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A Scorched Earth Leaves But Dreams

Dactylic Hexameter

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Comment from gloria ...
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What kind of a who? Dactylic Hexameter has got me totally hot under the collar, so now I have to read and find out just what it is.

Ooh I'm guessing a fifteen syllable line?

This is actually a stunning poem, though poet and in fact I'm thinking this might be my new favourite form.

And profound wisdom that we do indeed trample on beauty because we just can't accept it.

Best wishes to you in the contest. This is a good one!

Gloria

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    Thanks so much, Gloria. It's the oddest form in the world and suited for Greek and Latin I suppose. It's also called "Epic meter". Homer and Virgil are good examples. Honestly, I read some Virgil for a while to get a feel and then just wrote this. I didn't chart it out or even try the da da DUM thing. "Piggity, piggity" is the idea, but there's so many substitutions allowed that almost anything is acceptable. So, PLEASE, don't look it up until after the contest. HAHAHA! I am pleased you liked the poem itself. I think I have the gist of it. :))
Comment from LIJ Red
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Those empty lots and condemned blocks in the heart of urban areas are
the most desolate-looking places on the planet. Make great movie sets.
Dum da da Dum da da, Grand and Heroic, eh? okay. Excellent.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    Craziest form ever. More exceptions than rules. That Homer was a trickster. Glad you liked. Thanks so much. :))
Comment from Galactia
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Hi

I don't know much in regaeds to these Dactylic Hexameter poetry form at all, i see you wrote it with 14 kines like a sonnet, it was quite smooth to read and poetically speaking, love the imagery projected through your poem.

Great job
GL in the contest

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    Hi there, Tia
    It's a really crazy form with all kinds of variations and stuff. A headache for sure. I'm just delighted you liked the poem and that's what I was hoping for. Thanks so very much. :))
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Good Evening, Bard,

What a lovely Dactylic Hexameter. What a mouth full, it is. The poem's much better than the title. Thank goodness. LoL

Well-written, my friend, it's so poetic and woeful. I feel the sorrow and grief of the injustice. Someone was hurt by a power-hungry witch, an evil person that kills all that is beautiful and pure. Evil people are such a disappointment and so harmful to the land and to us.

Why when most good people go on with their lives, others continue to be a thorn in our side?

The damnable deeds of woe and greed bring someone to mind. I guess it can apply to a lot of people, hopefully not too many.

Yearning by weakness and wanting.... some people can't get enough. Not enough power in the world can satisfy their little dark and putrid souls.

I like to see the beautiful stallions running wild and free on green fields away from power hungry freaks.

Excellent job! Winner type. Good luck my friend.

Gyspy


 Comment Written 28-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    You have your finger right on the pulse of this and that pleases me to no end. Exactly on the money. The world has more than enough for everybody. It's a shame that some go without when it is soooo unnecessary. Stallions running wild on green fields. Yes, I agree, a beautiful sight without a power hungry freak in site.
    Thanks so much. :))
reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 29-Jun-2016
    :) yes, let's hear it for no power hungry freaks in site. I am happy I was not way off. I love your poem. You have the soul of a poet.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    Emily Dickinson and Paul Simon are cousins. :))
Comment from royowen
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This is an excellent entry in this "dactylic hexameter" contest entry in this definitive comp. I'm afraid the truth of these written words appear to be a general reality of a scorched earth, although the term is usually applied to military tactics in vacating territories, in denying opposing forces provision, but I do like the analogy. Excellent writing, I haven't seen this form before, but this is well written with some great alliteration, and free form text, well done, articulate and expressive with poignancy, good luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    Wow. What a wonderful encouraging review. Yes, indeed it is a term associated with the military and you're correct in catching the analogy. Very astute. So pleased you enjoyed. This is one crazy form. LOL :))
reply by royowen on 29-Jun-2016
    Most welcome
Comment from foxangie123
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I have not a clue the fundamentals of formatting this type of poetry or even heard of it really but I do know this is exceptional writing. Top of the line me I wanna say, Count me in!

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    It's just a crazy form that's for sure. I'm glad you enjoyed the writing, that's the main thing. Thanks so much. :))
Comment from lindalee1
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So true. Love this poem. We must stop seeking more and more or this will be our fate.
Gives the appearance of being a rambler but flowed very nice as I read it. I would recommend this poem as a good read.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. What a nice review. I do ramble actually. LOL I'm glad you caught the beat and found it a smooth read. It's an awfully strange form and meter. You're not the Linda Lee I was madly in love with in the 6th grade are you? LOL!
    Thanks so much. :))
reply by lindalee1 on 07-Sep-2016
    Sorry for the delay, I haven't been on for a while. Not sure about the 6th grade thing. Your name sounds familiar. Are you from Roseburg, Oregon?
Comment from dmt1967
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This poem has a haunted feel to it. I enjoyed reading it and the yellow writing on a black background. The colour code suited the poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.

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 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    So pleased you enjoyed. Thank you kindly. :))
Comment from Hayley Solomon
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Lovely poem, lots of thought, good use of alliteration and assonance. I found the sentence construction long and distracting, though. A few full stops will not hamper rhythm but will enhance sense. If you contract a word like beneath to neath, you should remember, if possible to use an apostrophe ('neath) Looks good in your cursive font.

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 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    Reasonable points. This form though is meant to be long and without stops. It's also referred to as "Epic" of "Heroic" meter. Homer and Virgil are good examples. Essentially, take a deep breath and read the whole thing without stopping. LOL Very different and I'm not sure I'd try it again. I may convert this to a more regular piece after the contest. Good eyes on 'neath. I'll find and fix that. Thanks for the thoughtful review. :))
Comment from nordicgirl
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Perfect dactyeried hesalactic form here sir. Seldom do I see such mastery of crap I have never heard of.
Well, this was a hella great poem. I will have to guess you have the fotm right. Christ. What a mouthful. NG

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
    HAAAAAAAAHAHAHA! My feelings exactly. Glad you liked the poem and were able to express my synopsis of this form in perfect poetic terms. Well done. :))