Darkness
Lanturne contest entry36 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A great play on words as the lantern brings light, but your lantern is turned off and darkness has engulfed it! I loved your poem and wish you luck with the competition, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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A great play on words as the lantern brings light, but your lantern is turned off and darkness has engulfed it! I loved your poem and wish you luck with the competition, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much Dolly for your kind review.
Comment from nuthead
Cool choice of subject for a poetry form called lanturne (light). A good juxtaposition if you will.
The form is well executed, it tells a story, and plea for help, rather than just a mish-mash of words, which I've encountered with some of these shorter forms. Well done.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Cool choice of subject for a poetry form called lanturne (light). A good juxtaposition if you will.
The form is well executed, it tells a story, and plea for help, rather than just a mish-mash of words, which I've encountered with some of these shorter forms. Well done.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your terrific review.
Comment from tfawcus
Your Lanturne shines a light on the terrible darkness of depression, an affliction that besieges many. The cry for help in your last line is poignant. I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Your Lanturne shines a light on the terrible darkness of depression, an affliction that besieges many. The cry for help in your last line is poignant. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much, I appreciate your review, and taking time to read it.
Comment from His Grayness
My first exposure to this unusual poetic style, but I did back up and review the guidelines, to which I found this work to be highly compliant and very well done indeed. I cannot offer any suggestion to improve it as I believe the coloration and packaging is outstanding and overall, well presented. HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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My first exposure to this unusual poetic style, but I did back up and review the guidelines, to which I found this work to be highly compliant and very well done indeed. I cannot offer any suggestion to improve it as I believe the coloration and packaging is outstanding and overall, well presented. HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 19-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review this poem. It is a different style, I believe, I hope I had put in author notes of the syllable count for a lanturne.
Comment from Irish Rain
What an awesome entry! That is an Eerie, Eerie picture!! Makes for a colorful, and splendid presentation, and your writing fits this so well! Blessings...
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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What an awesome entry! That is an Eerie, Eerie picture!! Makes for a colorful, and splendid presentation, and your writing fits this so well! Blessings...
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review.
Comment from ronnie k
Powerful presentation, the whole of the poem screams HELP, but the good news is the fact that you are no sitting in your darkness in comfort, it appears you can and have seen THE LIGHT
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Powerful presentation, the whole of the poem screams HELP, but the good news is the fact that you are no sitting in your darkness in comfort, it appears you can and have seen THE LIGHT
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review, It's funny how when I did write this; it was just a poem; It was not based on my own reality. Since this write and responses I get, some one I spoke to says "it must come from somewhere in you" I suppose it was buried inside all along, as I do suffer from severe anxiety. I just don't know Ronnie. Best wishes to you.
Kerry
Comment from BeasPeas
Much luck in the contest with your interesting Lanturne. This reminds me of depression, which luckily I do not have. But according to friends who have tried to describe it to me, it sounds like this. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Much luck in the contest with your interesting Lanturne. This reminds me of depression, which luckily I do not have. But according to friends who have tried to describe it to me, it sounds like this. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2017
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Thank you Marilyn for taking the time to read and review this.
Comment from moonsunrise
This Laturne poem is very haunting. The imagery is perfect! I hope she receives and answer on her call for help.
Very well done!
Kind regards.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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This Laturne poem is very haunting. The imagery is perfect! I hope she receives and answer on her call for help.
Very well done!
Kind regards.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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Thank you kindly
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Your very welcome.
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the contest
with the correct syllables for a Lanturne poem
Those on the dark side will love it
Excellent presentation with art work and colors
and the perfect closing word
Well done
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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This is a fine entry for the contest
with the correct syllables for a Lanturne poem
Those on the dark side will love it
Excellent presentation with art work and colors
and the perfect closing word
Well done
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 17-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review. ~Kerry
Comment from lyenochka
So much said in so few words. There seems to be a redundancy in the first two lines but then the third line changes everything from a physical darkness to an internal one. Great one-word ending!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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So much said in so few words. There seems to be a redundancy in the first two lines but then the third line changes everything from a physical darkness to an internal one. Great one-word ending!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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thank you for your wonderful review its much appreciated.
