Lost Without You
a frightening dependency16 total reviews
Comment from closetpoetjester
Well WASN'T that a stroke of luck?! Good to know you found the phone but great to know you also made use of losing it by penning this great poem of bereavement haha
We rely on technology FAR too much...that's why I like a hard copy of everything as well...for these such occasions, which occur OFTEN, in my life haha.
I honestly don't know if we can trust all these storage devices forever either with their reliability! LOL
Anyway, a beautifully rhyme poem of heartbreak and seperation anxiety LOL
BTW I loved this stanza
One minute you were here, then gone.
I wonder how I'll carry on.
How clearly now it's plain to see
I lack responsibility
(I could have written this! LOL -- I lose my glasses at least twice a day and my phone at least 4 times haha)
GREAT JOB!
Hugs and much love
Phillippa
xoxoxo
PS Hugs for Bill xx
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Well WASN'T that a stroke of luck?! Good to know you found the phone but great to know you also made use of losing it by penning this great poem of bereavement haha
We rely on technology FAR too much...that's why I like a hard copy of everything as well...for these such occasions, which occur OFTEN, in my life haha.
I honestly don't know if we can trust all these storage devices forever either with their reliability! LOL
Anyway, a beautifully rhyme poem of heartbreak and seperation anxiety LOL
BTW I loved this stanza
One minute you were here, then gone.
I wonder how I'll carry on.
How clearly now it's plain to see
I lack responsibility
(I could have written this! LOL -- I lose my glasses at least twice a day and my phone at least 4 times haha)
GREAT JOB!
Hugs and much love
Phillippa
xoxoxo
PS Hugs for Bill xx
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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You are such a sweetie to review this poem for only two cents and to award it a six-star rating. And, of course, you always write the best reviews. THANK YOU!!
I was just telling Bill last night how glad I am that you still pop in to FanStory. In looking back at poems I posted a few years ago, I would get so many more reviews and almost always one from you, my dear Aussie friend. Don't ever go away, okay?
Hugs and much love right back at you
Connie xoxoxo
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. I think we all have this problem. It is sometimes a nuisance but it is also a handy tool to easily organize our lives, but when we lost them, we are totally lost.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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A very well-written poem. I think we all have this problem. It is sometimes a nuisance but it is also a handy tool to easily organize our lives, but when we lost them, we are totally lost.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your delightful review, Sandra.
Connie
Comment from ronnie k
What a realistic write, I lose the use of my computer for a month and believe me I e was in mourning, you pinned this as if it was a true love without mentioning the phone I would have mourned your lost LOL, excellent write.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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What a realistic write, I lose the use of my computer for a month and believe me I e was in mourning, you pinned this as if it was a true love without mentioning the phone I would have mourned your lost LOL, excellent write.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Ronnie, for your delightful review.
Connie
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a scary and funny poem. It is scary that phones have become so important to most people. That is why I still have a flip phone. I know the important phone numbers by heart or have them written in a family phone book. I just don't want another item that will link me to the internet. I need to be away from it sometimes. I use it all day at work and then to do this and email.
I like the simple rhymes and the aabb rhyme scheme. It fits the silliness of the subject.
Keep writing.
Joan
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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This is a scary and funny poem. It is scary that phones have become so important to most people. That is why I still have a flip phone. I know the important phone numbers by heart or have them written in a family phone book. I just don't want another item that will link me to the internet. I need to be away from it sometimes. I use it all day at work and then to do this and email.
I like the simple rhymes and the aabb rhyme scheme. It fits the silliness of the subject.
Keep writing.
Joan
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Joan, for your delightful review. Good for you that you have all your phone numbers written down somewhere or have memorized them. Even after being so afraid when I thought I lost my phone, I still haven't written all those numbers down. Gotta do that!
Thanks again.
Connie
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No problem. I am an old school type of girl or maybe just a writer at heart.
Joan
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Connie C, a timely poem. Our modern world has us dependent upon technology. It keeps us close to families, friends and the world, but it also keeps us at a distance -- no longer needing or wanting to see people face-to-face.
Our hearts may be closer, but we are losing the need for
human contact which is the pulse of our hearts, and I think one day will backfire. I enjoyed reading your poem and its personification. I especially liked:
I'm too dependent--that, I see.
If only you'd return to me.
I trusted you with all I know.
It worries me that you don't show.
(This is so true for many. Our phone holds our secrets where once another person close to our heart held our secrets and we shared.)
I also liked:
It's time for me to face the fact
that you've helped keep my life intact.
(There was a time where I knew everyone's name, address, and phone number by heart, and now I only know a few.)
A fun poem. I'm so glad that your phone turned up. Losing a cell phone is now in the same category as losing a credit card; we fear who may find it. Very good. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Hello Connie C, a timely poem. Our modern world has us dependent upon technology. It keeps us close to families, friends and the world, but it also keeps us at a distance -- no longer needing or wanting to see people face-to-face.
