you read it.
I like these lines:
Their wide eyes gleam with fear, their flanks still damp
with dew condensed from skies foretelling death
Her flowing locks were hid, her breastplate tight
constraining secret fires, catlike and lithe,
and, in her hectic eye, the hollow sight
of one who had been cut by death's sharp scythe
that swept across the land she once called home,
and severed from her bosom all her kin.Her flowing locks were hid, her breastplate tight
constraining secret fires, catlike and lithe,
and, in her hectic eye, the hollow sight
of one who had been cut by death's sharp scythe
that swept across the land she once called home,
and severed from her bosom all her kin.
I have one suggestion; maybe you could break up the long stanzas -- I kept losing my place. :)
Have a good week.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Hello, :)
I like your poem. It would be cool to hear you read it.
I like these lines:
Their wide eyes gleam with fear, their flanks still damp
with dew condensed from skies foretelling death
Her flowing locks were hid, her breastplate tight
constraining secret fires, catlike and lithe,
and, in her hectic eye, the hollow sight
of one who had been cut by death's sharp scythe
that swept across the land she once called home,
and severed from her bosom all her kin.Her flowing locks were hid, her breastplate tight
constraining secret fires, catlike and lithe,
and, in her hectic eye, the hollow sight
of one who had been cut by death's sharp scythe
that swept across the land she once called home,
and severed from her bosom all her kin.
I have one suggestion; maybe you could break up the long stanzas -- I kept losing my place. :)
Have a good week.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Very many thanks for your very kind review, Rasmine, and your suggestion. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Tony. This one was like reading a good book. It has beautiful phrases throughout and tells a tale that is vivid in this reader's mind. Loved it. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Hi Tony. This one was like reading a good book. It has beautiful phrases throughout and tells a tale that is vivid in this reader's mind. Loved it. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 18-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Kiwi. As always, I appreciate your review and kind words. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Cybertron1986
I loved the fast pace of your piece. It tells a story in such an elegant and sophisticated way.
The rhyme scheme is expressed also in a way that ties in both fantasy, with the use of a dragon, and reality, which involves the style of old English.
My favorite part is "she upstaged the throng to urge them on."
Beautiful all around.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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I loved the fast pace of your piece. It tells a story in such an elegant and sophisticated way.
The rhyme scheme is expressed also in a way that ties in both fantasy, with the use of a dragon, and reality, which involves the style of old English.
My favorite part is "she upstaged the throng to urge them on."
Beautiful all around.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Cybertron. I appreciate your review and kind words. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Lovely alliterative descriptions in your ode, I feel like I can almost here the snorts and the pounding hooves. Powerfully written Tony, the anger the hate and interspersed with the sounds of the birds. Love this English Ode, well done and with great skill of the descriptive language you've used.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Lovely alliterative descriptions in your ode, I feel like I can almost here the snorts and the pounding hooves. Powerfully written Tony, the anger the hate and interspersed with the sounds of the birds. Love this English Ode, well done and with great skill of the descriptive language you've used.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Valda. As always, I appreciate your review and kind words. Thanks, too, for the six stars! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
I love Greek mythology. You did an outstanding job with the English Ode. It looks so hard to write but you have a gift and the talent to do it right. I like the presentation too.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Hello, my friend,
I love Greek mythology. You did an outstanding job with the English Ode. It looks so hard to write but you have a gift and the talent to do it right. I like the presentation too.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thanks, Gypsy. As always, I appreciate your review and kind words. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Eternal Muse
Another masterpiece, Tony. You never cease to amaze me. I never tried an English Ode, but reading your poem, I definitely will.
This boasts all poetic devices and displays your genius which is heartwarming.
This type and caliber of poetry makes FS proud. One of the best poems I read, after kiwisteveh's sonnet "Come, Woodsman".
Her flowing locks were hid, her breastplate tight
constraining secret fires, catlike and lithe,
and, in her hectic eye, the hollow sight
of one who had been cut by death's sharp scythe
that swept across the land she once called home,
and severed from her bosom all her kin.
Her noble heart still heard the blood-wrenched screams
as those she loved were slain, and she alone
escaped by dint of fate, whose mocking grin
now drove her to fulfil tormented dreams.
[my spellcheck highlighted "fulfil" for wanting another "l" at the end.
Bravo, Tony! What a masterful work. I am proud of you.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Another masterpiece, Tony. You never cease to amaze me. I never tried an English Ode, but reading your poem, I definitely will.
This boasts all poetic devices and displays your genius which is heartwarming.
This type and caliber of poetry makes FS proud. One of the best poems I read, after kiwisteveh's sonnet "Come, Woodsman".
Her flowing locks were hid, her breastplate tight
constraining secret fires, catlike and lithe,
and, in her hectic eye, the hollow sight
of one who had been cut by death's sharp scythe
that swept across the land she once called home,
and severed from her bosom all her kin.
Her noble heart still heard the blood-wrenched screams
as those she loved were slain, and she alone
escaped by dint of fate, whose mocking grin
now drove her to fulfil tormented dreams.
[my spellcheck highlighted "fulfil" for wanting another "l" at the end.
Bravo, Tony! What a masterful work. I am proud of you.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much, Yelena. I very much appreciate your detailed and affirmative review and the award of six stars. Such kind words!
Fulfil/fulfill is one of those British English/ American English things!
Best wishes, Tony
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Maybe you can look at my recent sonnet, "Perfection". It's on the first page.
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Yes, if you get a chance, you'll honor me if you look at my sonnet "Perfection". At least it pays very well - on the main page, spot 1 (lol).
