The Perfect Man
Too good to be true?20 total reviews
Comment from trumby
WOW!!! This is great. You're very clever.
It's a completely different ending to what I was expecting. Although that may have been because I would have finished it differently if I'd written it.
It was a good twist at the end
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2017
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WOW!!! This is great. You're very clever.
It's a completely different ending to what I was expecting. Although that may have been because I would have finished it differently if I'd written it.
It was a good twist at the end
Comment Written 15-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2017
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I'm glad you enjoyed it.
The fun thing about reading other writers is that we all think so differently.
Thanks for the glowing stars.
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There used to be a saying in Aus. that the perfect woman is (a) 3 foot tall (b) with a flat head (c) and whose father owns a brewery
I never would have ascribed to this saying,but it IS a joke. Not meant to be taken seriously
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:)
Comment from BeasPeas
This was a super write. I liked everything about it. I've been writing a few things along this vein myself and am happy to see yours. Humanoids, androids will be reality in the next few generations. Your writing is clear and interesting. Lines flow well one to the other. Fabulous. Marilyn
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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This was a super write. I liked everything about it. I've been writing a few things along this vein myself and am happy to see yours. Humanoids, androids will be reality in the next few generations. Your writing is clear and interesting. Lines flow well one to the other. Fabulous. Marilyn
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2017
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I'm glad you liked it, Marilyn. BTW, have you seen a British TV show called Humans? You might enjoy it.
Thanks for reading.
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I have not seen that show, but will look for it. This topic interests me because it's coming.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
This was a very interesting story. It reveals the reality that technology will always have it's glitches. There is always the risk of something going really wrong with robots or technology. On the other hand though, your sense of humor was marvelous. This story fed my imagination as I read it. I found it to be a very creative idea. Interesting...
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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This was a very interesting story. It reveals the reality that technology will always have it's glitches. There is always the risk of something going really wrong with robots or technology. On the other hand though, your sense of humor was marvelous. This story fed my imagination as I read it. I found it to be a very creative idea. Interesting...
Comment Written 29-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2017
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Thanks for reading, Tier.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written story. Not even a pricy robotic man can be perfect it seems. They will always be on their most perfect behaviour at the beginning and as soon as something goes wrong the woman is to blame.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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A very well-written story. Not even a pricy robotic man can be perfect it seems. They will always be on their most perfect behaviour at the beginning and as soon as something goes wrong the woman is to blame.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thanks for reading, Sandra.
Comment from WalkerMan
This creative story actually is quite plausible, given technological trends and human nature. It is realistically told, including the apparent electric shock which caused the fall that either changed Josh's programming, shorted out a safeguard component in his circuitry, or both. At the end, questions remain as to whether the police can overpower "him" and who will be held responsible for any damage, or further damage, done. Embarrassment is the least of Miss Lawson's worries now. Does she have Amok Robot Insurance? Excellent.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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This creative story actually is quite plausible, given technological trends and human nature. It is realistically told, including the apparent electric shock which caused the fall that either changed Josh's programming, shorted out a safeguard component in his circuitry, or both. At the end, questions remain as to whether the police can overpower "him" and who will be held responsible for any damage, or further damage, done. Embarrassment is the least of Miss Lawson's worries now. Does she have Amok Robot Insurance? Excellent.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thanks for your kind review.
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You are welcome. It is an interesting story. -- Mike
Comment from c_lucas
Sometimes, you get more than you bargain for. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a fascinating read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Sometimes, you get more than you bargain for. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a fascinating read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Rasmine
This was good! :P
I liked this sentence: My car snailed along the road and I had to make an effort not to sound the horn every five minutes. (I'm just wondering why her car was going so slow? Traffic?
I found a typo: At nine thirty (nine-thirty), I finally parked outside the grey (gray) building.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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This was good! :P
I liked this sentence: My car snailed along the road and I had to make an effort not to sound the horn every five minutes. (I'm just wondering why her car was going so slow? Traffic?
I found a typo: At nine thirty (nine-thirty), I finally parked outside the grey (gray) building.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2017
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Thanks for reading and paying attention.
I've been googling times and the hyphen seems to be optional.
As for gray, that's the American spelling. In Britain the spelling is grey.
Comment from smerryman3
This was a cool take on the writing prompt. You did a nice job building the suspense for the arrival of Josh and leaving the reader on a cliff hanger at the end. It was a very cohesive, interesting read.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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This was a cool take on the writing prompt. You did a nice job building the suspense for the arrival of Josh and leaving the reader on a cliff hanger at the end. It was a very cohesive, interesting read.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from w.j.debi
Wow. The perfect man isn't so perfect after all. Darn that technology when it quits working.
Excellent story telling. Everything starts out so romantic and then turns frightening in a flash. I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Wow. The perfect man isn't so perfect after all. Darn that technology when it quits working.
Excellent story telling. Everything starts out so romantic and then turns frightening in a flash. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Thesis
Just proves that nobody is perfect, even a robot, LOL.
This was an interesting and we'll written story. I enjoyed the way you described your need for a boyfriend that would be designed especially for you.
It must have been faulty programming that he resorted to a nasty boyfriend.
Thank God for nosey neighbors, LOL.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Just proves that nobody is perfect, even a robot, LOL.
This was an interesting and we'll written story. I enjoyed the way you described your need for a boyfriend that would be designed especially for you.
It must have been faulty programming that he resorted to a nasty boyfriend.
Thank God for nosey neighbors, LOL.
Comment Written 30-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Thanks for your review.
