Saying Goodbye First Day of School
a poem dedicated to all parents15 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
This is excellent! We protective parents are often the ones that have more separation anxiety than the children! Great way to use that last line to bring the surprise on whose wet cheek it was.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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This is excellent! We protective parents are often the ones that have more separation anxiety than the children! Great way to use that last line to bring the surprise on whose wet cheek it was.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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You have stated the "problem" very well as "separation anxiety." I know few parents who do not have it when they send their child off to school. So pleased you liked my senyru. Rod
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, Saying Goodbye First Day of School, captures the words and emotions that are at play on one of these milestone moments. Wet cheeks and reassuring five-year-olds. Nice.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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This senryu, Saying Goodbye First Day of School, captures the words and emotions that are at play on one of these milestone moments. Wet cheeks and reassuring five-year-olds. Nice.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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"A milestone moment" is a very fitting description of what happened here. Thanks so much for sharing, Rill, and your thoughtful comments. Rod
Comment from moonsunrise
What a great Senryu with much emotion. It reminded me of when I had to say goodbye to my child the first day of school.
Congratulations!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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What a great Senryu with much emotion. It reminded me of when I had to say goodbye to my child the first day of school.
Congratulations!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Thank you for sharing my senyru, moonsunrise. I am delighted you can so easily relate to it. Rod
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's really hard watching your kids grow up.
They seem to do so awfully fast these days.
It certainly beats the alternative, however.
Nicely written senryu.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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It's really hard watching your kids grow up.
They seem to do so awfully fast these days.
It certainly beats the alternative, however.
Nicely written senryu.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Dean, for sharing my senyru and your very thoughtful comments. Yes, children do grow up so fast, yet we remember that ONE day forever. Rod
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My pleasure, Rod.
You're very welcome.
~Dean
Comment from RobertaLee
Lots and lots of emotion and memory in this little senryu. Anyone with children whom they love can certainly relate and appreciate both the enthusiasm of the well raised, confident child and the teary eyed mom. Perfect form and presentation.
Thanks for sharing...best wishes in the contest.
Smiles
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Lots and lots of emotion and memory in this little senryu. Anyone with children whom they love can certainly relate and appreciate both the enthusiasm of the well raised, confident child and the teary eyed mom. Perfect form and presentation.
Thanks for sharing...best wishes in the contest.
Smiles
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much,Roberta, for your kind praise of my senyru. Rod
Comment from flylikeaneagle
It's always so hard to say goodbye to our children. How will they
be treated? Are there bullies? Will they have fun? Good entry.
You have a compassionate child. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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It's always so hard to say goodbye to our children. How will they
be treated? Are there bullies? Will they have fun? Good entry.
You have a compassionate child. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed and could so easily relate to my senyru. Rod
Comment from l.raven
kids tend to take the first day getting on the bus better than their parents...that first week is a hard one...LOL...very well written...and I love your picture...xxoo
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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kids tend to take the first day getting on the bus better than their parents...that first week is a hard one...LOL...very well written...and I love your picture...xxoo
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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I agree that many kids seem to take that first day of school better than their parents. My kids and granddaughter sure did. Thanks for sharing. Rod
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yes they do...they are stronger than we think...and you are so welcome...good to see you my sweet friend...love xxoo
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written and has a lovely feeling enclosed in the poem I enjoyed my friend well done good luck in the contest regards Jill
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Yes this is well written and has a lovely feeling enclosed in the poem I enjoyed my friend well done good luck in the contest regards Jill
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Jill, for sharing my senyru and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Doc Holiday
Well-written senryu poem. Nice and subtle with mom's emotion and the reassurement of the child that everything is alright. I like this one! Sounds very real to me. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Well-written senryu poem. Nice and subtle with mom's emotion and the reassurement of the child that everything is alright. I like this one! Sounds very real to me. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Doc. I am so pleased this one sounds real to you. Indeed, it was based on personal experience as both a parent and grandparent. Rod
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Glad you one! I knew I picked a winner!
Comment from Bucketlist
Rod , your Senryu must have hit a bullseye with most parents, (especially weepy moms). I really liked the reversal of the 'strong' one. That is so true. Dads feel the same I think, men are taught not to cry easily.
I really do not find anything to be improved, good luck, Trisha
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Rod , your Senryu must have hit a bullseye with most parents, (especially weepy moms). I really liked the reversal of the 'strong' one. That is so true. Dads feel the same I think, men are taught not to cry easily.
I really do not find anything to be improved, good luck, Trisha
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Trisha, you must have been my good luck omen in this contest with your premonition. I am so pleased that many readers out there could relate to this senyru so easily. Thanks so much for your wonderful praise and encouraging comments. Rod
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Good ! I See you have many six star ratings and reviewers too
