Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

Man I wouldn't wish that on anybody.
I'm glad you survived and I know first hand that bulls are not to be trifled with.
Great descriptions
Now my jaw aches.
Great writing!
Michael

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017

Thank you, Michael. If it makes you feel any better, mine aches too! haha.
Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Rhonda,

I remember the accident and absence last year. A very tough time for you. I can appreciate the scare. Had one myself last year.

Well written piece and good tone and emotionality to it.

Wayne I have been married just under four years - Wayne and I.

the time on this accident - time of this.

... he didn't ... but did finally get in - not sure you need the ellipsis here and maybe just start with the He. As you left the trail off in the dialogue before it may be superfluous to start with them here again.

I place one fist under my neck - I think it should be placed here as this changes the tense of the recollection.

All the best
G

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017

Thank you, G. I appreciate your review and Spag alert. As always, you come through for me with not complaints I know of.

You'll have to tell your close call story! I don't like talking about what happened, but in a small town where practically everyone had heard, it's often hard to avoid. I knew a lot of you knew what Cat shared, but didn't know it all.

Thanks again,
Rhonda

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Wow! What an experience, Rhonda - this must have happened when I wasn't in touch with FS - I am so happy you had God's comfort and it kept you strong, my friend. I don't think anyone will be able to top this story - good luck.

Rhonda - I noticed you've mentioned - looked at me like I had two horns - twice - you might want to consider dropping one. Just thought I'd mention.

I place(d) one fist - placed
Time passed as I listened to Wayne talked to the 911 - talking or talk

Margaret


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 Comment Written 24-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017

You're right, you and I both had our health crisis at about the same time. I didn't know what all you were going through, but I knew it was a lot. It was a rough year, but we've got a new one now!!!

Thanks for your help,
Rhonda

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I thought this was very enjoyable. The dialogue is excellent. The story easily held my interest. One small thing:

I smiled, and dropped some range cubes (cattle candy) on the floor of the trailer. Without a moment's hesitation, she hopped in and began eating.

For some reason I didn't like the "cattle candy" written like that. Perhaps:

I smiled, and dropped some range cubes on the floor of the trailer. Without a moment's hesitation, she hopped in and began eating the cattle candy.

I think perhaps that flows better. Great job - a very enjoyable read.

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 Comment Written 24-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017

Thank you, Michael. I changed the cattle candy part, and I think it sounds better now, thanks for the heads up on it!
Thank you, also, for the wonderful review.

Take care,
Rhonda