Reviews from

Darkness

Lanturne contest entry

36 total reviews 
Comment from marybell1
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

A interesting choice for a lanturne poem. You had the correct number of lines and syllables for this style of poem and I liked your choice of photo.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2017

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017
    Thank you Marybell, I appreciate your review.
reply by marybell1 on 14-Mar-2017
    You are most welcome.
    Marybell1.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017
    :)
Comment from Lu Saluna
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This is a very good Laturne poem.
It is really good, I love horror horror in any work, poetry as well. This is awesome.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2017

reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
    Thank you so much Lu. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Hi Kerry; this is a powerful lanturne. With just a few words, you've created a story, and sent a chill down the reader's spine. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2017

reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
    Thanks Patty, I never wrote anything dark. I was inspired by Dean.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Well, looks like the syllable count is A-OK, Kerry.
I like the presentation, very Gothic.
I know very little about the Lanturne form, but the description/explanation in your author's notes helped.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2017

reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
    Thank you Dean, It is much appreciated. I was having trouble getting the picture from photo bucket, I gave up. The picture of the girl has red eyes and the birds as well, but cant see it, maybe you can help me later. :)
reply by Dean Kuch on 11-Mar-2017
    Sure, it still looks great just as it is.
    Good job!
    ~Dean :)
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
    Awww, Thank you. :) You've already helped me fix it.
    So, thanks a bunch.
reply by Dean Kuch on 11-Mar-2017
    photo My siggy_zpsmbstvkrp.gif
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
    :)))
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

You have turned this into quite a dark poem, Kerry, which puts quite a forceful slant on it. It is heavy with meaning and I thought your last line very effective. I hadn't heard of this type of poem so I have put my name down to join the contest, Giddy

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2017

reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
    I've never written anything dark, it's a first. Im glad you like it. happy you joined it. It's my 1st Lanturne as well.
Comment from Rhonni
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Follows the rules of a lanturne poem, this seems to describe a sadness that has overshadowed someone. It speaks of how depression feels to me...somber and gloomy, but well written..good luck in the contest

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2017

reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
    Thank you so much for your review.