haiku (It's raining sunshine)
a haiku5 total reviews
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Ameen, Well she is doing fabulous! Wonderfully presented and perfect syllable count as well as something quite profound to say. Awesome! You might want to check out Dean Kucher and Gyspy Rose book on weekly Haiku challenges. I think you retain rights to your write but contribute that week's themed challenge as a new chapter. If your beautiful grand daughter is this good already, she might get some real benefit from it. Hope you are well my friend, it was nice to see you in my messages. Have a wonderful week. xoxo Kiwi (deborah)
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Hello Ameen, Well she is doing fabulous! Wonderfully presented and perfect syllable count as well as something quite profound to say. Awesome! You might want to check out Dean Kucher and Gyspy Rose book on weekly Haiku challenges. I think you retain rights to your write but contribute that week's themed challenge as a new chapter. If your beautiful grand daughter is this good already, she might get some real benefit from it. Hope you are well my friend, it was nice to see you in my messages. Have a wonderful week. xoxo Kiwi (deborah)
Comment Written 10-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Hi xoxo, my friend, how are you? A real joy to hear from you and thank you very much for the wonderful and highly encouraging comments; my granddaughter Maryam is delighted to read the awesome review and says thank you soooooooooooo much. I've been on and off the site, facing some health challenges, hope to visit your site soon. You take care my dear friend, again, thank you very much and may God bless you always.
Comment from rama devi
Love the irony of suing raining for sunshine. How wonderful for a ten-year-old to compose so well. It made me SMILE! Indeed, sunshine streaming down could be 'raining'. Lovely positive, joyful poem, dear. I like the alliteration of R and B as well as consonance of N. Lovely presentation too. Good word economy too. You should encourage your granddaughter to keep writing! Runs in the family...
NAMASTE
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Love the irony of suing raining for sunshine. How wonderful for a ten-year-old to compose so well. It made me SMILE! Indeed, sunshine streaming down could be 'raining'. Lovely positive, joyful poem, dear. I like the alliteration of R and B as well as consonance of N. Lovely presentation too. Good word economy too. You should encourage your granddaughter to keep writing! Runs in the family...
NAMASTE
Love,
rd
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2017
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Namaste Deviji, what a honor for my granddaughter.....she's so pleased to know about you and grateful for your encouraging comments. I thank you for your visit and kind review.
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Namaste, dear. so pleased she's pleased! Hugs to you both, rd
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello ameen786
Now you make sure that you tell your ten year old grand daughter her haiku is well said about the beauty of flowers bloom and of the rainbows arch and how
nature's beauty flows.
Gert
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Hello ameen786
Now you make sure that you tell your ten year old grand daughter her haiku is well said about the beauty of flowers bloom and of the rainbows arch and how
nature's beauty flows.
Gert
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Hello Gert, I appreciate your time and thank you for the lovely comments; my granddaughter too says thank you. God bless.
Comment from Joan E.
I was so pleased to see your name pop up on my screen and I enjoyed your young granddaughter's 5-7-5 haiku. She has you knack for selecting vivid verbs and imagery with the "raining sunshine" and the "rainbows arch"! She even included alliteration. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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I was so pleased to see your name pop up on my screen and I enjoyed your young granddaughter's 5-7-5 haiku. She has you knack for selecting vivid verbs and imagery with the "raining sunshine" and the "rainbows arch"! She even included alliteration. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Joan my friend, very kind of you to visit and thank you very much for the wonderful review; my granddaughter is quite pleased. Take care.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku about the beauty of nature flows with rainbows and flowers and the sun shines down on us with rays like rain from the sky.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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A very well-written haiku about the beauty of nature flows with rainbows and flowers and the sun shines down on us with rays like rain from the sky.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2017
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Hello Sandra, thank you for stopping by and the lovely review; my granddaughter appreciates your encouraging review, thank you.
