Childhood Dreams
a sonnet for the young and young at heart36 total reviews
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hello fellow Poet. Your poem is very special and brings back memories of the young girl who enjoyed these spring times also. I was not lonely as I had 7 sisters and 1 brother and a load full of friends. But i remember trying to find moments like this one where I could be alone to look outward and enjoy the peaceful scenes of springtime. I particularly really liked the whole sonnet but especially when you said:
From here I see a Never-Never land
where tiny dinosaurs and parrots play
on beaches filled with shells and soft white sand
and lonely girls like me have dads that stay.
So precious...
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Hello fellow Poet. Your poem is very special and brings back memories of the young girl who enjoyed these spring times also. I was not lonely as I had 7 sisters and 1 brother and a load full of friends. But i remember trying to find moments like this one where I could be alone to look outward and enjoy the peaceful scenes of springtime. I particularly really liked the whole sonnet but especially when you said:
From here I see a Never-Never land
where tiny dinosaurs and parrots play
on beaches filled with shells and soft white sand
and lonely girls like me have dads that stay.
So precious...
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Hi, Tier. I am delighted when a poem I wrote can bring back wonderful memories for a reader. Thank you so much for your kind praise and for taking the time to specifically cite what you liked best.
Comment from emptypage
This is exquisite. I feel the longing. I long with the speaker.
The word choices are as near perfect as I've seen, and I was moved by them as much as by the tone you set.
You get my vote.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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This is exquisite. I feel the longing. I long with the speaker.
The word choices are as near perfect as I've seen, and I was moved by them as much as by the tone you set.
You get my vote.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Oh, you made my day with your response/ Thank you so much for the uplifting vote of confidence.
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your sonnet "Childhood Dreams". All your lines and syllables were correct for this genre and I liked the photo you chose.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed reading your sonnet "Childhood Dreams". All your lines and syllables were correct for this genre and I liked the photo you chose.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed both the poem and the artwork chosen, Marybell. Thanks so much for sharing and your kind praise.
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You are most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written children's poem I love this sonnet and I think that the flow is very soft and smoothly done with nice alliteration throughout. Thank you very much for sharing this. With love, Lala
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hello my dear friend, I very much enjoyed reading this beautifully written children's poem I love this sonnet and I think that the flow is very soft and smoothly done with nice alliteration throughout. Thank you very much for sharing this. With love, Lala
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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My pleasure, Lala. I am delighted you enjoyed the sonnet so much and appreciate your very kind praise.
Comment from zanya
An enthralling subject matter for the sonnet form enabling reflection and analysis of a vital time in human life - the childhood years -with deep sadness at its heart 'lonely girls like me have dads that stay'
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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An enthralling subject matter for the sonnet form enabling reflection and analysis of a vital time in human life - the childhood years -with deep sadness at its heart 'lonely girls like me have dads that stay'
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you, zanya, for sharing my sonnet and your kind praise.
Comment from Nika2016
I know what I like..so you get six stars...I think I know your writing style and who you are...I was right there with her in the tree...
Very nice....
I hope this wins!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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I know what I like..so you get six stars...I think I know your writing style and who you are...I was right there with her in the tree...
Very nice....
I hope this wins!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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I a so pleased you LIKE my poem so much, and even more delighted you can relate to the Speaker. Thank you for those bonus stars as well.
Comment from sharonlshelley
nice little poem written for children a nice flow and the picture really reflect your work
got luck luck for the competition and thanks for sharing , sharon
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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nice little poem written for children a nice flow and the picture really reflect your work
got luck luck for the competition and thanks for sharing , sharon
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Sharon, for sharing my poem and your kind comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet. When we were still young our dreams were different about what love is and what things would make us happy. The basic rules of love stay the same for young and old.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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A very well-written sonnet. When we were still young our dreams were different about what love is and what things would make us happy. The basic rules of love stay the same for young and old.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Sandra, for sharing my poem and your kind praise.
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing this somewhat wistful sonnet. I loved the image of a little girl dreaming about a life where dads stayed. I think there are many girls just like her, hoping, praying and dreaming.
Well penned, and good luck in the contest
~patty~
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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thank you for sharing this somewhat wistful sonnet. I loved the image of a little girl dreaming about a life where dads stayed. I think there are many girls just like her, hoping, praying and dreaming.
Well penned, and good luck in the contest
~patty~
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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I truly enjoy sharing my poetry with readers like you, patty. Thanks for your very kind praise and well wishes.
Comment from Kate Tompkins
This is very well done. I'm not quite sure if the second and third verses reflect what the subject was thinking as a child, or what she thinks now, or both. If it's the first, the line about pixies sketching with sun-warmed glaze seems odd coming from a ten year old. But if it's seen through the eye of memory, it's fine.
A bitter-sweet look at spring, where its promises are all illusory, yet still comforting.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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This is very well done. I'm not quite sure if the second and third verses reflect what the subject was thinking as a child, or what she thinks now, or both. If it's the first, the line about pixies sketching with sun-warmed glaze seems odd coming from a ten year old. But if it's seen through the eye of memory, it's fine.
A bitter-sweet look at spring, where its promises are all illusory, yet still comforting.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Hi Kate. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on my sonnet. Yes, I can see how the second and third verses could be ambiguous. My INTENT was to have the Speaker transported back to her youth. In other words, the older woman is looking AGAIN at what she saw as a child.
