Before It's Over
Sonnet contest entry18 total reviews
Comment from Thal1959
This is an excellent work as a sonnet and a prayer. The "Peripeteia" is, in essence, and act of contrition or repentance. Found this in the voting boot - it will get my vote.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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This is an excellent work as a sonnet and a prayer. The "Peripeteia" is, in essence, and act of contrition or repentance. Found this in the voting boot - it will get my vote.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, Thal. I really appreciate the generous stars and support. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Ron
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You're welcome - it was my pleasure.
Comment from Curly Girly
I enjoyed reading your well-constructed poem about deflecting Armageddon through love. The concept is a good one, but I am not sure it is possible.
The wish hangs on one word: POSTPONE
It seems not matter what, demise is inevitable. The postponement is a temporary delay. Could the earth continue with a happy and healthy population at such high, consuming levels if matters were to be delayed? How much longer can we sustain ourselves?
But should our values turn a wayward curve
and love becomes the strength of our accord,
perhaps we might postpone what men deserve,
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed reading your well-constructed poem about deflecting Armageddon through love. The concept is a good one, but I am not sure it is possible.
The wish hangs on one word: POSTPONE
It seems not matter what, demise is inevitable. The postponement is a temporary delay. Could the earth continue with a happy and healthy population at such high, consuming levels if matters were to be delayed? How much longer can we sustain ourselves?
But should our values turn a wayward curve
and love becomes the strength of our accord,
perhaps we might postpone what men deserve,
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, CG. Yes, that's what I'm saying. It's not possible. Some day, be it tomorrow or a million years, the end of mankind is going to come. That's just what I've been taught through scripture all my life. Some may disagree. That's up to them. I'm just saying I hope it gets postponed a little while if there'd be a chance anyone might get on the right path and saved if it didn't actually happen tomorrow. The way I see it, we're mighty close. But that's just me. Just wishing for more time before the end comes so more people can get with the program.
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Experts say that it is impossible for the current population with its projected growth to sustain itself longer than 30 years. Something's going to blow! We best be prepared.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I like the rhythm of your poem. You executed the iambic pentameter well. The presentation is consistent with the poem. I don't like the moving picture.
Well done my friend
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I like the rhythm of your poem. You executed the iambic pentameter well. The presentation is consistent with the poem. I don't like the moving picture.
Well done my friend
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Gypsy.
Comment from Janet Foor
Before It's Over is a excellent Shakespearean sonnet for the contest.
Excellent sonnet rhyme and good use of alliteration. Good turn in the third stanza and excellent conclusion in the final couplet.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Before It's Over is a excellent Shakespearean sonnet for the contest.
Excellent sonnet rhyme and good use of alliteration. Good turn in the third stanza and excellent conclusion in the final couplet.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much for the great review, Janet. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Bill Schott
This Shakespearean sonnet, Before It's Over, has the correct format, including iambic pentameter, rhyme scheme, and even a turn at line nine. This theme seems to be a request for a delay of sentencing for a lost world. Let's hope we get it and use it wisely.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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This Shakespearean sonnet, Before It's Over, has the correct format, including iambic pentameter, rhyme scheme, and even a turn at line nine. This theme seems to be a request for a delay of sentencing for a lost world. Let's hope we get it and use it wisely.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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That's for sure. Thank you for the excellent review, Bill. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
Comment from robyn corum
But should our values turn a wayward curve
and love becomes the strength of our accord,
perhaps we might postpone what men deserve,
to breathe our last beneath an angel's sword.
Dear Mystery Poet,
What a lovely message -- I can't imagine who might disagree with this (referring to your author notes.) But then, some people are clueless about good messages - I mean, I should know...I'm perfect, of course -- and if they don't agree with me...well, they're just confused or plain wrong. Teehee (JK)
This was a super entry and I wish you much good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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But should our values turn a wayward curve
and love becomes the strength of our accord,
perhaps we might postpone what men deserve,
to breathe our last beneath an angel's sword.
Dear Mystery Poet,
What a lovely message -- I can't imagine who might disagree with this (referring to your author notes.) But then, some people are clueless about good messages - I mean, I should know...I'm perfect, of course -- and if they don't agree with me...well, they're just confused or plain wrong. Teehee (JK)
This was a super entry and I wish you much good luck!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Robyn. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hello Poet: We are not supposed to downrate if we do not like what we read or if we do not have the same beliefs. I hope too that others do not do this because I realize and have experienced that some do.
As for me, I strongly agree and believe in what you are saying in your poem. I have studied the bible for over 20 years. So I do know that God will reach his limit. It is prophesy that he will. Your poem expressed this reality very well and captured my spiritual heart. I especially appreciate the spiritual poems or warnings. This was very well done.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Hello Poet: We are not supposed to downrate if we do not like what we read or if we do not have the same beliefs. I hope too that others do not do this because I realize and have experienced that some do.
As for me, I strongly agree and believe in what you are saying in your poem. I have studied the bible for over 20 years. So I do know that God will reach his limit. It is prophesy that he will. Your poem expressed this reality very well and captured my spiritual heart. I especially appreciate the spiritual poems or warnings. This was very well done.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review, Tier. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind words. My mother studied the Bible in college and to this day still does. Yes, we surely have to be close. All we can do is be ready. Sometimes I do what I can to get the message out there. Thank you again. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from marybell1
I enjoyed reading your sonnet "Before It's Over". All your lines, syllables and rhythm were correct for this genre and you chose a most appropriate picture. All the best in the contest.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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I enjoyed reading your sonnet "Before It's Over". All your lines, syllables and rhythm were correct for this genre and you chose a most appropriate picture. All the best in the contest.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and gracious stars, Marybell 1. I'm glad you liked the piece.
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You ar most welcome.
Marybell1.
Comment from His Grayness
Powerful indeed and beautifully presented in animation and font. This is a truly Hollywood delivery and I enjoyed it immensely but cannot offer anything to improve it in any way! HIS GRAYNESS:
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Powerful indeed and beautifully presented in animation and font. This is a truly Hollywood delivery and I enjoyed it immensely but cannot offer anything to improve it in any way! HIS GRAYNESS:
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review, His Grayness. I really appreciate the generous stars, friend. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great night.
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The joy was all mine! Vance
Comment from dragonpoet
This sonnet seems to say that we need to worry about Armageddon more than we do. We try with recycling and hybrid and electric cars. But we need to find a way to control the violence and war in the world.
Hope this did well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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This sonnet seems to say that we need to worry about Armageddon more than we do. We try with recycling and hybrid and electric cars. But we need to find a way to control the violence and war in the world.
Hope this did well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 12-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2017
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Thank you for the great review, DP. Yes, we need to get it under control because I believe that will be our downfall. I really appreciate the generous stars. The contest hasn't actually came up for voting yet. The committee's still checking the entries. Thank you again. Have a great day.
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No problem. I'll check the contest out.
dp
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If it ever manages to come up for vote, lol. I sent you the reply this morning and the contest still isn't in the booth. There were a couple works that weren't even close to being sonnets so I guess they're letting them revise their piece before releasing it. Maybe some day soon, haha. Thank you again.
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I'll keep watching.
dp
