Wow
story of first kiss between strangers10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story about a first kiss, Wow, takes a cool turn as dog fight leads to an instant attraction for a boxer owner. Nice.
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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This one-hundred-word story about a first kiss, Wow, takes a cool turn as dog fight leads to an instant attraction for a boxer owner. Nice.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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thank you, Bill
Comment from Elizabeth Daniels
I have heard that dogs are a good conversation starter with strangers. Never knew they were also good kissing starters. lol I guess whatever it takes, right? A cute, quick story.
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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I have heard that dogs are a good conversation starter with strangers. Never knew they were also good kissing starters. lol I guess whatever it takes, right? A cute, quick story.
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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thank you!
Comment from BeasPeas
Umm, umm, thanks to Drools and the Doberman. A cute little story about dogs bringing two people together. I think it happens more often than we think. An enjoyable read. Marilyn
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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Umm, umm, thanks to Drools and the Doberman. A cute little story about dogs bringing two people together. I think it happens more often than we think. An enjoyable read. Marilyn
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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thank you very much
Comment from F. Wehr3
I enjoyed this story and wish you best of luck in the contest. I found a couple of things for your consideration.
Doberman-man--I paused on this. Maybe, Doberman's owner?
"Hi," He says. "I'm..."--he should be lower cased. You should use an em dash instead of the three dot ellipsis.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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I enjoyed this story and wish you best of luck in the contest. I found a couple of things for your consideration.
Doberman-man--I paused on this. Maybe, Doberman's owner?
"Hi," He says. "I'm..."--he should be lower cased. You should use an em dash instead of the three dot ellipsis.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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I will take your advice on the last two corrections - you are right (of course), but Doberman-man is something a female would say - at least I would. :)
Thanks for your kind words and good wishes.
pome lover
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ya know...it's not entirely clear here whether your protagonist is male or female.
As the owner of a boxer, I took them to be a man. If that's true, then this story should be a HUGE hit with the LGBT community.
If not, then our dear Tom must be the most handsome guy in the world to be so bold as to kiss a woman he'd never met before in such a manner.
Had I done something like that, not only would the Doberman have devoured my Chihuahua before we had the opportunity to bocame untangled, but cries of, "Help...rape!" would have rung out across the land like tolling bells of death.
Best wishes to you in the contest...
~Dean
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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Ya know...it's not entirely clear here whether your protagonist is male or female.
As the owner of a boxer, I took them to be a man. If that's true, then this story should be a HUGE hit with the LGBT community.
If not, then our dear Tom must be the most handsome guy in the world to be so bold as to kiss a woman he'd never met before in such a manner.
Had I done something like that, not only would the Doberman have devoured my Chihuahua before we had the opportunity to bocame untangled, but cries of, "Help...rape!" would have rung out across the land like tolling bells of death.
Best wishes to you in the contest...
~Dean
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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well, Dean, as with most of my posts - except political ones - it is just a bit of fun.
Damn! that's a mean looking dog.
But thanks for the good wishes.
pome lover
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My pleasure.
Comment from giraffmang
hi there,
Very nice competition entry you've crafted here. It is simple and straight to the point. Nice using the dogs as a means of introduction. Lucky she didn't report him for sexual harassment though... lol
"Hi," He says. "I'm..." - he says.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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hi there,
Very nice competition entry you've crafted here. It is simple and straight to the point. Nice using the dogs as a means of introduction. Lucky she didn't report him for sexual harassment though... lol
"Hi," He says. "I'm..." - he says.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 20-May-2017
reply by the author on 20-May-2017
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thanks.
dog people are generally pretty nice. :)
Comment from wondertwin
Love it, great flash fiction romance! That would make for the best walk ever :)
PS, love boxers too..is Drools real or fiction in your story? Good luck, Blessings, AmyJo
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Love it, great flash fiction romance! That would make for the best walk ever :)
PS, love boxers too..is Drools real or fiction in your story? Good luck, Blessings, AmyJo
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Amy Jo, sadly Drools is fiction, but I love the drooly sweeties, too.
Thanks for your good wishes!
Comment from RodG
Being a former dog owner, I can easily visualize how this medley of dogs-and-leashes could lead to a kiss with a stranger. Good description and just enough dialog.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Being a former dog owner, I can easily visualize how this medley of dogs-and-leashes could lead to a kiss with a stranger. Good description and just enough dialog.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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thank you!
Comment from pbomar1115
Two people out walking their dogs. They meet when the dogs go nuts over each other, getting their leashes tangled. While the lady and man, masters to the dogs, attempt to untangle the leashes, they kiss, by accident, of course. Wow.
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Two people out walking their dogs. They meet when the dogs go nuts over each other, getting their leashes tangled. While the lady and man, masters to the dogs, attempt to untangle the leashes, they kiss, by accident, of course. Wow.
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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this is not a review. It is a condensation. There is nothing here to thank you for.
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We have different styles. Now, poems, I believe focuses on images, ideas, and mood. I got the idea that two people use their dogs to hook up. They kiss. Now, what do you expect? I try hard not to put anyone's artist idea down. This one was easy to REVIEW.
Comment from Mustang Patty
One might say that the dogs brought you together. Was it fate? You did a great job within the one hundred word count. I wish you all the best with the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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One might say that the dogs brought you together. Was it fate? You did a great job within the one hundred word count. I wish you all the best with the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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thank you!
