Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This is a fine Kyrielle about a woman's suspicions that her husband is having an affair. You use the repeated line "Is my man having an affair?" to emphasize the woman's discovery and dilemma.

Thank you for sharing your creative response to the writing prompt.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading this one, Andre.
I'm not too happy with it. I still find writing poems very difficult. Prose is more my thing.

Comment from DR DIP

Excellent

nah its just male menopause or mid life crisis! nice little poem and I see the question is begging to be asked Have you fronted him about it? is he buying a flash sports car and wearing his hair longer in a ponytail with one ear ring? NO? his ok then lol

dip

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Very funny! Fortunately I don't think this is based on fact...
Thanks for your review.

Comment from cflorian8

Excellent

"Broken Hearted" is the perfect poem embodies the very feelings of the faithful partner that was or is being cheated on by their unfaithful counterparts. The faithful partners won't be in a rush to be in a relationship for awhile. Even when they do enter, it may take time for them to trust again. Judging your poem by Kyrielle criteria, I'd say you succeeded your goal.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

It's still lacking... I think I've told you I'm better at writing prose. But I'll keep on trying.

Comment from winnona

Excellent

A well-written Kyrielle contest entry. Your words flow easily line to line combining and forming the message of the poem for the reader well. Your background color and artwork completed the piece well.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading, Winnona.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I like the artwork you choose to go with your poem
it is a perfect match even though it's sad.
How long will it take to realize you man is cheating on you.
Denial is a ... you know what
Cookie

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Nov-2016

Fortunately this isn't true...
Thanks for reading.

reply by misscookie on 21-Nov-2016

I glad this isn't true.
Have a nice day.
Cookie

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This Kyrielle is well written. I like the repeated last line being a question, You have given "examples" throughout and the left it up to the reader to decide. Very clever. Well presented, too... Good job!

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading.
I don't find poetry easy to write... I'm more of a prose person, so your kind words mean a lot to me.

Comment from aryr

Excellent

Very well written, easy to read and to follow with a good flow and rhyme. Such a devastating problem for one to suffer. To know, to think they know, but not to know and knowing there is no real fix. Great job, good picture, thanks.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading, Aryr. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday.

reply by aryr on 20-Nov-2016

You are so very welcome Maria, I will certainly try to.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

This piece is an exceptional kyrielle. Very well done with the rhyme and the repeated line for emphasis.
The topic and questions are too often said today.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Yeah, you're so right... unfortunately.
Thanks for reading.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

MJ,

This is a great presentation. The art is awesome & perfect for your words.

Your poem tells a sad, but often true, story.

Your repeating lines fit in seamlessly in all verses.

Your lines flow smoothly, too.

I like the color scheme you chose.

You did a great job with a difficult style.

Good job & thanks for sharing.

Best wishes in the contest. Jan

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading, Jan. It's very kind of you.