Comment from Mabaker

Excellent

Hell, Maria Jose I've just finished reading you story I scan down and lo and behold there you go again you cleaver thing. Now to the uncanny part and I swear it's the truth. My pain in the butt was named Colin, and like you I fell heavily in love with a drunken loser. The hidings started early in our marriage and kept going until one morning I tried to kill him. Our four children stood and watched as I bashed him over the head with a pick handle. He went down but he came back up and his fist was heading for my seven month pregnant belly and he stopped, or there would have been a murder committed that day. True story. Sincerely Anne. (Mabaker)

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2016

Hi Anne,
Your story is terrible. Mine was fortunately fiction but it's sad to hear these things happen in real life.
Thanks so much for reading.
I'll fan you now so that we can keep in touch.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Very good piece. A lot of wives stay to suffere more abouse because they say they love th guy, but they really don't feel they are worthy of good treatment after being battered and told they are no good for so long.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2016

Thanks, Phyllis.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

You've lived in New York your entire life but you use "Mum" for "Mom", Anonymous Author?
U-h-h-h-h, no... I ain't buyin' it, LOL; not unless the UK has a New York City that I'm unfamiliar with, which is entirely possible, I suppose.
Muth'ah, Mother, Momma, or Mom, perhaps, but not Mum.

Regardless of what you call her, yours is a good story and it's a good thing that "she" (Mum or Mom) saved you from your husband Steve's and your own destructive behavior.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016

You caught me... you'll have to believe me when I tell you my Mum was British and she emigrated just before she married... I even speak with a British accent. ;)
Anyway, I'll have to change the New York to London.
Thanks for reading, Dean.

reply by Dean Kuch on 03-Nov-2016

Haha, it was my pleasure.
Good luck with the story.
~Dean :)

Comment from winnona

Excellent

A well written contest entry. Your words flowed line to line and the story moved easily from beginning to end. I think you did well completing the challenge of the contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2016

Thanks, Winnona.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

I can relate to your story , I was an alcoholic for close to fifty years. So your story hit home with me in a big way. I am sober now and can see the folly in it all.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 02-Nov-2016

I'm glad to hear you got over that. Thanks for your review.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Dear writer,

This was a sad tale, that read all too realistically. --frowny face-- Hope it's not biographical, and that, instead, it's totally fictional. Good luck in the contest!

one note:
1.) One Friday, he got so (drunk) that when he came back home

Thanks~!

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016

Thanks for the kind review, Robyn. No, this is not biographical at all.
I've already corrected the typo.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Good take on this old prompt. Interesting perspective from the point of the narrator, and pieces of insight into the drinking.

'You have to leave him, Stacey.' Mum told me- need end punctuation here.

Good piece.
GMG

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2016

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2016

Thanks for reading and noticing the typo, Gareth. I've already added that stop.