People Break Laws
Think They Are Above The Law5 total reviews
Comment from Liberty Justice
Interesting array of sounds and words. Poet talks about wild wacky time people have with holiday but dynamite unexpected twist in story. liberty justice
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
Interesting array of sounds and words. Poet talks about wild wacky time people have with holiday but dynamite unexpected twist in story. liberty justice
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
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rednecks do a lot of improvising on holidays
Comment from foxangie123
This is really Kool. I though of the Wild West while reading it. The last part is really clever as well. Nice job penning this poem. A great read.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
This is really Kool. I though of the Wild West while reading it. The last part is really clever as well. Nice job penning this poem. A great read.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016
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thank you kindly
Comment from RYME4U
The poem is well written and smooth to read. You set up a visual picture with your words. Not quite enough "Noise' words but I enjoyed reading it. Good job!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
The poem is well written and smooth to read. You set up a visual picture with your words. Not quite enough "Noise' words but I enjoyed reading it. Good job!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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THANKS FOR YOUR KINDNESS
Comment from cumulus365
The writing prompt specified to use harsh, jarring words to make the reader imagine noise. Line 1 "Guns fire up into the sky " what is the sound of fire up pop, put-put, rat-a-tat. Line 3 Red, blue, lights flash near by use sound wheeze, hiss?
Your last line Someone left a stick of dynamite it lights. What does the sound of a dynamite when it is being lit? like "wheeze, hiss". Other than this, the poem met its poetic format to send a message about the gun after it is triggered. It just needs some sound words to liven it up. Best.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
The writing prompt specified to use harsh, jarring words to make the reader imagine noise. Line 1 "Guns fire up into the sky " what is the sound of fire up pop, put-put, rat-a-tat. Line 3 Red, blue, lights flash near by use sound wheeze, hiss?
Your last line Someone left a stick of dynamite it lights. What does the sound of a dynamite when it is being lit? like "wheeze, hiss". Other than this, the poem met its poetic format to send a message about the gun after it is triggered. It just needs some sound words to liven it up. Best.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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THANKS FOR THE TIP
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You are welcome. Regards.
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You are welcome. Regards.
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Comment from Ginger Banks
Inerestingly noisy bunch, I hope they grow up and get a life, ha. This has life to the poem, all too real in many respects, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
Inerestingly noisy bunch, I hope they grow up and get a life, ha. This has life to the poem, all too real in many respects, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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SO KIND OF YOU TO SAY SO
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You're welcome.
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