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Revolution

A Poem

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Comment from Abby Wilson-hand
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What a great write of poetry
so many speak the truth of fidel
Hope you do well on this write and
I love the ryme you chose to where
I could learn from

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2016

Comment from rjuselius
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this is an interesting social commentary dear toz666! you don't really strike either down. i think Castro had the right idea but not necesssarily the right actions. all different yet all equal!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2016

Comment from WriteSins!
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Wow, just wow. The ending was so powerful. I had never really thought of it that way, but that could just as easily be true. This is a very eyeopening poem. Excellent work!

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2016

Comment from Sis Cat
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Wow, what a powerful poem coming on the death of Castro. You ask important questions:

"So Che died a hero
A martyr through and through
And Fidel's death divided
The whole world into two

So is Che a hero
And Fidel maybe not
Or is it simply just because
One died old and one got shot"

People tend to idolize the martyr and not the one who lived to do the hard work. Your poem conveys a message and a question larger than Che and Castro. You ask questions about our beliefs and who and what we honor.

Thank you for sharing your timely poem.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2016

Comment from CEO2020
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This poem didn't rhyme all the way. Not sure if it was meant to or not. But the topic and the last two sonnets are worth five stars

So Che died a hero
A martyr through and through
And Fidel's death divided
The whole world into two

So is Che a hero
And Fidel maybe not
Or is it simply just because
One died old and one got shot


 Comment Written 03-Dec-2016

Comment from ciliverde
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Interesting musings to follow the recent death of Fidel. I appreciate the mention of the fine hospitals and schools, and his fierce defense of equality - there's much to admire in that. But you are right, he's seen as evil by many, while Che is revered as a revolutionary hero. I said something about Che the other day to my husband. He says "Who's that?" and I showed him that ubiquitous photo/image that everyone knows.
Very nice job here,
Carol

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2016

Comment from dragonpoet
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Yes both men did things both good and bad for the country but Che was called a freedom fighter which is far from a dictator. Both were violent. I don't think Fidel Castro would have been seen by the world as anything but a despot. I don't know if ideas about Che would have been different if he had lived longer. He never was a part of the ruling government, was he?

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2016

Comment from William Ross
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very good, a poem written on two revolutionary fighter of the Cuban people. Nicely done, Good rhyme and meter. Thanks for the share and have a wonderful day

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2016

Comment from Bucketlist
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No political comment - maybe a classroom debate depending on age level? 5 stars because of rhymn, rhyme and flow. There is no problem with subject matter. It is just my disinterest in some areas.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2016

Comment from frierajac
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This seems to sketch out the parameters of these two men's lives and fates in a
trice. I wonder if you do actually remember whatever happened to Che. At first
i only knew him from the teeshirts and comments of fans. Maybe a question mark at the end?

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2016