Bye
Leaving, going, gone.37 total reviews
Comment from kathleenspalding
As, so sad. Excellent one six one flows well and captures a sad parting using very few words. Perfect artwork for the poem. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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As, so sad. Excellent one six one flows well and captures a sad parting using very few words. Perfect artwork for the poem. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and for taking the time to review, your comments are greatly appreciated as are your good wishes.
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You're welcome
Comment from Neonewman
Awe, what a story this tiny piece has delivered your reviewing fans. It is difficult to deliver a full story for the readers mind in such few words and then to rhyme. I've dabbled here before lol.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Awe, what a story this tiny piece has delivered your reviewing fans. It is difficult to deliver a full story for the readers mind in such few words and then to rhyme. I've dabbled here before lol.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you for reading and then taking the time to review, your comments are greatly appreciated. Blessings.
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My pleasure
Comment from c_lucas
Young children tend to cry when they know a friend or love one is leaving. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Young children tend to cry when they know a friend or love one is leaving. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review, your comments are very much appreciated.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You don't get many words to say something in this 1-6-1 form but between this emotional photo and your simple, rhyming lines you portray the emotions of a sad goodbye. Well done,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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You don't get many words to say something in this 1-6-1 form but between this emotional photo and your simple, rhyming lines you portray the emotions of a sad goodbye. Well done,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review, your comments are very much appreciated.
Comment from Rasmine
Good little poem. I love it. Says a lot, and the photo really goes with it. I just want to hug those little children.
I wish you luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Good little poem. I love it. Says a lot, and the photo really goes with it. I just want to hug those little children.
I wish you luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review, your comments are very much appreciated, as are your good luck wishes.
Comment from XGoneX
Hi,
Why?
I am going to cry.
Bye!
I found the rhyming and flow good. The message is simple, yet conveys the feeling of pain. It is emotional.
Good luck x
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Hi,
Why?
I am going to cry.
Bye!
I found the rhyming and flow good. The message is simple, yet conveys the feeling of pain. It is emotional.
Good luck x
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review, your comments are very much appreciated, as are your good luck wishes.
Comment from Hitcher
This is what one would call A teeny tiny poem 1-6-1, not a lot to play with but you managed to conjure up enough for a clear visual of why one would be about to cry...bye ! Can be very emotional. Good luck !!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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This is what one would call A teeny tiny poem 1-6-1, not a lot to play with but you managed to conjure up enough for a clear visual of why one would be about to cry...bye ! Can be very emotional. Good luck !!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review, your comments are very much appreciated, as are your good luck wishes.
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This was quite a sad read which was magnified by the children at the gate, a great picture choice for your so few words that painted an emotional picture.
Have a great day
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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This was quite a sad read which was magnified by the children at the gate, a great picture choice for your so few words that painted an emotional picture.
Have a great day
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review, your comments are very much appreciated.
Comment from Vijay Kumar V
How interesting, you have made a beautiful eye catching 1-6-1 in so simple words. This is a great skill. The best thing is it rhymes perfectly sound.
Have a great day. Namaskaram
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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How interesting, you have made a beautiful eye catching 1-6-1 in so simple words. This is a great skill. The best thing is it rhymes perfectly sound.
Have a great day. Namaskaram
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review, your comments are very much appreciated.
Comment from BeasPeas
I love your 1-6-1 and how all lines rhyme. Adorable and melancholy at the same time. The kids are so cute. It's hard to say goodbye. Very nicely done and much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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I love your 1-6-1 and how all lines rhyme. Adorable and melancholy at the same time. The kids are so cute. It's hard to say goodbye. Very nicely done and much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to review, your comments are very much appreciated, as are your good luck wishes.
