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A Dactylic Redoubled Rondeau43 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
In mountainwriter's (Ray's) Writing in Meter 103, I had an assignment where I wrote using only dactylic tetrameter.
It was EXTREMELY difficult for me as I lean towards anapestic tetrameter (four anapests per line) and anapestic trimeter (3 per line). The main thing I love about anapest is the rhythm: da da DUM, da da DUM, da da DUM...
However, this is the antithesis of anapestic meter; DUM, da,da, Dum, da,da, and is therefore quite the challenge, at least for me.
"...make it more difficult, put away caginess,
leap on a bicycle, pedal most hairily,
drumming one-handedly, not minding shakiness,
singing most tunefully, jauntily, airily."
Very well done, Tony. Not only have you managed to write an excellent Rondeau Redouble, you've written it in the most difficult meter there is to write, and have done so extremely well.
I can't say that I've read Gloria's piece, but I have read Pantygynt's. Yours is a wonderful follow-up and a nice way for the caged bride to let her hair down a bit.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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In mountainwriter's (Ray's) Writing in Meter 103, I had an assignment where I wrote using only dactylic tetrameter.
It was EXTREMELY difficult for me as I lean towards anapestic tetrameter (four anapests per line) and anapestic trimeter (3 per line). The main thing I love about anapest is the rhythm: da da DUM, da da DUM, da da DUM...
However, this is the antithesis of anapestic meter; DUM, da,da, Dum, da,da, and is therefore quite the challenge, at least for me.
"...make it more difficult, put away caginess,
leap on a bicycle, pedal most hairily,
drumming one-handedly, not minding shakiness,
singing most tunefully, jauntily, airily."
Very well done, Tony. Not only have you managed to write an excellent Rondeau Redouble, you've written it in the most difficult meter there is to write, and have done so extremely well.
I can't say that I've read Gloria's piece, but I have read Pantygynt's. Yours is a wonderful follow-up and a nice way for the caged bride to let her hair down a bit.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Very many thanks for your review and comments, Dean. We can't let those two have all the fun, can we? LOL
Comment from Sis Cat
This Dactylic Redoubled Rondeau is a tour de force of rhyme and rhythm. I thrilled at reading your verse which bounced off the page:
"Life may be filled with a feeling of haziness,
making one miserable unnecessarily.
Snap out of lethargy! Leap up with wakefulness,
striding out forcefully, stepping out merrily,"
This is an extremely musical poem. It has the rhythm of pedals on a bicycle or a stick on a drum. This is one of the finest, uplifting poems I have seen of this type. It is well crafted and classic in its execution. It has an encouraging message for us all to strike our drums.
Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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This Dactylic Redoubled Rondeau is a tour de force of rhyme and rhythm. I thrilled at reading your verse which bounced off the page:
"Life may be filled with a feeling of haziness,
making one miserable unnecessarily.
Snap out of lethargy! Leap up with wakefulness,
striding out forcefully, stepping out merrily,"
This is an extremely musical poem. It has the rhythm of pedals on a bicycle or a stick on a drum. This is one of the finest, uplifting poems I have seen of this type. It is well crafted and classic in its execution. It has an encouraging message for us all to strike our drums.
Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2016
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Thanks so much, Sis Cat. Glad you enjoyed this upbeat little number! Tony
Comment from His Grayness
With sincere SHAME while in great deeeeLight I celebrate this work without the six stars so greatly deserved for this truly uplifting, enlightening, and celebratory work of pure genuis....perfectly delivered in grand presentation and obviously from the heart and mind of a gentleman who truly has grasped the power of joy and GRATITUDE in his life and blended it into a missle of powerful gifts to share with all of us here on FANSTORY! SINCERE THANKS! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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With sincere SHAME while in great deeeeLight I celebrate this work without the six stars so greatly deserved for this truly uplifting, enlightening, and celebratory work of pure genuis....perfectly delivered in grand presentation and obviously from the heart and mind of a gentleman who truly has grasped the power of joy and GRATITUDE in his life and blended it into a missle of powerful gifts to share with all of us here on FANSTORY! SINCERE THANKS! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem, Vance. Appreciated, as always! Tony
