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Comment from Unspoken94
I once had a child who was scared of falling asleep
for fear that she would not wake up. I asked her,
one night while sitting with her, what helps her to fall
asleep. She said, "I look out my window and see all the stars
and I name them after all of the people who have helped me
through my illness. But, I always run out of stars!"
This is the spirit of your poem.
BTW, I chose this poem in your portfolio because it needed
one more review to be sent a Blue Ribbon. No longer. -Bill
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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I once had a child who was scared of falling asleep
for fear that she would not wake up. I asked her,
one night while sitting with her, what helps her to fall
asleep. She said, "I look out my window and see all the stars
and I name them after all of the people who have helped me
through my illness. But, I always run out of stars!"
This is the spirit of your poem.
BTW, I chose this poem in your portfolio because it needed
one more review to be sent a Blue Ribbon. No longer. -Bill
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your five star review and your support of this poem and my work. I am very grateful and very glad that you enjoyed this piece and some of my other poems. It was a fun poem to write and I like the way it opens up like a flower in the light and then flies off to the endless days of the arctic circle, with all their light and promise estory
Comment from sue133
Your free verse is a pleasure to read. There is wonderful imagery and lovely words. I particularly liked your clever use of 'illume, illumine, illuminate'. It reminds me of latin conjugating and is so effective. Congratulations. Susan
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Your free verse is a pleasure to read. There is wonderful imagery and lovely words. I particularly liked your clever use of 'illume, illumine, illuminate'. It reminds me of latin conjugating and is so effective. Congratulations. Susan
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for your five star review and your encouraging comments. that 'illume, illumine. illuminate' part is supposed to be about opening up, like a flower in the light. glad you enjoyed this simple little poem so much, estory
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi friend, this a simple write as you said yourself, but still it is a most beautiful write, and the imageries ...like flying to the north pole , dance of lightand the great sunflower open, what magnificent portrayal of joy and simplicity.
Danny Jock
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Hi friend, this a simple write as you said yourself, but still it is a most beautiful write, and the imageries ...like flying to the north pole , dance of lightand the great sunflower open, what magnificent portrayal of joy and simplicity.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much for your five star review and your encouraging comments. its nice to know I spread a little sunshine with this little poem, brought a little hope into the world. estory
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. There is much more fun in the light than in the dark and shadowed corners of life. I always seeking the light to uplift my spirit when I find myself in a dark shadowy place.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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A very well-written poem. There is much more fun in the light than in the dark and shadowed corners of life. I always seeking the light to uplift my spirit when I find myself in a dark shadowy place.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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thank you for the five star review and your encouraging comments. I am glad you found the poem uplifting and hopeful, it means I was successful thanks again estory
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hope springs eternal in this uplifting, spiritually motivational write, estory.
The imagery is stunning, the wording--quite simple yet elegant at the same time.
If that makes any sense at all.
Well done...
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Hope springs eternal in this uplifting, spiritually motivational write, estory.
The imagery is stunning, the wording--quite simple yet elegant at the same time.
If that makes any sense at all.
Well done...
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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thank you, my friend, for the five star review and your encouraging comments. It means a lot to me. I am glad you found it simple, yet elegant. It means I managed to convey the sense I felt inside while writing it. estory
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It was entirely my pleasure, estory.
~Dean
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
That was a lovely free verse. Seeds of the stars roots in the sky,
was my favorite part. You should add a pretty Sunflower picture
to that, to enhance its beauty.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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That was a lovely free verse. Seeds of the stars roots in the sky,
was my favorite part. You should add a pretty Sunflower picture
to that, to enhance its beauty.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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thank you for the five star review and your encouraging comments, I am glad you enjoyed the poem so much. it is nice to know that the senses I wanted to convey came out in the piece. I think my favorite part is the end. estory
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A beautiful uplifting poem to fill the heart and soul with hope by escaping to see the light amid the puddles of life, an enjoyable read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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A beautiful uplifting poem to fill the heart and soul with hope by escaping to see the light amid the puddles of life, an enjoyable read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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thanks so much for the five stars and for enjoying this little poem. It was fun to write and I hope in these dark times for the country and the world, it brings a little light, a little hope to people. glad you got it Estory
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Estory, this is a lovely poem. One could almost feel like they are losing themselves
to heaven. A beautiful free verse poem that allows the reader to take flight with
these uplifting words. Thank you for sharing ~DD
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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Estory, this is a lovely poem. One could almost feel like they are losing themselves
to heaven. A beautiful free verse poem that allows the reader to take flight with
these uplifting words. Thank you for sharing ~DD
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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thanks for the five star review and your wonderful, positive comments. this is exactly the effect I was trying to create, so I am glad I was successful with the images and the flow of the form estory
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You are welcome estory. I really enjoyed reading your fine poem. ~DD
Comment from Moon baby
This is a nice piece you have written. I especially like the way you used illume, illumine and illuminate, it sounds cool! This is creative and you say simple, but to me it has depth. I like it!
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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This is a nice piece you have written. I especially like the way you used illume, illumine and illuminate, it sounds cool! This is creative and you say simple, but to me it has depth. I like it!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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thanks for the five star review and your encouraging comments. I like the minimalist forms, and that repetition, that evolution of illume is central to achieveing the effect of opening up, like a flower, to the light. glad you enjoyed that image. I thought it a simple poem, and just wanted to post something positive with all this negativity going on right now in the country, spread a little light, a little hope. estory
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Fine free verse about optimism and hope; poet says how we all hope for light every day in all seasons around the year, nice imagery, fantastic flow of thoughts, poet invites everyone to use the spirit take flight; liked visionary thoughtful invitation for a grand living.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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Fine free verse about optimism and hope; poet says how we all hope for light every day in all seasons around the year, nice imagery, fantastic flow of thoughts, poet invites everyone to use the spirit take flight; liked visionary thoughtful invitation for a grand living.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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thank you for the five star review and your encouraging comments. glad you enjoyed this hopeful little poem. I put a lot of craft into the opening out and flowing effect so I am glad I was successful in achieving it estory
