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Urban Poetry

Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Neon Signs"
City life through poetry

16 total reviews 
Comment from Ogden
Exceptional
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Congratulations on your first place finish, Marilyn! I'm pleased to say I voted for "Neon Lights," unaware at the time that it was your poem, and of course I'm glad to see that the vote was an important one.

You wrote an excellent poem that includes the required four words, without drawing attention to them - an accomplishment in itself. The scene created, even without the photo, is richly redolent of nighttime in the city.

Good work!

Don

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 12-Jan-2017
    Hi Don. Thank you for your fabulous review, congratulations, rating and comments. My heart will always lie there in Manhattan. I was there frequently while living on Long Island. It offers so much to everybody. Quite a place--The Big Apple. Thank you for your vote, too. Marilyn
Comment from wondertwin
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Wonderful job writing this city poem. it created a very vivid city picture in my mind. Nicely done. You should do well in this contest! :)

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 11-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Wonder. Your review if much appreciated.
Comment from winnona
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a well-written contest entry. The words flowed well line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Winnona.
Comment from suep
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Great job incorporating the required words for this prompt. Great descriptions and details of a colorful city night. Nice rhythm and flow. Perfect artwork selection to complement your work. A very enjoyable read. Best wishes in the contest! :)

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, suep. Very nice comments and review that I appreciate.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This poem, Neon Signs, uses all the required words and creates a street scene that one might see in the inner city of Anytown, USA.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Hi Bill. Thank you for your review. I'm interesting in the quirks of urban life having lived in New York for many years. Ha, ha. I'm a town girl now--no more big cities.
Comment from jusylee72
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All words were used . The picture and the imagery were very well done. The wildness of new york still rages while children sing. Very interesting concept.


 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Hi Judy. Thank you for your review which is much appreciated.
Comment from William Ross
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Nicely done on neon signs, good rhyming and meter, great use of the words that had tp be used. Good luck on this and have a great day

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, William.
Comment from dragonpoet
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These words can describe maybe Vegas is a rain storm. Good choice of artwork

Is the bellow you are using supposed to be a blacksmiths bellows.

Good luck in the contest.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Hi dragonpoet. Yes, bellows would be the proper word here. I appreciate your review despite this inconsistency. Thank you.
reply by dragonpoet on 10-Jan-2017
    No problem.

    dp
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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You use the required words nicely in this well penned piece. The imagery paints a solid picture of the city when the sun goes down and the neon stars begin to shine. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Thank you, Monica, for your very supportive and nice review.
Comment from sunnilicious
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Good metropolitan perspective presented. It's not a common image. Families in suburbia seems more real, but it's not always so... Well thought out and nicely written. Good lyrical flow of rhythm and rhymes. Good work. Good luck in the contest :)

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 10-Jan-2017
    Hi Alicia. Thank you for your fabulous review, comments and rating. So much appreciated.