Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Thank you for participating in the contest I created.

Congrats on the win.

Now that the contest is over I can tell you this is the entry I voted for.

I thought it was the best of the four.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2016

Thanks so much for your review and, of course, for your vote. You created a very inspiring prompt there.

Comment from J.T.B

Excellent

Well written. Ya hooked me in the beginning, had me nearly yawning in the middle, but then got me laughing at the end. Good story.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2016

Thanks for your review. Sorry you didn't enjoy my middle.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

A good little piece here. nothing worse than a disliked and unpopular teacher. invading your territory is unthinkable!

'Hello Josh' - need closing punctuation before the closing speech marks.

'Dessert must be ready' - same thing here.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2016

Thanks for your feedback.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Very entertaining story. I think Mom was beginning to see for herself that the guy was a jerk the way he came on to her at dinner, so even without a bed full of bugs, he would have been gone the next day. She was not that kind of woman. :)

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

Thanks for your positive review

Comment from Fridayauthor

Excellent

turned around and said
turned around and said,

This is a fun story that answers the contest challenge.

There are a few corrections that are needed...

What was my Math's teacher
or
What was my Math teacher

I heard Mum say
I heard Mum say,

I think she has a radar. (Radar is visual, sonar is hearing.)

Line break after... jokingly.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

Thanks for your feedback. Just one thing: the subject is called Maths in England, not Math which is the American form

reply by Fridayauthor on 29-Jul-2016

Sorry! Thank you for pointing that out. It's nice to learn something new.

reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

You're welcome

Comment from LisaD123

Excellent

I really enjoyed the way that the narrative unraveled. It would be every child's nightmare to find a teacher in their house. The economy of language works in making the story more powerful. The characterisation and setting are both fully realised and the dialogue is authentic. The ending is well-written and the reader is delighted to find that Mum wants Mr Lucas gone, too! Good luck for the contest.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2016

Thanks so much for your thorough review.