Comment from foxangie123

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your story so very much. It was flippy with the hauntings. Gave me the hibbies but excellent penning indeed. Best of wishes.

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016

Thanks so much for reading.

Comment from ioana.u

Excellent

Nice job on the details, down to the chipped mug. And you gave the story an interesting twist with the murder being revealed like that.
It feels like a real memory, because the way it was written. Which is creepy, considering the specific family ties :)
Good luck in the contest!
Ioana

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016

Thanks for reading, Ioana.

Comment from Rasmine

Excellent

This was a lot of fun to read, and the font you used was really easy on my eyes. Thank you. I did find one error--just a little typo.
'At first (you need a comma) it was just little things. I turned off a light, (comma here because the next part could stand as its own sentence) and when I went back into the room it was on again.
Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016

Thanks for reading and for noticing the missing commas. I'll add them right now.

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

hahah, a mother comes back t seek revenge and reveal the daughter as her murderer. many ghosts are at unrest for reasons, not out of the realm of possibility. well done on the ghost story. good luck and have a great day

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016

Thanks for reading, William.