Fence Posts
a metaphoric poem58 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
Mr. Touche,
This is lovely writing and very sad. I wish I could say I understood it, except I gather that you'd like to be somewhere other than where you are - and not just physically.
And why do you call yourself an imposition on this planet?
I am supposed to be reviewing your post, so pardon the questions.
I have read this three times and I think I get it now. It is a longing for change in your life. I hope you find your happiness soon and explore the other side of your brain.
Your words are beautiful. sail over the fence posts, etc. As I said, a lovely poem.
I can see why it was recognized.
pome lover
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Mr. Touche,
This is lovely writing and very sad. I wish I could say I understood it, except I gather that you'd like to be somewhere other than where you are - and not just physically.
And why do you call yourself an imposition on this planet?
I am supposed to be reviewing your post, so pardon the questions.
I have read this three times and I think I get it now. It is a longing for change in your life. I hope you find your happiness soon and explore the other side of your brain.
Your words are beautiful. sail over the fence posts, etc. As I said, a lovely poem.
I can see why it was recognized.
pome lover
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you for a review that actually touched me.
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you're most welcome
Comment from Rlegel99
Metaphorical poem about broken fences being like the broken parts inside. This poem flows well. The wood choice is good. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Metaphorical poem about broken fences being like the broken parts inside. This poem flows well. The wood choice is good. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you.
Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
it took me twice to read to understand once
I did I fell in love with this write what an amazing
mind that you have penned so perfectly
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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it took me twice to read to understand once
I did I fell in love with this write what an amazing
mind that you have penned so perfectly
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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So very nice of U. Both to review, and to read it enough so it resonated with you.
Comment from rspoet
If only we had wings,
if only we could rise above
so called humanity
If only there was a gap
a broken place
in the fence
as the world itself is broken
If only we could sail away
above the fence
beyond the wall
Somewhere
any where
other than here
RS
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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If only we had wings,
if only we could rise above
so called humanity
If only there was a gap
a broken place
in the fence
as the world itself is broken
If only we could sail away
above the fence
beyond the wall
Somewhere
any where
other than here
RS
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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You have grasped this well. Doug
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a sad song of waiting, perhaps in a prison, or perhaps as a reflection on those who wished to be free and never were. It speaks to the horrors that we must never forget occurred.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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This is a sad song of waiting, perhaps in a prison, or perhaps as a reflection on those who wished to be free and never were. It speaks to the horrors that we must never forget occurred.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Yes, Bill. And thank you.
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi
I see this poem of a person in a place of real sadness, possibly depressed, or oppressed. Wishing for to be released from the metaphorical fence that is binding. Somewhere over the rainbow, has wonderful words of Joy.
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Hi
I see this poem of a person in a place of real sadness, possibly depressed, or oppressed. Wishing for to be released from the metaphorical fence that is binding. Somewhere over the rainbow, has wonderful words of Joy.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 21-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017
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Thank you, Mary. Absolutely correct.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A well written metaphorical poem, my friend. Interesting imagery and I love over the fenceposts. Thought-provoking as your work always is~Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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A well written metaphorical poem, my friend. Interesting imagery and I love over the fenceposts. Thought-provoking as your work always is~Debbie
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Debbie.
Comment from sue133
A very sad and well composed poem. The message was loud and clear. Freedom at all cost. I think the photo is a concentration camp? If so, it is well chosen. Judy Garland did not have a happy life and the reference to her song from 'The Wizard of Oz' is clever. She was not free but at the bid and call of film producers. Well done on writing this. Susan
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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A very sad and well composed poem. The message was loud and clear. Freedom at all cost. I think the photo is a concentration camp? If so, it is well chosen. Judy Garland did not have a happy life and the reference to her song from 'The Wizard of Oz' is clever. She was not free but at the bid and call of film producers. Well done on writing this. Susan
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Susan. You understand much.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
I don't quite understand what the fence posts as to the broken fence means, but that is OK. I think I grasp the main meaning of your poem: two "broken" people who, upon finding one another, are able to heal. Perhaps, after the healing they are now able to sail high, as would be the fence posts. No longer broken. Well done. A very good poem. Also, to said over the fence posts to be free.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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I don't quite understand what the fence posts as to the broken fence means, but that is OK. I think I grasp the main meaning of your poem: two "broken" people who, upon finding one another, are able to heal. Perhaps, after the healing they are now able to sail high, as would be the fence posts. No longer broken. Well done. A very good poem. Also, to said over the fence posts to be free.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Yes, over the fence posts is to be free. A double entendre really, Free from their own fenced in lines and since this is a picture of a conxcentration camp, free period. Even if only in dreams. Hence the reference to Judy Garland ans :Somewhere Over the Rainbow."
Comment from InHisownwrite
Love the intro into this:
A broken fence
he walks through
the broken place
where I see too. (and these words too)
and then with sea
and laughter start
to mend ourselves
that fell apart
The entire piece could be about anyone's life, and anyone's obstacles...
Very well written.... Also love the last three verses.... Love it...
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Love the intro into this:
A broken fence
he walks through
the broken place
where I see too. (and these words too)
and then with sea
and laughter start
to mend ourselves
that fell apart
The entire piece could be about anyone's life, and anyone's obstacles...
Very well written.... Also love the last three verses.... Love it...
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thank you so very much. Doug
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Welcome.....
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Welcome
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welcome
