Perennials of War
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37 total reviews
Comment from bookishfabler
"Drew, breakfast will be ready in about twenty minutes. Do you want it out here?" asked Helen.
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He glanced at Shana. "You decide. I don't care either way."
(There is an unwanted "1" in between here.)
Sorry it took so long. I am way behind.
Thanks for another great chapter.
hugs HEidi
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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"Drew, breakfast will be ready in about twenty minutes. Do you want it out here?" asked Helen.
l
He glanced at Shana. "You decide. I don't care either way."
(There is an unwanted "1" in between here.)
Sorry it took so long. I am way behind.
Thanks for another great chapter.
hugs HEidi
Comment Written 21-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the catch. I have deleted the wayward I. LOL
Comment from DLBoo
Nicely done. Good flow, interesting dialogue, story moves right along without a bunch of nonsense. It's crisp, clean, and makes you want to turn the page. You do have one misplaced I or l and I have no idea how or why it's there. You may want to go back and remove that. Other than that wonderful read.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Nicely done. Good flow, interesting dialogue, story moves right along without a bunch of nonsense. It's crisp, clean, and makes you want to turn the page. You do have one misplaced I or l and I have no idea how or why it's there. You may want to go back and remove that. Other than that wonderful read.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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I have taken care of that naughty little I. thank you for the kind review.
Comment from barkingdog
I like Romeo's attention to Shana and her freely talking to him. It felt so real. We all do that with our animal friends.
Everything else read smoothly. Excellent dialogue. Good pacing.
- That's why we need to find out exactly what Morozov is up to(,) and who he's connected to.
Best wishes,
:) ellen xx
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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I like Romeo's attention to Shana and her freely talking to him. It felt so real. We all do that with our animal friends.
Everything else read smoothly. Excellent dialogue. Good pacing.
- That's why we need to find out exactly what Morozov is up to(,) and who he's connected to.
Best wishes,
:) ellen xx
Comment Written 20-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I have corrected that comma. Have I mentioned how much I HATE commas?
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Don't we ALL!!!!
Comment from Rasmine
Very good. I have missed some at the beginning, but know where I am kind of--your author's notes help immensely--thank you :) I hope she falls for someone, and they here. :)
Good character development.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Very good. I have missed some at the beginning, but know where I am kind of--your author's notes help immensely--thank you :) I hope she falls for someone, and they here. :)
Good character development.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
LOL, somehow it strikes me funny, the way Shana thought she was talking to the dog when she was talking to Drew. Is it Drew or Jeff? I wonder.
Good job with this one. I wonder why they want her painting. It's very mysterious.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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LOL, somehow it strikes me funny, the way Shana thought she was talking to the dog when she was talking to Drew. Is it Drew or Jeff? I wonder.
Good job with this one. I wonder why they want her painting. It's very mysterious.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. Shana is naive, but she will grow, or at least I hope she does.
Comment from C.C Williams
The story is great. It contains good dialogue and is easy to follow.
However, I'm wondering if the title was a typo or if it is supposed to be like that.
Shouldn't it be: 'Chapter eight part nine?'
- CC
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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The story is great. It contains good dialogue and is easy to follow.
However, I'm wondering if the title was a typo or if it is supposed to be like that.
Shouldn't it be: 'Chapter eight part nine?'
- CC
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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LOL, should be Chapter eight part one, but...I am doing it in German because... I have previously used all the English ones and combinations of ones FS will allow so I am getting creative. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sheena121
An interesting and captivating storyline, well written with perfect grammer and punctuation and spelling. Keep up the good work look forward to reading the rest.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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An interesting and captivating storyline, well written with perfect grammer and punctuation and spelling. Keep up the good work look forward to reading the rest.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
This is a great chapter.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Great dialogue.
Thanks for sharing the ending of the previous post.
Beautiful artwork: The image is a good match for this story.
The author's notes are greatly appreciated.- Thank you!
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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This is a great chapter.
Well-written.
Nicely polished.
Great dialogue.
Thanks for sharing the ending of the previous post.
Beautiful artwork: The image is a good match for this story.
The author's notes are greatly appreciated.- Thank you!
Thanks for sharing a part of your book.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Barbara,
It's been awhile since I've bumped into you.
Enjoyed the read. A whodunnit with a love theme, no doubt, told in your unquie style.
Sonali xx
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Hello Barbara,
It's been awhile since I've bumped into you.
Enjoyed the read. A whodunnit with a love theme, no doubt, told in your unquie style.
Sonali xx
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I am here once a week.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Drew has a nice way of speaking to Shana - so polite.
I'm keen to find out what Jeff will tell us -
Mind, the dogs steal the show in this chapter,
Most enjoyable, Barbara.
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Drew has a nice way of speaking to Shana - so polite.
I'm keen to find out what Jeff will tell us -
Mind, the dogs steal the show in this chapter,
Most enjoyable, Barbara.
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 18-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
