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Swan Song

ABC contest entry

11 total reviews 
Comment from dragonpoet
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The picture shows cattails changing from Summer to Fall. These four lines give clear image of the change of three seasons. I like the the alliteration in the enjambment between the first and second lines. I like the c line the best. The desrciption of the leaves falling is very vivid.

Congrats on placing in the contest.

Keep writing


dragonpoet

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2017
    Thanks so much Dragon :-)
reply by dragonpoet on 10-Jan-2017
    You are so very welcome.

    dp
Comment from Marykelly
Exceptional
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The strength of this poem is the unique, creative imagery. The changing of the seasons is a common topic among writers but your imagery takes the description of the seasons to new heights.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
    Thank you so much Mary :-)

    Ya know, hanging out on a poetry site does strain a writer to find
    new ways to talk about this very old story - I am incredibly pleased to hear
    I may well have managed to bring at least a small breath of fresh air to the
    topic. Thank you so so much for this 6th star :-)
Comment from BeasPeas
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This is a lovely ABC poem which is full of descriptive phrases that tickle the reader. Colors of presentation and image are perfect for your poem. A very nice contest entry and I wish you good luck in it. Marilyn

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
    Thanks Marilyn :-)
Comment from winnona
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This is a beautifully written contest entry. Your well-chosen words flowed line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. The artwork completed the piece.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
    Wow, , ,two in a row - how wonderful :-) Thanks again Winnona :-)
Comment from misscookie
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I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
It is a perfect match
Your words captured my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for sharing this delightful poem
Cookie

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
    Thanks Miss C :-)
reply by misscookie on 02-Jan-2017
    you're very welcome.
    Have a blessed day.
    Cookie
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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OH so very well done, I love the total descriptions you used as you took us on an adventure of nature watching. The words are exceptional and so well done to make us feel

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
    Thanks so much Barb :-)
Comment from rama devi
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Enjoyed this musically rich ABC. Fine personification. Love the alliterative, assonant and consonant slant rhyme of brazen and blazoned. IN fact, this whole phrase is so eloquent:
plucking brazen
blazoned notes that pirouette to dormant ground;

Love how this sounds read aloud--as it sounds like what it describes:

coppered leaves brush amber fronds in whirlwind spin.


Fine personification continued and good assonance of A:

December waits, with bated breath, to come back 'round



Nice imagery, tone and pacing here too, as well as consonance of L;

as cattails plump and mallards grow their winter down.

The poem captures a mood and a scene with originality and finesse.

A six!

Bravo!

Enjoyed this.

Happy New Year

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
    Awww. . .aren't you a sweetheart Rama! Thanks so much for this truly
    appreciated validation and encouragement <<>>
reply by rama devi on 02-Jan-2017
    :-)))))))))
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Yes this is well written has a beautiful feeling to the poem full of imagery and well presented I enjoyed well-done regards Jill

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
    Thank you so much Jill :-)
Comment from María José García
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What a lovely poem! I've read it several times and the sound is great. And in my opinion that's the most important thing when it comes to poetry.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
    Aw. . .thank Maria. . ."read it several times and it sounds great" just made my day :-)
reply by María José García on 02-Jan-2017
    Glad to hear that. :)
Comment from DR DIP
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You know Leineco I never realized that an ABC poem was actually 4 sequential letters of the alphabet and a random letter. I never knew this

nice write well done

dip

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 Comment Written 01-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2017
    Thanks Doc :-)