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Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Waterway, is a beautifully sculpted poem that covers the happy, life-giving waters and the sad life-altering ones. It reflects the waves of change or current of life. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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This free verse, Waterway, is a beautifully sculpted poem that covers the happy, life-giving waters and the sad life-altering ones. It reflects the waves of change or current of life. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much. This one allowed me to free flow my life and appreciate it. Not all the story is about me, yet in many ways it fits.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words were heart felt, strong and thought provoking.
The reader pondered on the words of this poem. The artwork, color scheme and format complimented this poem. Thank you......
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Excellent Poem! The author's words were heart felt, strong and thought provoking.
The reader pondered on the words of this poem. The artwork, color scheme and format complimented this poem. Thank you......
Comment Written 10-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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I so appreciate your kind words.. This poem means so much to me And I am happy you like it.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Excellent presentation! I loved what you had to say, and how you said it, amazed me. Beautiful imagery and metaphor for rain and baptism were wonderful to read. I enjoyed reading this piece very much. I enjoyed the changing colors of the words, to a point. But, then it got a little distracting. Just a small issue, in such a great piece of work. I liked the spacing of the words, and lines, very much. Thank you for such a passionate personal journey into your past.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Excellent presentation! I loved what you had to say, and how you said it, amazed me. Beautiful imagery and metaphor for rain and baptism were wonderful to read. I enjoyed reading this piece very much. I enjoyed the changing colors of the words, to a point. But, then it got a little distracting. Just a small issue, in such a great piece of work. I liked the spacing of the words, and lines, very much. Thank you for such a passionate personal journey into your past.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 10-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you. this poem is a culmination of many years of thought. It means s o much to me that you honored it with a six.
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It was my pleasure, and you earned it.
Comment from melyuki
wow, what a ride.. thanks for sharing this amazingly unique and inspiring journey of life and water.. I love the way you staggered the lines, highlighted words and captured my attention from the beginning to end. Seems like a soul's journey washed, rewashed and finally renewed.. brilliantly scribed. thank you for sharing your journey. cheers mel xx best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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wow, what a ride.. thanks for sharing this amazingly unique and inspiring journey of life and water.. I love the way you staggered the lines, highlighted words and captured my attention from the beginning to end. Seems like a soul's journey washed, rewashed and finally renewed.. brilliantly scribed. thank you for sharing your journey. cheers mel xx best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 10-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you ,
. this poem is a culmination of many years of thought. It means s o much to me that you honor it understand it thank you.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
This is a really fantastic poem/write I enjoyed it so much well done this is a wonderful contribution to the site, really well written and much enjoyed by me, kindest regards meia xx
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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This is a really fantastic poem/write I enjoyed it so much well done this is a wonderful contribution to the site, really well written and much enjoyed by me, kindest regards meia xx
Comment Written 10-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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thank you so much. . this poem is a culmination of many years of thought. It means so much to me that you honor it with such sweet words.
Comment from BeasPeas
Your fine free verse poem is outstandingly creative and well presented. I liked the variation of lines as well as introduction of lots of color. Interesting with good word choices. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Your fine free verse poem is outstandingly creative and well presented. I liked the variation of lines as well as introduction of lots of color. Interesting with good word choices. Much luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much. . this poem is a culmination of many years of thought. It means s o much to me that you honor it with your kind words.
Comment from cubs77
I love the trickling, falling shape of the poem. Great imagery - I love the metaphysical comparison of water to life events, and I felt they were not forced. Good flow, and good poem!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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I love the trickling, falling shape of the poem. Great imagery - I love the metaphysical comparison of water to life events, and I felt they were not forced. Good flow, and good poem!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much. Free style truly is what i love best. it helps me say what I need to. Thank you so much
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a peom about how life changes you for the bad and the good. It shows how water is a part of life from conception to death. I like the metaphor of liquor as stainded water. I like the use of color of type to enhance the images of the words.
You also use line breaks and the direction of the words to strengthen the emotion.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
dp
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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This is a peom about how life changes you for the bad and the good. It shows how water is a part of life from conception to death. I like the metaphor of liquor as stainded water. I like the use of color of type to enhance the images of the words.
You also use line breaks and the direction of the words to strengthen the emotion.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
dp
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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thank you so much. I love the way freestyle leads you to just write and let emotions take you away. I so appreciate this high ranking.
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No problem. I agree that free verse sometimes is a form that allows emotions and metaphors to flow more freely.
dragonpoet
Comment from Janet Foor
A heartfelt free verse poem Judy using excellent poetic devices of alliteration. The colors, picture and presentation added to the eloquence of your work.
Very well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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A heartfelt free verse poem Judy using excellent poetic devices of alliteration. The colors, picture and presentation added to the eloquence of your work.
Very well done and good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much. Free style is good form for me. It just flows and accepts your words. I am enjoying reading and writing on this site.
Comment from Sis Cat
Never mind free verse poetry contest; this should be the free verse poetry winner. This poem is a tour de force of language. You use every poetic tool at your disposal--alliteration, color fonts, enjambment. You told a rich, cascading story about the various fluids in your life, from amniotic fluids to fire water. Your words are like a falling waterfall or a rushing series of waves. Your story takes a dark tone when your parents separated and your life spirals downward like a water spout down the drain of suicide. You are rescued just in the kick of time:
"I walked back to earth away from the sand
I chose change
I awoke early the next day
It smelled like rain"
I love the baptism imagery you created of the rain falling on you as you danced and your new life began.
Thank you for sharing your narrative, free verse poem. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Never mind free verse poetry contest; this should be the free verse poetry winner. This poem is a tour de force of language. You use every poetic tool at your disposal--alliteration, color fonts, enjambment. You told a rich, cascading story about the various fluids in your life, from amniotic fluids to fire water. Your words are like a falling waterfall or a rushing series of waves. Your story takes a dark tone when your parents separated and your life spirals downward like a water spout down the drain of suicide. You are rescued just in the kick of time:
"I walked back to earth away from the sand
I chose change
I awoke early the next day
It smelled like rain"
I love the baptism imagery you created of the rain falling on you as you danced and your new life began.
Thank you for sharing your narrative, free verse poem. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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thank you so much. I hope the judges like it too. Free verse has really become a part of me. Those feelings run out of my brain very much like water does. When someone like you appreciates it, it builds my hope even more. Life is wonderful now.
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Hi Sis Cat, Well lost again, I do like the poem Star Journey that won the contest but I truly thought Waterway would have a chance I so appreciate your review. I think women understand my poetry more than men do, So back to the drawing board. But obviously the committee didn't like it.
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You are right. I like the poem and the poet that won, but your poem moved me more.
