Futility
This poem is about depression19 total reviews
Comment from Cycler
Yes ... very good. I see you have may very good poems in your portfolio. I'll look at more later. This one expresses wonderful emotion ... a battle outside and a battle inside ... expressed. Very lovely
Thanks for recommending this to me@!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Yes ... very good. I see you have may very good poems in your portfolio. I'll look at more later. This one expresses wonderful emotion ... a battle outside and a battle inside ... expressed. Very lovely
Thanks for recommending this to me@!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2017
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2017
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Hey, Cycler! Thanks for doing that. There is a reason we Head F..... people "do what we do, Say what we say....", sang Paul Simon ::))
Thanks for your kind words, Anita.
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Anita ... I love that name
Ohhh ... sorry ... I wasn't sure who was calling
Oh, referencing your message ... you came calling in the middle of the night
Yep, here I are ... all you see is me!
Sweet dreams
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Welcome to the clan. I own my own black dog and struggle to try to get him into his crate at times. And if the poetry I write then - if I write at all - is dark and restless, perhaps it is the best way to puncture a suppurating wound. Your poem flows well and while the mist might obscure the scene, your wordings hold no enigmas and I am grateful for that. It is deep in emotion without becoming maudlin. Well done and best of luck in holding the hound at bay. Being here on FanStory certainly helps.
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Welcome to the clan. I own my own black dog and struggle to try to get him into his crate at times. And if the poetry I write then - if I write at all - is dark and restless, perhaps it is the best way to puncture a suppurating wound. Your poem flows well and while the mist might obscure the scene, your wordings hold no enigmas and I am grateful for that. It is deep in emotion without becoming maudlin. Well done and best of luck in holding the hound at bay. Being here on FanStory certainly helps.
Comment Written 29-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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Great praise indeed! Thanks so much. The Hound, unfortunately, for me, has my scent, but I'm an old dog now too and have learnt a thing or too, not much, I don't get cocky, I just know some ways know when I hear them padding paws come a paddin' down the corridors. Thanks again for the specific feedback. I'm a retired academic and that's been my 'writing', I don't know where words like this come from, just hope it doesn't go away too soon. your specific pointers are invaluable. A
Comment from l.raven
HI Anio, you really do have a talent for writing...I have been there before myself...depressed...you know you are walking around...but just where you are and where you are going is not clear...very well worded...very well written...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
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HI Anio, you really do have a talent for writing...I have been there before myself...depressed...you know you are walking around...but just where you are and where you are going is not clear...very well worded...very well written...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 28-May-2017
reply by the author on 31-May-2017
Linda, thank you again. Anita
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you are so always welcome...love xxoo Linda
Comment from estory
I think the poem captures the sense of depression very well, good tension in the language, a tightly strung meter, a plodding drip of lines gives you that feeling of a never ending depression, a dark feeling you can't escape from. the dog is always nipping at your heals, the struggle never ends, the shadows return after each swiing of the arm. estory
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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I think the poem captures the sense of depression very well, good tension in the language, a tightly strung meter, a plodding drip of lines gives you that feeling of a never ending depression, a dark feeling you can't escape from. the dog is always nipping at your heals, the struggle never ends, the shadows return after each swiing of the arm. estory
Comment Written 27-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Your feedback is truly appreciated estory. I like to be told specifically like this what it is that is working. Work like this comes from some mysterious place as I have written elsewhere, and I don't have the map. Feedback like this gives me clues. Thanks so much again. A
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is beautifully penned, from the heart and many will identify with the sentiments. I love the rhymes, the layout and the flow is just perfect, I hope your depression has now lifted, I wish you all the best with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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This is beautifully penned, from the heart and many will identify with the sentiments. I love the rhymes, the layout and the flow is just perfect, I hope your depression has now lifted, I wish you all the best with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-May-2017
reply by the author on 27-May-2017
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Dolly so much thanks for your praise, that's most encouraging. Depression DOES lift but it doesn't 'go away', the Black Dog has exceptional sense of smell and he can sniff one out very well! It gets easier as one gets older and wiser and tougher. Though it's still not fun when it hits. Thanks again, xxA
Comment from pome lover
Well, Anio, it is beautifully written depression! Wonderful choices of words and phrases - certainly bringing forth pictures of fear and fighting, unseeing in the mist.
