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Comment from country ranch writer
this the best you could come up with for this one what a joker you are that's for sure thinking you can get away with this one in tow
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this the best you could come up with for this one what a joker you are that's for sure thinking you can get away with this one in tow
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
Comment from jlsavell
A Tarnished Knight,
This could be a song if expanded upon. How many do hop a train and ride off into oblivion? Short but strong. well done.. jlsavell
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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A Tarnished Knight,
This could be a song if expanded upon. How many do hop a train and ride off into oblivion? Short but strong. well done.. jlsavell
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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thank you this was not supoosed to posted it ws just the beginnin I hit the wrong button when i saved it dang it
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tell me when its finished and I will go back..still good though..
Comment from judiverse
A very common thought, I'm sure. It conveys kind of a feeling of despair. Hope the narrator will find his way. Excellent rhyme. A few thoughts: Suitcase is one word, and you need a space between case and by. In last line, you need to add a "To" for clarity, or you could use "Wanna" instead of Want. Hope that will helps. Cheers! judi
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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A very common thought, I'm sure. It conveys kind of a feeling of despair. Hope the narrator will find his way. Excellent rhyme. A few thoughts: Suitcase is one word, and you need a space between case and by. In last line, you need to add a "To" for clarity, or you could use "Wanna" instead of Want. Hope that will helps. Cheers! judi
Comment Written 23-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2016
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thks Judy this was not suposed tobe posted I hit the wrong button when I saved it
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It was pretty good as it was! I've done things like that myself. judi
