Hit Me
a different kind of assassin19 total reviews
Comment from IreneH
I like the tight writing and conversation.
Even though there is a woman in the photo, I was surprised at the end of that section.
The attitudes of the villains in both was bone-chilling.
The reference to being trained by magicians was a nice touch.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I like the tight writing and conversation.
Even though there is a woman in the photo, I was surprised at the end of that section.
The attitudes of the villains in both was bone-chilling.
The reference to being trained by magicians was a nice touch.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2021
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I am very excited to receive your kind praise of this story. Thank you very much. Rod
Comment from Mustang Patty
Thank you for sharing this entertaining tale of an assassin. Your entry for the contest is full of intrigue and does include a hit. Your hit woman was unique with her hands in that she could deal death. Well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you for sharing this entertaining tale of an assassin. Your entry for the contest is full of intrigue and does include a hit. Your hit woman was unique with her hands in that she could deal death. Well done and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you, patty, for sharing my story and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from valmay
A great contest entry written with style and panache. I think this is a difficult subject. Assasins aren't don't make good heroes, or in this case heroines. So well done Rod.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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A great contest entry written with style and panache. I think this is a difficult subject. Assasins aren't don't make good heroes, or in this case heroines. So well done Rod.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much, Valmay, for your kind praise and stellar rating of "Hit Me." I am encouraged to use Corinne again in future stories. Rod
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Sorry Rod about the extra word I left in my review.(aren't)
Comment from pome lover
This was very clever. "Who'd a thunk?" And of course you threw us off track when you said special talent with the hands, making us - or at least, me - think choking a person to death. Also at that point I thought it was a man. So two ways you threw me off track. Of course, it I'd thought about the painting above, I've have realized sooner. Anyway, I enjoyed it.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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This was very clever. "Who'd a thunk?" And of course you threw us off track when you said special talent with the hands, making us - or at least, me - think choking a person to death. Also at that point I thought it was a man. So two ways you threw me off track. Of course, it I'd thought about the painting above, I've have realized sooner. Anyway, I enjoyed it.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 16-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2017
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I am delighted I could throw you off a bit AND entertain you. Thanks so much for sharing and your kind praise. Rod
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most welcome
Comment from ciliverde
I like this a lot, and almost wish it was a longer story - in fact, I do wish it was, this could really go somewhere.
I love the line where we discover that the protagonist is a woman. Her method of dispatching the victim was an interesting mixture of kindness (letting him win) and cruelty (well, he did have to go...)
"Hit me!" Cabrese had said - should be Calabrese, no?
Carol
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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I like this a lot, and almost wish it was a longer story - in fact, I do wish it was, this could really go somewhere.
I love the line where we discover that the protagonist is a woman. Her method of dispatching the victim was an interesting mixture of kindness (letting him win) and cruelty (well, he did have to go...)
"Hit me!" Cabrese had said - should be Calabrese, no?
Carol
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Carol, for this marvelous review and stellar rating. I am delighted that you want MORE of Corinne. I don't know if I have a novel in me, but I do think she will appear in more stories posted in the future. Rod
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Good plan, you don't have to write a whole novel, that could be a daunting task, but more stories would be great :)
Comment from apky
Well, this one sure as heck hit me.
The writing i fabulous, the subject engaging, and the pace good enough
for any thriller/crime out there on the bookstore shelves.
You're good in this genre.
Thanks for sharing.
Apky
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Well, this one sure as heck hit me.
The writing i fabulous, the subject engaging, and the pace good enough
for any thriller/crime out there on the bookstore shelves.
You're good in this genre.
Thanks for sharing.
Apky
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Thank you so much, Apky, for your kind praise. I am delighted you think it could compete with other thrillers "out there" as I am thinking of expanding it into something much longer. Rod
Comment from judiverse
This is one cunning gal. I think a hit woman would have advantages a man wouldn't. Men would be susceptible if she's attractive, and a woman out to do them harm wouldn't arouse as much suspicion. She sure did know how to use her hands. Great suspense all the way to the end. judi
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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This is one cunning gal. I think a hit woman would have advantages a man wouldn't. Men would be susceptible if she's attractive, and a woman out to do them harm wouldn't arouse as much suspicion. She sure did know how to use her hands. Great suspense all the way to the end. judi
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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So glad you liked this, judi. Yes, I do think women dealers like Corinne have a distinct advantage in this kind of situation. Thanks so much for the kind praise.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from kathleenspalding
Good story! Very well written. Only a couple things for your consideration.
After (did you intend to type WE in upper case?) tracked down....
...same capo from AZ (can delete the 'had'. If you want to use past perfect somewhere, I'd use it in the part about their father, but it's not necessary.)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Good story! Very well written. Only a couple things for your consideration.
After (did you intend to type WE in upper case?) tracked down....
...same capo from AZ (can delete the 'had'. If you want to use past perfect somewhere, I'd use it in the part about their father, but it's not necessary.)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Hi Kathleen. I truly appreciate your spending the time reading and commenting on my story. Yes, the upper case letters were deliberate because italics are not available in FanStory's normal setting.
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You're welcome. Yeah, I know there is a way to do italics, but I can't get motivated enough to read the directions, LOL.
Comment from BeasPeas
Your story is interesting and well written. Clear. It moves right along in a believable way with good dialogue and backstory. Much luck to you in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Your story is interesting and well written. Clear. It moves right along in a believable way with good dialogue and backstory. Much luck to you in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Marilyn. I truly appreciate your sharing my story and your kind praise.
Comment from emptypage
This is very clever. It isn't anything I'd have expected at all, so it's fresh, too. Great combination.
This is also a rare case of when telling outdoes showing. I never say that; it usually doesn't happen. You were quite adept at telling the story in this way.
Blind contest entry, I see, so I'll have to wait until after to see if I know you, but you've got my vote.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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This is very clever. It isn't anything I'd have expected at all, so it's fresh, too. Great combination.
This is also a rare case of when telling outdoes showing. I never say that; it usually doesn't happen. You were quite adept at telling the story in this way.
Blind contest entry, I see, so I'll have to wait until after to see if I know you, but you've got my vote.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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It thrills me to know you think this short-short is both "clever" and "fresh." I truly welcome the high praise and the bonus--your vote. Thank you so much.
