haiku (hot apple cider)
5-7-5 contest42 total reviews
Comment from Nika2016
The poem is appealing in color and words, but a hot cup of
apple cider is the last beverage
I would desire, even if
traditional. I have never
understood why people do not mulch the leaves with
the lawn mower...less time and bags..Here they come now..leaves blowing from the park in tons...
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
The poem is appealing in color and words, but a hot cup of
apple cider is the last beverage
I would desire, even if
traditional. I have never
understood why people do not mulch the leaves with
the lawn mower...less time and bags..Here they come now..leaves blowing from the park in tons...
Comment Written 16-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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Thank you, Nika, for your kind review ... especially Italy since you don't care for cider. We mulch with the mower at the beginning of the season, but it's impossible to mow with a foot of leaves covering the ground. Thanks for your comments.
Smiles,
Indy
Comment from mvbrooks
I especially like the line "sweet sip of autumn" because it reminds me of the hot cider we would only get to experience in the fall at my grandmother's farm. Strong imagery and use of sensory words to bring the reader into the poem.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
I especially like the line "sweet sip of autumn" because it reminds me of the hot cider we would only get to experience in the fall at my grandmother's farm. Strong imagery and use of sensory words to bring the reader into the poem.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Thank you so much, mybrooks, for this great review and for taking the time to read and share your thoughts for my poem. I'm delighted you enjoyed the thud line and thanks for mentioning it.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from royowen
I really like your short form contest entry, it speaks of comfort, relaxing after a time of activity raking up leaves. Our native trees are evergreen so we don't see much autumn colour here, although we experienced the beauty of New England in 2014, this time, well done, great poetry, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
I really like your short form contest entry, it speaks of comfort, relaxing after a time of activity raking up leaves. Our native trees are evergreen so we don't see much autumn colour here, although we experienced the beauty of New England in 2014, this time, well done, great poetry, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 15-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your kind response to my poem, Roy. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, and I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your comments.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Most welcome Karyn,
Comment from rjuselius
this truly did deserve to win dear indianairish! the poems awakens all senses as felt in cold weather. very well presented and executed my friend.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
this truly did deserve to win dear indianairish! the poems awakens all senses as felt in cold weather. very well presented and executed my friend.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 15-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Rebekka, thank you so much for your kind review and generous rating for my poem. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, and I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thank you!
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from rama devi
Great subtle pun in the closing line! I loved this. tasted it. Yum! Autumn is my favorite season and something I miss now, living in he tropics in India. Superb medley of S and soft C. Sounds great read aloud. Fine flow too. Pitch perfect Satori. Wish I had a six. Kudos on winning the contest...I can see why!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
Great subtle pun in the closing line! I loved this. tasted it. Yum! Autumn is my favorite season and something I miss now, living in he tropics in India. Superb medley of S and soft C. Sounds great read aloud. Fine flow too. Pitch perfect Satori. Wish I had a six. Kudos on winning the contest...I can see why!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 15-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Thank you, rd, for your kind response to my poem. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, and thanks for your gracious kudos!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Comment from nancyjam
Congratulations on the will. this is a great
5-7-5 for Autumn.
I love the play on words "sweet sip of Autumn"
that mug of hot cider says it all.
Nancy
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
Congratulations on the will. this is a great
5-7-5 for Autumn.
I love the play on words "sweet sip of Autumn"
that mug of hot cider says it all.
Nancy
Comment Written 14-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my poem, Nancy. I appreciate your kind response, and thank you so much for your congratulations.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Thomas Bowling
An excellent example of this type of poetry. Good luck in the contest. When My cousin and I were ten his father set us up a cider stand by the road.
After two weeks we were our best customers. It had turned hard.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
An excellent example of this type of poetry. Good luck in the contest. When My cousin and I were ten his father set us up a cider stand by the road.
After two weeks we were our best customers. It had turned hard.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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LOL that's so funny and what a wonderful image of two ten year olds getting ripped drinking their own cider. Thanks for your kind words and review for my poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Susanjohn
Sweet sip of Autumn???? What a great line!!! You did a very nice job on this little haiku of yours!! I enjoyed reading!!! :-)))
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
Sweet sip of Autumn???? What a great line!!! You did a very nice job on this little haiku of yours!! I enjoyed reading!!! :-)))
Comment Written 14-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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I'm so delighted you enjoyed the poem and especially the last line, Susan. Thank you for your great review and for sharing your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from mermaids
Recently I had the pleasure of drinking apple cider. Your words remind the reader how delicious it is. Your words make the reader smile and show the beauty of Autumn with one of her many treats.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
Recently I had the pleasure of drinking apple cider. Your words remind the reader how delicious it is. Your words make the reader smile and show the beauty of Autumn with one of her many treats.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2016
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my poem, mermaids. I'm truly grateful for your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thanks!
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from robyn corum
Okay. I can see this. Feeling like a cup of hot cider is like having all of autumn condensed down into one beautiful, magical cup to drink. *smile* Lovely thought. Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
Okay. I can see this. Feeling like a cup of hot cider is like having all of autumn condensed down into one beautiful, magical cup to drink. *smile* Lovely thought. Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2016
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Thanks, Robyn, for your kind review and comments for this autumn 5-7-5. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)