Perennials of War
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Chapter Funf part vier"Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan
36 total reviews
Comment from kathleenspalding
Very exciting chapter. Well written. Kept my interest from start to finish. Although I just jumped in, I could follow what was going on. Only one thing for your consideration,
...dangerous it is(insert comma)...
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Very exciting chapter. Well written. Kept my interest from start to finish. Although I just jumped in, I could follow what was going on. Only one thing for your consideration,
...dangerous it is(insert comma)...
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome
Comment from Arkine
It's always been hard jumping into a book that's already in progress. Still, this scene seemed pretty clear. There is possibly one thing the detectives could have suggested and that's a restraining order. I could give better suggestions, but I'll have to go back and read the rest of it first. Anyhow, well done.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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It's always been hard jumping into a book that's already in progress. Still, this scene seemed pretty clear. There is possibly one thing the detectives could have suggested and that's a restraining order. I could give better suggestions, but I'll have to go back and read the rest of it first. Anyhow, well done.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
As you know I have been tardy toward reading this story. However, it is written well and I had no problem getting into the plot. Thanks again for another fine saga.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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As you know I have been tardy toward reading this story. However, it is written well and I had no problem getting into the plot. Thanks again for another fine saga.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Fridayauthor
This chapter flows along very well with good dialog and logical questions,given the situation.
...important to my family?" (This sentence doesn't read like a question. Perhaps...can't you? at the end?)
Very good posting in an interesting story.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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This chapter flows along very well with good dialog and logical questions,given the situation.
...important to my family?" (This sentence doesn't read like a question. Perhaps...can't you? at the end?)
Very good posting in an interesting story.
Thank you.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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I first had a period after that sentence then a reviewer said it needed a question mark. I changed it. Now I just don't know, Maybe I'll flip a coin. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Another well written and engaging chapter. Those detectives are a suspicious bunch! lol
Shana asked, "I'm sure you see why these papers are important to my family." - if this is a question it should have a question mark at the end.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Hi there,
Another well written and engaging chapter. Those detectives are a suspicious bunch! lol
Shana asked, "I'm sure you see why these papers are important to my family." - if this is a question it should have a question mark at the end.
All the best
G
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Oh my!! Of course it needs a question mark. I'm shocked no other reviewers caught it. Thank you.
Comment from kriver
Hi Barb,
This is a good chapter.
No spag that I can see.
It flows pretty well too.
The dialog is pretty good.
Over all it is good.
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Hi Barb,
This is a good chapter.
No spag that I can see.
It flows pretty well too.
The dialog is pretty good.
Over all it is good.
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ella25
The story is getting more and more exciting. Every chapter is very well written, and paragraphs are easy and smooth to read. It is an excellent story. With love, Ella
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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The story is getting more and more exciting. Every chapter is very well written, and paragraphs are easy and smooth to read. It is an excellent story. With love, Ella
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good job my friend, I like it very much. The police are of little help, leaving matters to Shana and Drew. Having Drew overhear Shana's explanation for leaving also neatly advances the story.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Good job my friend, I like it very much. The police are of little help, leaving matters to Shana and Drew. Having Drew overhear Shana's explanation for leaving also neatly advances the story.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Lu Saluna
A very good chapter. Good dialogue and detailed encounter with the police. It is a shame someone has to get hurt before something is done to help someone.
As the reader, it is still hard to know who Shana should really trust, but that is why this is a mystery! Great chapter.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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A very good chapter. Good dialogue and detailed encounter with the police. It is a shame someone has to get hurt before something is done to help someone.
As the reader, it is still hard to know who Shana should really trust, but that is why this is a mystery! Great chapter.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
While the painting that is attempting to be recovered may not be a Rembrandt, it's obviously very important to Shana Kohlberg, and to some apparently very seedy characters as well.
"So bottom line is, unless they hurt me, you can't do anything, right?"
"I guess that sums it up." Campbell stood. "If there's nothing else, we'll be leaving." ... Yep, just like a detective. They won't do anything, hardly, unless someone is severely injured, beaten, or dead. In their defense, it's not entirely the cops fault. It is our justice system and the way it's structured that's to blame.
Ya know, Barbara, if I were Shana Kohlberg, I would go to a store that specializes in the sale of guns, purchase a 9mm Glock G43 pistol, take a handgun class, get my concealed weapons carry permit, and surround myself with two or three humongous, man-eating Rottweilers.
That would cool the bad guys "jets", so to speak.
Sorry I decided to pop in this late in your story, but I wanted to see just what you've been up to with your writing these days.
I certainly wasn't disappointed.
This sounds like a great story with an excellent plot.
Well done, and thanks for the entertainment.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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While the painting that is attempting to be recovered may not be a Rembrandt, it's obviously very important to Shana Kohlberg, and to some apparently very seedy characters as well.
"So bottom line is, unless they hurt me, you can't do anything, right?"
"I guess that sums it up." Campbell stood. "If there's nothing else, we'll be leaving." ... Yep, just like a detective. They won't do anything, hardly, unless someone is severely injured, beaten, or dead. In their defense, it's not entirely the cops fault. It is our justice system and the way it's structured that's to blame.
Ya know, Barbara, if I were Shana Kohlberg, I would go to a store that specializes in the sale of guns, purchase a 9mm Glock G43 pistol, take a handgun class, get my concealed weapons carry permit, and surround myself with two or three humongous, man-eating Rottweilers.
That would cool the bad guys "jets", so to speak.
Sorry I decided to pop in this late in your story, but I wanted to see just what you've been up to with your writing these days.
I certainly wasn't disappointed.
This sounds like a great story with an excellent plot.
Well done, and thanks for the entertainment.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. I am never disappointed that you popped in. I value your review. You are one of the most talented author's on this site. I am honored.
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That's very kind of you to say, Barbara.
I really appreciate that.
It's always a pleasure to read and review your writing.
Enjoy the day.
