Be Careful What You Wish For
He Said, I Wish I Was There!4 total reviews
Comment from cleo85
Oh, that is funny. I love that kind of humor very much. I have really enjoyed reading it. I am not a writer by any means, so I cannot make remarks to style and technique, but I know when a story is gripping me, it probably interesting to other readers as well. In my opinion this story deserved to win the contest.
I feel especially honored to provide the illustration for a contest winner.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
Oh, that is funny. I love that kind of humor very much. I have really enjoyed reading it. I am not a writer by any means, so I cannot make remarks to style and technique, but I know when a story is gripping me, it probably interesting to other readers as well. In my opinion this story deserved to win the contest.
I feel especially honored to provide the illustration for a contest winner.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2016
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SO GLAD YOU DIDN'T MIND ME USING YOUR PICTURE
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Be careful what you wish for indeed. The old boy drank himself to deathand got his wish. I guess he will be sharing the house with Jack from now on. LOL Good job.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016
Be careful what you wish for indeed. The old boy drank himself to deathand got his wish. I guess he will be sharing the house with Jack from now on. LOL Good job.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2016
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thank you for your kindness
Comment from sunnilicious
The mind can really play with a person, especially with intoxications with drinking. I like how you made the story unfold. A worst nightmare come true. I wish it could be fiction for everyone. Creative story. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2016
The mind can really play with a person, especially with intoxications with drinking. I like how you made the story unfold. A worst nightmare come true. I wish it could be fiction for everyone. Creative story. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2016
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than you kindly glad you enjoyed
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
I liked the story, but was confused at times as to who was saying what. There aren't quotation marks often and I didn't know if there should be or if they were just thought the character was having. Also you have the ghost named Jake towards the beginning of the story so I thought there was another man, then realized you just misspelled Jack. Many of the conversations start with - Jack said- I would put that at the end- said Jack, or murmured Jack, whispered Jack. I think it needs just a little polishing and it would be a very good story. Over all I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2016
I liked the story, but was confused at times as to who was saying what. There aren't quotation marks often and I didn't know if there should be or if they were just thought the character was having. Also you have the ghost named Jake towards the beginning of the story so I thought there was another man, then realized you just misspelled Jack. Many of the conversations start with - Jack said- I would put that at the end- said Jack, or murmured Jack, whispered Jack. I think it needs just a little polishing and it would be a very good story. Over all I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2016
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thank you for the heads up