Criminal Webs
Mistrust those silky shawls...7 total reviews
Comment from ScarBundy
Ok, to be honest, when I started reading this, I thought "seriously?" But your story achieved its purpose - I was hooked and had to keep reading. The pun at the end was just the kind of slapstick humor the world needs more of. Thanks giving me a laugh today. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Ok, to be honest, when I started reading this, I thought "seriously?" But your story achieved its purpose - I was hooked and had to keep reading. The pun at the end was just the kind of slapstick humor the world needs more of. Thanks giving me a laugh today. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from damommy
A crime story in the garden. How creative. Federal Bureau of Insectation - great name.
Each insect has its own special place in the world as you've shown in your story. This was very enjoyable. 8-)
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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A crime story in the garden. How creative. Federal Bureau of Insectation - great name.
Each insect has its own special place in the world as you've shown in your story. This was very enjoyable. 8-)
Comment Written 13-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2016
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading.
Comment from robyn corum
MJ,
This is positively delightful. I read with fascination, eager to see what would happen to each of the insects listed and I'm happy (sorry!) to learn of each's fate. Oh well. Everyone can't always live to the conclusion! hahahaha! What fun!
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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MJ,
This is positively delightful. I read with fascination, eager to see what would happen to each of the insects listed and I'm happy (sorry!) to learn of each's fate. Oh well. Everyone can't always live to the conclusion! hahahaha! What fun!
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2016
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I'm glad you thought this was fun, Robyn. Thanks for reading.
Comment from clauclau003
very fun to read with very good detail good luck with the contest it was a very fun thing to read i liked it especially the detail it was very fun good luck again well done.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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very fun to read with very good detail good luck with the contest it was a very fun thing to read i liked it especially the detail it was very fun good luck again well done.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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Thanks for your kind words.
Comment from royowen
Well done with this story, I enjoyed it thoroughly. It sounded like a kiddies story until Sylvia started weaving her "tail" of insidious deceit! But I still think for older kiddies perhaps. This was a "deftly woven" story that was very clever, well constructed and presented, good characters with alliterated names. Well done, blessings,, Roy
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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Well done with this story, I enjoyed it thoroughly. It sounded like a kiddies story until Sylvia started weaving her "tail" of insidious deceit! But I still think for older kiddies perhaps. This was a "deftly woven" story that was very clever, well constructed and presented, good characters with alliterated names. Well done, blessings,, Roy
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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Thanks, Roy. I'm glad you enjoyed my story.
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Most welcome
Comment from Kate Tompkins
I love a good crime story, and this one, with its unusual characters, made me laugh. Silk shawls, indeed! Perfectly silly and perfectly plotted.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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I love a good crime story, and this one, with its unusual characters, made me laugh. Silk shawls, indeed! Perfectly silly and perfectly plotted.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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You are very kind, Kate. Thanks for your great review.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was very enjoyable. Great use of dialogue. My only thought is you start this off with a terrific narrative. And kinda abandon it. I would encourage you to have that narration interrupt from time to time to avoid the "talking heads". Great job overall - wonderful story.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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I thought this was very enjoyable. Great use of dialogue. My only thought is you start this off with a terrific narrative. And kinda abandon it. I would encourage you to have that narration interrupt from time to time to avoid the "talking heads". Great job overall - wonderful story.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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Thanks for reading, Michael.
