Not As It Appears
Sometimes things are not what they appear to be.11 total reviews
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
There could be no cause for offence with this, it is a superb and clever story in just 200 words and very well developed characters in that short space of time. That being said, I still don't trust him...maybe as I am 38 lol....a great write and very impressive write, well done kind regards Meia :)
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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There could be no cause for offence with this, it is a superb and clever story in just 200 words and very well developed characters in that short space of time. That being said, I still don't trust him...maybe as I am 38 lol....a great write and very impressive write, well done kind regards Meia :)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2017
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I've heard that from several women who read the story. It's sad that history and observation of some men can cause those type of doubts in women. I've seen both kinds too and can see both sides. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Alex Biasin
This was very well done.
I enjoyed the way the two characters interacted, the dialogue was very realistic and well paced.
It was very relatable and well written.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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This was very well done.
I enjoyed the way the two characters interacted, the dialogue was very realistic and well paced.
It was very relatable and well written.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
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Thanks Alex. I appreciate your comments. These situations are always complicated. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from William Ross
nicely done on this,about a wife snooping in her husbands phone and finding sexy pictures of younger women, feeling old because her birthdays coming. good luck on this and have a great day
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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nicely done on this,about a wife snooping in her husbands phone and finding sexy pictures of younger women, feeling old because her birthdays coming. good luck on this and have a great day
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thanks Willam. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from F. Wehr3
Funny idea for the contest. I enjoyed your story. Best of luck with this in the contest. I found one minor thing for your consideration.
They fantasize about us because we don't take shit from anybody and they get off on that," --Suggest a comma before and.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Funny idea for the contest. I enjoyed your story. Best of luck with this in the contest. I found one minor thing for your consideration.
They fantasize about us because we don't take shit from anybody and they get off on that," --Suggest a comma before and.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thank you Russel. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Lu Saluna
It is really hard to say what is going on, lol. Some women get very emotional about turning 40. Others would get very insecure about their husbands getting nude or somewhat nude selfie's on their phones from their students. For all we know he is lying his ass off. It happens. So it could be a bit of everything or nothing.
Either way, a really well written story. I thought it was detailed, creative and the dialogue very convincing and funny.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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It is really hard to say what is going on, lol. Some women get very emotional about turning 40. Others would get very insecure about their husbands getting nude or somewhat nude selfie's on their phones from their students. For all we know he is lying his ass off. It happens. So it could be a bit of everything or nothing.
Either way, a really well written story. I thought it was detailed, creative and the dialogue very convincing and funny.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thank you Lu, I agree there is a lot going on in this story. I appreciate your thoughts on this.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You did a wonderful job creating a complete story with the 200 words allotted. Turning 40 does make a woman a little paranoid as your story expresses so well. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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You did a wonderful job creating a complete story with the 200 words allotted. Turning 40 does make a woman a little paranoid as your story expresses so well. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thanks for your insight. I'm glad you enjoyed this story.
Comment from Dean Kuch
A-w-w-w-wwww.... Ritchie was very sweet and understanding addressing his poor wife's lack of self-confidence. It's guys like Ritchie who give husbands a good name.
He's also right, I have received a few such snap chat photos, only mush worse. Didn't have the slightest idea who the girls were either. I discovered they all came from Facebook.
I no longer have the snap chat app.
Best wishes...
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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A-w-w-w-wwww.... Ritchie was very sweet and understanding addressing his poor wife's lack of self-confidence. It's guys like Ritchie who give husbands a good name.
He's also right, I have received a few such snap chat photos, only mush worse. Didn't have the slightest idea who the girls were either. I discovered they all came from Facebook.
I no longer have the snap chat app.
Best wishes...
Comment Written 08-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Wow, that could be trouble. Good idea to get rid of the snap chat.
Thanks for reading and I enjoyed your comments.
Comment from Cindy Warren
I think Richie is being faithful. Someone in his position attracts that sort of thing. The girls are sending photos for their own reasons. If he doesn't have a history, Nichole should trust him.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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I think Richie is being faithful. Someone in his position attracts that sort of thing. The girls are sending photos for their own reasons. If he doesn't have a history, Nichole should trust him.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thanks for your comments, Cindy. I think police work is hard enough and getting photos like that to add tension to a marriage could affect someone who may be borderline emotionally.
Comment from winnona
While I did not care for the story at all you have completed the contest challenge. The stry is well written and moves right along. I feel there are a lot of better subjects to write about.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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While I did not care for the story at all you have completed the contest challenge. The stry is well written and moves right along. I feel there are a lot of better subjects to write about.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Winnona, thank you for your honesty and for reviewing my story in the context of the contest. I appreciate it.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Feelinf forty and insecure. It's tough to be a woman. Men and women age differently. Girls mature and reach their peak eariler. Then age more dramatically.
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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Feelinf forty and insecure. It's tough to be a woman. Men and women age differently. Girls mature and reach their peak eariler. Then age more dramatically.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
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Thanks for reading, Thomas. I guess we all have our own insecurities in life. Perhaps a combination of issues caught up with the fact that she might feel he would want to wander. One never knows what's truly going on in a partner's mind. We like to think we do, but sometimes we're way off the mark.
