From My Porch
list poem11 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
You capture a vivid scene from your porch and make it seem quite real. I enjoyed your bits of alliteration and your addition of sounds too. Best wishes in the List Poem contest and keep enjoying your surroundings- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
You capture a vivid scene from your porch and make it seem quite real. I enjoyed your bits of alliteration and your addition of sounds too. Best wishes in the List Poem contest and keep enjoying your surroundings- Joan
Comment Written 17-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
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Thank you Joan:)
Comment from RoostyNester
Very nice list poem. Sitting on the porch enjoying nature in all its glory! Well written and gives insight to the meaning of the message you portray to the reader. I liked it!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
Very nice list poem. Sitting on the porch enjoying nature in all its glory! Well written and gives insight to the meaning of the message you portray to the reader. I liked it!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2016
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Thank you for the great review:)
Comment from nancyjam
I enjoyed your list of scenes seen
from your porch.
Lots of detailed descriptions of the view.
I enjoyed each image and felt I was there with
you on the porch.
Nice work.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
I enjoyed your list of scenes seen
from your porch.
Lots of detailed descriptions of the view.
I enjoyed each image and felt I was there with
you on the porch.
Nice work.
Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 13-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Thanks Nancy:)
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful contest entry you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
This is a very beautiful contest entry you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Thank you Teri:)
Comment from Ginger Banks
This is a very nice poem I can see the things you describe, in my mind. I like the word pictures you pain of the contrast between what your neighbors yard is like as compared to yours. I wonder what kinds of birds the bird feeders attract - this is the only addition I would say you may wish to add in future poems. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
This is a very nice poem I can see the things you describe, in my mind. I like the word pictures you pain of the contrast between what your neighbors yard is like as compared to yours. I wonder what kinds of birds the bird feeders attract - this is the only addition I would say you may wish to add in future poems. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Thanks Ginger:)
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You're welcome.
Comment from fimarie78
I really enjoyed this poem. You have painted the scene perfectly, so we can really imagine the view from your porch. Nice use of alliteration.
I wasn't sure about the word bouncing in relation to the lilies, but that's just my opinion. Maybe, your lilies bounce, while mine glide/dance in the wind!
best of luck in the contest
Fiona
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
I really enjoyed this poem. You have painted the scene perfectly, so we can really imagine the view from your porch. Nice use of alliteration.
I wasn't sure about the word bouncing in relation to the lilies, but that's just my opinion. Maybe, your lilies bounce, while mine glide/dance in the wind!
best of luck in the contest
Fiona
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Thank you Fiona:)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. To sit on your porch and enjoy your surroundings after a long tiring day, beats many other methods of relaxation.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
A very well-written poem. To sit on your porch and enjoy your surroundings after a long tiring day, beats many other methods of relaxation.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Thanks Sandra:)
Comment from William Ross
very good, nicely done on this, Great job on the free verse of whats seen from your porch. good luck on this and have a great day
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
very good, nicely done on this, Great job on the free verse of whats seen from your porch. good luck on this and have a great day
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Thanks Bill:)
Comment from RodG
Ilikethis poen because
(1) The camera work is so good. You give us a close-up of the speaker's yard and slowly pan outwards until we see. The neighbor'syard andhear those Harley's.
(2) the language appeals to a wide audience. The images are all concrete and appeal to the senses.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
Ilikethis poen because
(1) The camera work is so good. You give us a close-up of the speaker's yard and slowly pan outwards until we see. The neighbor'syard andhear those Harley's.
(2) the language appeals to a wide audience. The images are all concrete and appeal to the senses.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Thanks Rod:) congrats on your second place win!
Comment from Cory G
I felt like I was there on your porch with the flowers and the birds and the bees. A nice summer day...And beyond your own yard, the junky neighbors' and the motorcycle zooming past.
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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
I felt like I was there on your porch with the flowers and the birds and the bees. A nice summer day...And beyond your own yard, the junky neighbors' and the motorcycle zooming past.
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2016
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Thank you Cora:)