Mysterious and lyrically expressed.
This is really good!
Maybe you will offer us one when you are happy. That should be a joy to read.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Well, Anio, it is beautifully written depression! Wonderful choices of words and phrases - certainly bringing forth pictures of fear and fighting, unseeing in the mist.
Mysterious and lyrically expressed.
This is really good!
Maybe you will offer us one when you are happy. That should be a joy to read.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Your comments are great praise indeed and I'm so knocked out by the stars, thank you! Thanks for your encouragement. It's a mysterious place where these poems come from - I wish I could be there at will! Do you have a map?
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just keep writing and try to think positively. You certainly express yourself well. I mean it.
You'll hit that happy place. I have confidence in you!
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Thia is an excellent poem and a great contest entry. As you know, contests are very difficult to win. It takes skill and some luck to pull it off.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Thia is an excellent poem and a great contest entry. As you know, contests are very difficult to win. It takes skill and some luck to pull it off.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Thanks for your comments Thomas. I'm totally new here and brazenly posted my first poem via a contest!!! I'll be OK, I'm 70, all this is new to me.:)
Comment from Eve Bailey
This is a great piece of work. My husband being a Vietnam Vet still talks about the horrid scenes In the war zone. I pray you are feeling better about yourself and the bad thoughts have vanished. This is very well written.
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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This is a great piece of work. My husband being a Vietnam Vet still talks about the horrid scenes In the war zone. I pray you are feeling better about yourself and the bad thoughts have vanished. This is very well written.
Comment Written 26-May-2017
reply by the author on 26-May-2017
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Thank you Eve. Depression has never left me and you would know how long the scars last and the flashbacks come with your husband being a Vietnam Vet. But as the years pass and with loving friends and good therapy , you learn to handle it better when it comes, that ol' Black Doggie sniffin' you out.
Comment from lyenochka
Great description about battling depression. I really like the poet's voice charging and fighting even though it's not clear who, what and how many are in the enemy force. Very dramatically portrayed!
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Great description about battling depression. I really like the poet's voice charging and fighting even though it's not clear who, what and how many are in the enemy force. Very dramatically portrayed!
Comment Written 24-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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lyenochka, Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. When in the battle with the black dog and its nasty mates like panic attacks and anxiety that's how it feels, how much more 'stuff' is going to assault your senses and your physical being.
Thanks again.
Comment from Linda Hughes
I see the battle and conflict going on with depression, which is likened to soldiers fighting, but they are fighting. Depression is a winner, or loser, or possibly even a stalemate. At the closing of the poem, a soldier seems to signify a continuation of the fight on depression after suffering a great deal, even though it seems pointless. I see how the poem makes depression a surviving enemy to be fought again and again. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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I see the battle and conflict going on with depression, which is likened to soldiers fighting, but they are fighting. Depression is a winner, or loser, or possibly even a stalemate. At the closing of the poem, a soldier seems to signify a continuation of the fight on depression after suffering a great deal, even though it seems pointless. I see how the poem makes depression a surviving enemy to be fought again and again. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 23-May-2017
reply by the author on 24-May-2017
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Linda, thanks for reading and for your perceptive comment. I'm 70 and I've suffered from undiagnosed depression, anxiety, agoraphobia , panic attacks since I was a kid. I've only been diagnosed and am going to therapy in recent years even though psychology is my professional thing! Physician heal thyself huh? So since I was a kid I learnt how to deal with that nasty black dog and his nasty little mates, some mentioned above and then there's the physical illness that untreated depression turns into. When you've done it for so long you learn to become a bit of a warrior. That doggie does come back, good sense of smell of course, no hiding there!