Our hearts may be closer, but we are losing the need for
human contact which is the pulse of our hearts, and I think one day will backfire. I enjoyed reading your poem and its personification. I especially liked:
I'm too dependent--that, I see.
If only you'd return to me.
I trusted you with all I know.
It worries me that you don't show.
(This is so true for many. Our phone holds our secrets where once another person close to our heart held our secrets and we shared.)
I also liked:
It's time for me to face the fact
that you've helped keep my life intact.
(There was a time where I knew everyone's name, address, and phone number by heart, and now I only know a few.)
A fun poem. I'm so glad that your phone turned up. Losing a cell phone is now in the same category as losing a credit card; we fear who may find it. Very good. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for such a delightful review and for pointing out some of your favorite lines.
You write wonderful reviews!
Connie
Comment from DR DIP
hehe I love this. People become so dependent on their i phones that if they lose it it is like losing a lover or loved one great twist to say that was what you were referring to at the end Enjoyed the poem
dip
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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hehe I love this. People become so dependent on their i phones that if they lose it it is like losing a lover or loved one great twist to say that was what you were referring to at the end Enjoyed the poem
dip
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your review and for catching the twist at the end.
Connie
Comment from Just2Write
What a great build up and fantastic close to this poem, Connie - The world has become too dependent on electronics, and believe it or not, there are some worried scientists that are trying to 'dumb' them down before they start making decisions for us. Steven Hawking has warned that computers are getting too much control.
And we, kids especially are lapping up everything new that comes on the market.
I have a paper fall-back on most of my information base. Lord only know what will happen if we lose all the information that has already been transferred to computers with no other records to retrieve information from.
A great poem and a fun read, my friend.
Rose.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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What a great build up and fantastic close to this poem, Connie - The world has become too dependent on electronics, and believe it or not, there are some worried scientists that are trying to 'dumb' them down before they start making decisions for us. Steven Hawking has warned that computers are getting too much control.
And we, kids especially are lapping up everything new that comes on the market.
I have a paper fall-back on most of my information base. Lord only know what will happen if we lose all the information that has already been transferred to computers with no other records to retrieve information from.
A great poem and a fun read, my friend.
Rose.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Rose, for a wonderful review. Good for you that you've backed up so much that is on your phone. I keep telling myself that I should do it; and even after losing my phone for an hour, I still haven't gotten around to it. I watch my three-year-old grandson, Jack, and how he maneuvers his way around his mom's cell phone and her iPad, and I am amazed. I like it best when he just sits and lets me read him a book and doesn't rely on technology to entertain him. I'm afraid that Steven Hawking is so correct when he says that computers are getting too much control. How are we ever going to go back?
Thanks again, my friend.
Connie
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It's pretty hard to get the genie back in the bottle, and the Greeks learned that Pandora's box was full of stuff that was meant to be locked up forever. Sigh. Kid's are whizzes on cell phones and tablets, but they are lacking more and more think for yourself tools every day. We load our brains with drivel and learn little.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yes, Connie! That is the truth! We are getting too dependent on these phones and computers. All my numbers are stored there as well. Perhaps we should take a few minutes and jot them down in a book so we will have them if the worse happens.
Well done. Hugs. Nancy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Yes, Connie! That is the truth! We are getting too dependent on these phones and computers. All my numbers are stored there as well. Perhaps we should take a few minutes and jot them down in a book so we will have them if the worse happens.
Well done. Hugs. Nancy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you, my friend, for your feedback. Yeah, just like you, all my phone numbers are in my phone. After my fear that I had lost my phone, I was determined to write all those numbers down. Have I done so yet? Nope! It's on my list of to-do things which I hope to get to one day. :>)
Thanks again.
Hugs,
Connie
Comment from TAB_that's me
Sometimes I think it would be good for us all to get rid of the cell phones for a whole day - once a week so we wouldn't be so dependent on them. :)
Your poem makes it seem like you are a teenager, not a grandma:) lol.
Well written Connie. A pleasure to read.
teresa
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Sometimes I think it would be good for us all to get rid of the cell phones for a whole day - once a week so we wouldn't be so dependent on them. :)
Your poem makes it seem like you are a teenager, not a grandma:) lol.
Well written Connie. A pleasure to read.
teresa
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Wow--a six-star review! Thank you, Teresa. I chuckled when you said my poem makes it seem like I"m a teenager, not a grandma.
You suggested it might be good for us to get rid of our cell phones for a whole day once a week--that just might be a good topic for a poem.
Thanks again, my friend.
Connie
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It was fun. Well deserved!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good poem... had me fooled into thinking you'd lost a person dear to you. Well, your phone is a LOT of people dear to you, and losing it would be a disaster. Glad you found it. :)
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Good poem... had me fooled into thinking you'd lost a person dear to you. Well, your phone is a LOT of people dear to you, and losing it would be a disaster. Glad you found it. :)
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Phyllis, for your review. I'm glad I had you fooled into thinking the poem was about losing someone and not a phone. That was my intention, and it worked!
I hope you are up and feeling better.
My best to you.
Connie
